How can you polish upyour writing(polish up 润色；使完美 ) The polished points :A.较高级词汇或短语较高级词汇或短语 advanced words and phrases B.丰富的语法结构丰富的语法结构或句式或句式 advanced sentences C.恰当使用过渡词恰当使用过渡词(transitional words)或过渡句或过渡句(transitional sentences) ,使文章结构紧凑使文章结构紧凑 1. The old photo made me think of my happy childhood.2. You can find my house easily.You will have no difficulty in finding my house .You can find my house without any difficulty .较高级的词汇、短语较高级的词汇、短语The old photo reminded me of my happy childhood. 强调句强调句倒装句倒装句 with复合结构复合结构advancedsentences从句从句非谓语动词非谓语动词被动句被动句…It 句型句型 1.从句从句1 1））. .他所做的一切使我们很失望。
他所做的一切使我们很失望2 2））. 60. 60％的同学认为公园不应该收费％的同学认为公园不应该收费3 3））. .我的家乡不再像以前那样了我的家乡不再像以前那样了4 4））. .公园是公众休闲的地方公园是公众休闲的地方 5 5））. .如果收门票，需建大门如果收门票，需建大门﹑﹑围墙，会影响围墙，会影响城市形象城市形象 丰富的语法结构丰富的语法结构或句式或句式 advanced sentences 1.从句从句1））.他所做的一切使我们很失望他所做的一切使我们很失望主语主语从句从句 subject clause））What he did disappointed all of us. 2））. 60％的同学％的同学认为认为公园公园不应该不应该收费 Sixty percent of the students hold the view that entrance fees should be free of charge ．．同位语从句同位语从句appositive clause 表语从句表语从句 predicative clause【【推荐句型推荐句型】】：： …is no longer what it used to be. 3））.我的家乡不再像以前那样了。
我的家乡不再像以前那样了 My hometown is no longer what it used to be. 4））.公园是公众休闲的地方公园是公众休闲的地方 A park is a place where people can rest and enjoy themselves ．． 定语从句定语从句5））.如果收门票，需建大门如果收门票，需建大门﹑围墙，会围墙，会影响城市形象影响城市形象 If entrance fees are charged, it will be necessary to build gates and walls, which will affect the appearance of the city．． 2. It 句型句型我们期望今年有个好收成我们期望今年有个好收成It is expected that there will be a good harvest this year.30%学生认为无必要让孩子知道父母的收入学生认为无必要让孩子知道父母的收入30% of the students think it unnecessary to let children know how much their parents earn. 3.非谓语动词非谓语动词30%同学不赞同这一看法，同学不赞同这一看法， 认为孩子不应认为孩子不应当当…。
30% of my classmates disagree with it, saying children shouldn’t….知道了这点，他们会越来越努力学习知道了这点，他们会越来越努力学习Knowing this, they’ll study harder and harder. 4. with 结构结构作业做完了，那个男孩出去玩了作业做完了，那个男孩出去玩了With the homework finished, the boy went out to play. 门票收入可以用来支付园林工人工资门票收入可以用来支付园林工人工资﹑购购买新花木买新花木 5. 被动句被动句The income from entrance fees can be used to pay the gardeners and buy new plants and flowers．． 使用恰当的连接词使用恰当的连接词逻辑角度逻辑角度合适的过渡性词汇合适的过渡性词汇⑴⑴排序关系排序关系 ⑵⑵并列关系并列关系⑶⑶举例关系举例关系⑷⑷转折关系转折关系⑸⑸因果关系因果关系⑹⑹归纳总结归纳总结⑺⑺递进关系递进关系first; second; last but not least and; as well as; along with; together withfor example; like; such as; but; however; while; though; on the contrarybecause; since; thanks to; as a result; therefore in a word; in short; to sum up; in conclusionwhat’s more; besides; to make matters worse; what’s worse; worse still; furthermore Li Ming used to be a healthy boy, ______ over a year ago, he got into the habit of eating a lot of junk food and snacks. _______, he spent a lot of time lying on the sofa, watching TV, and did little exercise. ____________, he put on so much weight that he found it difficult to climb the stairs. 李明曾是一位健李明曾是一位健康的男孩康的男孩, 但是但是就在一年多前就在一年多前, 他养成了吃垃他养成了吃垃圾食品和零食的习惯。
圾食品和零食的习惯此外此外, 他躺在沙发上他躺在沙发上看电视的时间多又很少锻炼看电视的时间多又很少锻炼结果结果, 他胖了他胖了很多以致爬楼梯都感到困难很多以致爬楼梯都感到困难As a result butBesides实战实战1 This village is very small. It has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. It has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are richer than before. Now it is taking on a new look.This village is very small，，which has nearly 100 families and about 500 people. It used to be very poor. However, it has changed a lot since 1978 . People here are leading a richer and happier life than before. Now it is taking on a new look.实战实战2: Please try to make it better! 实战实战3：： 最近，你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一最近，你校同学正在参加某英文报组织的一场讨论。
讨论的主题是：公园要不要收门票？请你根场讨论讨论的主题是：公园要不要收门票？请你根据下表提供的信息，给报社写一封信，客观地介绍讨据下表提供的信息，给报社写一封信，客观地介绍讨论情况60%的同学认为的同学认为1、不应收门票、不应收门票2、公园是公众休闲的地方、公园是公众休闲的地方收费会使一些人远离公园收费会使一些人远离公园3、如收票，需建大门、围、如收票，需建大门、围墙，会影响城市形象墙，会影响城市形象40%的同学认为的同学认为1、应收门票，用来支付园、应收门票，用来支付园林工人工资和购买新花木林工人工资和购买新花木2、但票价不宜高、但票价不宜高1、、 [写作要求写作要求] 使用使用5个句子表达表格中全部的内容个句子表达表格中全部的内容2、、 参考词汇：门票：参考词汇：门票：entrance fee Show and evaluate 展示与评价展示与评价 Sixty percent of the students hold the view that a public park should be free of charge, for people need a place where they can rest and enjoy themselves. Without doubt, charging entrance fees will keep some people away from the park. What’s more, it will become necessary to build gates and walls, which will do harm to the appearance of a city. While 40% think that fees should be charged because the income from entrance fees can be used to pay the gardeners and buy new plants and flowers．．However, they suggest that fees should be charged low. summary------覆盖所有的要点覆盖所有的要点------应用了较高级的词汇和丰富的语法结应用了较高级的词汇和丰富的语法结构构------有效地使用了连接成分，使全文结构有效地使用了连接成分，使全文结构紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚。
紧凑，行文连贯，条理清楚要要 点点 全全连连 接接 巧巧 句型多样化句型多样化一篇好文章的标准：一篇好文章的标准： 高考写作高分策略高考写作高分策略养兵千日养兵千日用兵一时用兵一时 多读、多记、多写 积累高级词汇、 短语和句型， 并熟练掌握其用法冷静细心切忌写错单词不留 “余” 地切忌“留白”书写工整切忌潦草 。