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1、高考写作高考写作1评分标准2内容框架第四部分：书面表达（满分第四部分：书面表达（满分25分）分）假设你是卜假设你是卜曼宜，你购买了一部某曼宜，你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机，外国公司生产的手机，因有质量问题，要求该因有质量问题，要求该公司更换。请根据下列公司更换。请根据下列要点，用英文写一封电要点，用英文写一封电子邮件。子邮件。要点：要点：1.问题：问题：2.手机不响铃，不能发短手机不响铃，不能发短信；该产品已售完，无信；该产品已售完，无法更换；型号新，无配法更换；型号新，无配件，无法维修。件，无法维修。3.要求：公司应尽快予以要求：公司应尽快予以更换。更换。注意：注意：1.词数为词数为10
2、0左右；左右；2.参考词汇：配件参考词汇：配件sparepart3.电子邮件的开头和结尾电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入你已为你写好（不计入你所写词数）；所写词数）；4.已给出的电子邮件的开已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。卡。WhenIboughtithome,Ifoundtherewereseveralproblemsaboutthequalityofthemobilephone.Thereisnoringinthenewmobilephone,besides,itcannotbeusedtosendshortmessages.WhenIwantback
3、tothelocalcompany,themanagertoldmethisproducthassoldoutandthatIwasntabletochangeit.Whatsworse,thisstylemobilephoneisanewproduct,thereisnosparepartandcanttoberepaired.Theseproblemsworriesmemost.Ihopeyourcompanywouldchangeitformeassoonaspossible.【分析】基本表达清楚；时态运用恰当；采用了些简单连接手法；内容较连贯；准确性不够。中国式英语语态错误动词用法错误
4、单词误用15第四部分：书面表达（满分第四部分：书面表达（满分25分）分）假设你是卜曼宜，你购假设你是卜曼宜，你购买了一部某外国公司生买了一部某外国公司生产的手机，因有质量问产的手机，因有质量问题，要求该公司更换。题，要求该公司更换。请根据下列要点，用英请根据下列要点，用英文写一封电子邮件。文写一封电子邮件。要点：要点：1.问题：问题：2.手机不响铃，不能发短手机不响铃，不能发短信；该产品已售完，无信；该产品已售完，无法更换；型号新，无配法更换；型号新，无配件，无法维修。件，无法维修。2.要求：公司应尽快予以更要求：公司应尽快予以更换。换。注意：注意：1.词数为词数为100左右；左右；2.参考词
5、汇：配件参考词汇：配件sparepart3.电子邮件的开头和结尾已电子邮件的开头和结尾已为你写好（不计入你所为你写好（不计入你所写词数）；写词数）；4.已给出的电子邮件的开头已给出的电子邮件的开头和结尾不得抄入答题卡。和结尾不得抄入答题卡。However,someproblemsarepresentedwiththismobilephone.Inthefirstplace,whentherearephonecalls,themobilephonejustcantring.Inaddition,shortmessagescanneverbesent.whenIcamebacktothemallf
6、orexchange,Iwasdisappointedtobetoldthatthismodelhadbeensoldout.Worsestill,itisanewmodel,thusnosparepartisavailableatthemoment.NowherecanIhavethisphonerepaired.Maybetherearesomealternativestohandlethiscase,butIhopeitcanbedealtwithandsolvedassoonaspossible.Inbrief,mypersonalviewpointisthatyoureplaceth
7、ismobilephone.Imlookingforwardtoyourreply.【分析】全文共九个句子,其中有两个时间状语从句,一个并列句;一个倒装句;一个表语从句。运用了however,inthefirstplace,inaddition,worsestill,inbrief五个过渡性词汇。运用了available,alternative两个较高级词语。whenwhenbutNowherecanIisthatHoweverInthefirstplace,Inaddition,WorsestillInbrief,availablealternatives251评分标准keeptothepo
8、intaccuracy(spellingandgrammar)brightpoints(words,phrasesandsentence)natural2内容框架1真题一（环境保护一次性筷子的使用）(how to make your content logical)2真题二（周末集体活动介绍一个地方）(how to make bright points for your article)3真题三（讨论动物园是否应搬出市区） (how to make accuracy)4历年真题翻译练习真真真真题题一一一一假如你叫李华，是一名高中学生。根据下面内容，写一封倡议书，呼吁人们停止使用一次性筷子。注意
9、：1开头和结尾已给出。2字数100左右。3参考词汇：rejectthrowawaychopsticks写作步写作步写作步写作步骤骤1扩展-逻辑性-分段2翻译-亮点-词与句3检查-错误假如你叫李华，是一名高中学生。根据下面内容，写一封倡议书，呼吁人们停止使用一次性筷子。注意：1开头和结尾已给出。2字数100左右。3参考词汇：rejectthrowawaychopsticks目前状态导致结果采取措施1扩展扩展砍伐森林会导致很多严重的环境问题。面对这样的情况，我们应该采取一些措施来保护森林了。目前，中国的森林正遭受着严重的破坏。22翻翻翻翻译译第一部分第一部分第一部分第一部分Doyouknowwhy
