高三英语高分NMET书面表达技巧课件

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1、书面表达书面表达训练技巧训练技巧写作基础三大要素：写作基础三大要素：1 1。基础环节。基础环节（1 1） 句型构架句型构架 （2 2） 错误分析错误分析 （3 3） 基础过渡性训练基础过渡性训练2。行文方法指导行文方法指导（1 1）文法基本常识）文法基本常识（2 2）文体的种类）文体的种类（3 3）范文指导）范文指导（4 4）连贯性表达）连贯性表达 3 3。练习环节。练习环节（1 1）高考