10、sandstormsandlandslidesarehappeningmorefrequentlythaneverinrecentyears?Accordingtotherecentstatistics,中国正面临着严重的森林破坏问题。中国的森林覆盖率仅为13%，但是中国每年要生产大约450亿双筷子，而这些筷子就需要我们砍伐2500万棵树。有环保主义者警告，照这样的速度，中国可能在20年内就要砍伐所有的森林。面临着森林破坏问题覆盖率大约450亿2500万警告灭绝beconfrontedwiththeproblemofdeforestationbecoveredwithapproximately
11、45billion25millionwarndieout中国正面临着严重的森林破坏问题。中国的森林覆盖率仅为13%，但是中国每年要生产大约450亿双筷子而这些筷子就需要我们砍伐2500万棵树。有环保主义者警告，照这样的速度，中国可能在20年内就要砍伐所有的森林。Chinaisconfrontedwiththeseriousproblemofdeforestation.13%ofchinaiscoveredwithforest,butchinaproducesapproximately45billionpairsofthrowawaychopsticks.Thesechopsticksneedu
12、stocutdown25milliontrees.SomeenvironmentalistswarnthepublicthattheforestofChinawilldieoutafter20yearsbythisspeed.Chinaisconfrontedwiththeseriousproblemofforestdestruction.13%ofchinaiscoveredwithforest,butchinaproducesapproximately45billionpairsofthrowawaychopsticks.Thesechopsticksneedustocutdown25mi
13、lliontrees.SomeenvironmentalistswarnthepublicthattheforestofChinawilldieoutafter20yearsbythisspeed. Confronted withtheseriousproblemofdeforestation.13%ofchinais covered withforest,however approximately45billionpairsofthrowawaychopsticksare produced byChinaannually,whichmeansthatweneedtocut down25mil
14、liontrees.Therefore,someenvironmentalistswarnthepublicthattheforestofChinawilldie out after20yearsbythisspeed.被动语态被动语态定语从句定语从句连词连词分词作状语分词作状语第二部分第二部分第二部分第二部分砍伐森林会导致很多环境问题，例如，水土流失，废气排放增多，温室效应。人类将会遭受一个由自己带来的灾难。砍伐森林水土流失废气排放增多遭受Excessive deforestationsoil erosiontheincreaseemissionofcarbondioxidesufferfr
15、om砍伐森林会导致很多环境问题，例如，水土流失，废气排放增多，温室效应.人类将会遭受一个由自己带来的灾难。Excessive deforestationwilllead to a series of environmentalchanges,for instance,soilerosion,theincreaseemissionofcarbondioxide,especiallythegreenhouseeffect.Its surethatthehumenwillsuffer fromadisaterwhichiscausedbyourselves.第三部分第三部分第三部分第三部分所以，我们
16、是该采取一些措施来保护我们的森林资源了。itstimethatsbdidsth.万能措施一万能措施一万能措施一万能措施一Thelongtermgoalofenvironmentalprotectionistopreventthecreationofpollutantsandwastesandtoproducedurable,recyclablegoods.万能措施二万能措施二万能措施二万能措施二In view ofsustainable development,theexploitationofmineralresourcesshouldbeunderstrictgovernment.万能理由
17、三万能理由三万能理由三万能理由三Mankindshouldjoinhandinhandtocreateaninhabitableworldforthemselvesandtheiroffspring.33检查检查 纠错纠错Do you know why sandstorms and landslides are happening more frequently than ever in recent years? According to the recent statistics,theyreduetothedisappearingofforests.Dearfriends,doyoukn
18、owtheywereeatlenbyyouwhenusethechopsticks?Everyyearitproducts45billionchopsticksfromChina.Theforestsonlycover13percentsinChina.Theseneed25millionoftrees.SomeonewhocarestheenvironmenthasalarmedthatChinamayuseoutallofitsforestsaccordingtothisspeed!ItmeansthattheenvironmentofChinawillbreakdownentirely.
19、Sopleasethrowawaychopsticksnow!usingthethrowawaychopsticksmaykillourforests.Chinawhoseforestsonlycovers13%ofitsland,produces45000000000throwawaychopstickseveryyear.Thisneeds2500milliontreestobecutdown.Whatsworse,someenvironmentalistsevenwarnedthatifwecontinueusingthesechopsticksatthisspeed,itwillbep
20、ossibleforChinatouseupallitsforestresourcesinonly20years.(Atthattime,wehumanbeingscouldnotliveontheplannetanylongerandtherewaybenolivingthingontheearth,either.Whatafrighteningthingitis!)Soweshouldnotusethechopsticksanymoreinordertomakeabetterenvironmentforouryoungergenerationandforourselves.Dearfrie
21、nds,letstakeactionfromnowon!必必必必备词汇备词汇disaster,flood,hurricane,lighting,thunderstorm,tornado,volcano,wave,ash,furniture,feather,fur,latitude,equator,longitudebury,occur,strike,ruin,erupt,eruption.current,tropical,violent,previous, 常用表达常用表达常用表达常用表达污染大气无节制地开发资源乱扔垃圾砍伐森林冰川融化土地沙漠化渡过灾难回收再利用垃圾减少废气排放最大化地利用资
22、源pollutetheatmosphereexploitnaturalresourcesexcessivelylitterarounddeforestthepolesmeltdesertificationsurvivethedisasterrecyclethegarbagereducetheexhaustemissionmaximizetheuseofresources真题二（仿写）假定你是一名导游，你将接待一个外国旅游团。请你拟定一份100词左右的导游词向客介绍青岛。要点如下：1.青岛位于山东半岛的南端，面积10654平方公里，总人口699万；2.青岛三面环海，大海是青岛的魅力所在；3.古代
23、名人如李白，蒲松龄，康有为等的足迹遍布青岛各地，留下了华美的诗文。4.青岛是一座现代化城市，现代化的工厂和楼房林立。参考词汇；半岛peninsulaParisisthecapitalandlargestcityofFrance,situatedontheRiverSeine.Itisoneofthemostbeautifulcitiesintheworldandisvisitiedbymorethaneight milliontouristseveryyear.cover an area of with a population of QingdaoisabeautifulcityofChin
24、a,situatedinthesouthofShandongpeninsula,coveringanareaof10,654squarekilometersandwithapopulationof6.99million.FranceisEuropesthirdlargestcountryandfacestheUnitedKingdomacosstheEnglishChannel.FlorenceisanItaliancity which became famous because of theRenaissance.Qingdaofacestheseawhichbecomesfamousbec
25、auseoftheblueseawater.ManyofFlorencesmostbeautifulpaintingsandsculptureswereproducedbygreatartistssuchasLeonardodaVinciandMichelangelo.GreecesbestwriterslivedinancientAthens.Theirworkhasinfluencedwritersever since.poet essay celebrity ChinasbestwriterstravelledaroundancientQingdao.ManyofChinasmostbe
26、autifulessaysandpoemswereproducedbygreatartistssuchasLiBai,PuSonglinandKangYouwei.internationalpossessmodernQingdaoisabeautifulcityofChina,situatedinthesouthofShandongpeninsula,coveringanareaof10,654spuarekilometersandwithapopulationof6.99million.Qingdaofacestheseawhichbecomesfamousbecauseoftheblues
27、eawater.ChinasbestwriterstravelledaroundancientQingdao.ManyofChinasmostbeautifulessaysandpoemswereproducedbygreatartistssuchasLiBai,PuSonglinandKangYouwei.Qingdaoisainternationalcity,whichpossessesagreatmanymodernbuildingsandfactories.1连接词2框架词3内容词1连接词汇连接词汇表列举：forexample、forinstance、thatistosay表补充：be
28、sides、inaddition、moreover表对比：on（the）onehandontheotherhand,inspiteof表原因：becauseof、thanksto、dueto、owingto、asaresultof表结果：therefore、thus、asaresult、so表结论：toconclude、inaword、inbrief、tosumupin a nutshell in conclusion表转折：however、nevertheless、yet汉语意思汉语意思普通用词普通用词亮点词汇亮点词汇不同的越来越面临重视很多讨论关注发生意识到differentmoreand
29、morefaceemphasizemanydiscussionattentionhappenrealizevarious,varyfromgrowing,increasingconfrontattachimportancetovast,aoverwhelmingmajorityof,quiteafew,anarmyof,anoceanof,aseaof,amultitudeofdebate,controversyfocusoccurbeawareof汉语汉语意思意思普通词汇普通词汇亮点词汇亮点词汇认为重要的支持不同意喜欢好的坏的thinkbelieve,hold,argue,maitain,h
30、arbortheideathat,taketheattitudethat,holdtheviewthat,itiswidelysharedthat,itisuniversallyackowledgedthat,tomymind,asfarasIamconcernedimportantessential,vital,significant,notablesupportbeinfavorof,approveofdisagreedisapproveof,frownonsthlikeprefer,feelinclinedto,bekeenon,befondof,appealtogoodbenefica
31、l,positive,favorable,perfect,pleasurablebaddreadful,unfavorable,poor,adverse普通词汇普通词汇亮点词汇亮点词汇名词reasonfactor动词causecontribute to, attribute to , lead to , result from, account for连词becausesince , in that , seeing that, now that普通词汇普通词汇亮点词汇亮点词汇第一项firstin the first place, to begin with, first and foremo
32、st第二项secondin the second place, furthermore, besides第三项thirdin the third place, finally, last but not leastPage43内容内容词汇1解决解决2损害3给与4培养5优势Solve,dealwith,copewith,handle,resolve,address,tackleDamage,hurt,injure,harm,impair,undermine,jeopardizeGive,offer,render,impart,provide,supply,affordDevelop,cultiv
33、ate,fosterAdvantage,merit,virtue,benefit,upside,strengthPage446缺陷缺陷7使迷惑8重要的9保护10确保Disadvantage,demerit,drawback,downside,weaknessPuzzle,bewilder,perplex,baffleProtect,conserve,preserveKey,crucial,critical,important,significant,vital,substantial,indispensable,imperativeAssure,ensure,guarantee,pledgeP
34、age4511消除消除12导致13宣称14有益的15影响Eliminate,clear,remove,clearup,takeaway,smoothawayLeadto,bringabout,resultin,cause,sparkoff,conduceto,procure,induce,generateAllege,assert,declare,claimUseful,helpful,beneficial,profitable,rewarding，advantageousInfluence,impact,effectPage4616明明显的的17 占18与相比19展示20大约Clear,ob
35、vious,evident,self-evident,manifest,apparent,crystal-clearComprise,takeup,accountfor,constitute,consistof,makeup,occupy,hold,composeComparedwith，comparedto，incomparisonwith，incomparisonto，bycomparisonwith，bycomparisontoShow,reveal,illustrate,demonstrate,depict,present,represent,describeApproximately
36、，almost，about，around，nearly，roughly真题三赞成迁出赞成迁出反对迁出反对迁出1 游客多，交通堵塞2 郊区环境好1 建于1906年，中外闻名2 搬迁易造成动物死亡假设你是李华，最近国内一家英文报纸正在讨论北京动物园是否应该迁出市区。以下是你所在班级的讨论情况。请你给该报写一封信，反映讨论结果。扩展第一段引话题第二段正反议论第三段总结第一段引话题Whenaskedabout theiropinion of career and family,peoplealwaysresponddifferently.Somepeopledeem it more important
37、 to pursue their career,whiletherearealwaysotherpeoplewhoargue that family should be the number one in ones life.Punctualityisanecessaryhabitinallpublicaffairsincivilizedsociety.Withoutit,nothingcouldeverbebroughttoaconclusion;everythingwouldbeinastateofchaos.Nocreaturehasreceivedmorepraiseandabuset
38、hanthecommongardensnail.Cookedinwine,snailsareagreatluxuryinvariouspartsoftheworld.第2段正反议论赞成迁出赞成迁出反对迁出反对迁出1 游客多，交通堵塞2 郊区环境好1 建于1906年，中外闻名2 搬迁易造成动物死亡Theothersideofthepictureisquitetheopposite,OnemansmeatisanothermanspoisonSomepeopletaketheattitudethat.canproducepositiveeffectsonusinmorethanoneway.Fir
39、stofallFurthermoreWhatsmoreOthersharbortheideathat.maybringaboutnegativeimpactsonus.ForonethingForanother第三段总结（个人观点）Perhapsthereisanelementoftruthinboththesepictures.Iholdthat.讨论cellphonecareerandfamilyWhenaskedabouttheiropinionofcareerandfamily,peoplealwaysresponddifferently.Somepeopledeemitmoreimp
40、ortanttopursuetheircareer,whiletherearealwaysotherpeoplewhoarguethatfamilyshouldbethenumberoneinoneslife.Itgoeswithoutanyquestionthatcareerplaysakeyroleinourlife.Intheveryfirstplace,careercangiveusanaimtoliveon.Withoutcareer,muchofourlivingtimewillbecertainlywasted.Whatsmore,careercanprovideuswitham
41、eanstoliveon.Mostofthepeopleearntheirincomefromajob.Ontheotherhand,familyisalsoanindispensablepartoflife,asmanypeoplewilladmit.Familyisalwaysregardedasaplacewherewecanescapefromtroublesinlife.Inaddition,wecanobtainasenseofbelongingtofromfamily.Withoutit,anyonewillfeellonelyanddesperate.Inmyopinion,c
42、areerandfamilyarenotinoppositiontoeachother.Rather,theycanenhanceeachothersothatoneslifecanbecomebetterandbetter.Therefore,itsnotachoicebetweenrightandwrong,butonebetweenidealandpractical.Page591北京动物园建于1906年，有一段很重要的历史。Page60Page61Page62Page63Page64Page65Page66定定语从句和分从句和分词作状作状语Beijingzoowasbuiltin190
43、6andithasaveryimportanthistory.Beijingzoo,whichwasbuiltin1906,hasaveryimportanthistory.Builtin1906,Beijingzoohasaveryimportanthistory.datebacktoPage67这个公寓位于芳草街，离建新华文学校只有一站。Page68LocatedonFangcaoStreet,thisflatisonlyonestationfromJianxinHuawenSchoolbybusNo.11.Page69江城位于长江边，风景优美，适合居住。Page70Settledalon
44、gthebanksofChinaslongestriver,theYangtzeriver,Jiangchengisabeautifultownforpeopletolivein.Page712我们之所以要去种树，是因为树可以给我们提供新鲜的空气。Page72Page73原因句型原因句型Thereasonwhy+句子isthat+句子（.的原因是.）Page74Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycanprovideuswithfreshair.Thereasonwhywehavetogrowtreesisthattheycansupplyfresha
45、irforus.Page75thereasonswhyIholdtheviewthatnameisveryessentialtoindividualsareasfollows,Page763草样年华这本书太有趣了，我看了好多遍还是大笑不止。Page77Page78倒装句倒装句So+形容词+be+主词+that+句子（如此.以致于.）Page79SointerestingisthebooknamedTheAgeofYouththatIreaditmanytimesandcanthelplaughing.Page80Neverhadadreamcometrue.Impossibleisnothin
46、g.ONLYsodoI,soIdo,neitherdoIasPage814时间是如此珍贵，我们经不起浪费它。Page82Sopreciousistimethatwecantaffordtowasteit.Page835尽管一些西亚国家很富有，但是他们的民主制度是很难令人满意的。Page84Page85Adj.+as+Subject（主词）+be,S+V（虽然.）Page86RichasthecountriesinwestAsiaare,thedemocracythereisbynomeanssatisfactory.Page87bynomeans=innoway=onnoaccount一点也不
47、Page88我我们绝对不能忽略知不能忽略知识的价的价值。Page89Onnoaccountcanwe+V（我们绝对不能.）Page90Onnoaccountcanweignorethevalueofknowledge.Page916你愈努力，你愈进步。Page92结婚后就没有歇婚后就没有歇过Page93the+er+S+VThe+more+Adj.+S+V,Page94Theharderyouwork,themoreprogressyoumake.Page95我们书读愈多，我们愈有学问。Page96Themorebooksweread,themorelearnedwebecome.Page97
48、Page987该是有关当局采取适当的措施来解决交通问题的时候了。Page99Itistime+S+过去式（该是.的时候了）Page100虚虚拟语气气Itistimetheauthoritiestookproperstepstosolvethetrafficproblems.Page101那个老奶奶对那个小猫很好，就像它是她女儿一样。多亏了你的帮助要不然我也不可能这么早完成这项工作。如果我有500万，我就买辆宝马。Page102Page103Page1048帮助别人是值得的。Page105Page106Page107Page108Itpaysto+V（.是值得的。）Itisworth+doing
49、.Page109Itpaystohelpothers.Page1109我们应该养成早睡早起的习惯。Page111getintothehabitof+Ving=makeitaruleto+V（养成.的习惯）Page112Page113Weshouldgetintothehabitofkeepinggoodhours.Page11410遵守诺言是多么重要的事！Page115感感叹句句Whata+Adj.+N+S+V!=How+Adj.+a+N+V!（多么.！）Page116Whatanimportantthingitistokeepourpromise!Howimportantathingitis
50、tokeepourpromise!Page117Page118Thisisthemosteffectivepesticidethatihaveeverseen.Page119Page120Thesearethemostbeautifuleyesthatihaveeverseen.Page12111我们应尽全力去达成我们的人生目标。Page122Page123doonesutmostto+V=doonesbest（尽全力去.）sparenoeffortsto+V（不遗余力的）Page124Weshoulddoourutmosttoachieveourgoalinlife.Page12512我们在
51、怎么强调保护环境也不为过。Page126cantemphasizetheimportanceoftoomuch.（再怎么强调.的重要性也不为过。）Page127Wecannotemphasizetheimportanceofprotectingtheenvironmenttoomuch.Page12813我我们很久都没有很久都没有见了了。Page129S+现在完成式。Since+S+过去式Page130Ithasbeenalongtimesincewelastmet.Page13114不可否认的，男人的地位已经大不如从前了。Page132Thereisnodenyingthat+S+V.（不可否认的.）Page133Thereisnodenyingthatthestatusofmalehasgonefrombadtoworse.Page13415毫无疑问的我们的教育制度令人不满意。Page135Thereisnodoubtthat+句子（毫无疑问的.）Page136Thereisnodoubtthatoureducationalsystemleavessomethingtobedesired.Page137thankyouforyourcooperation
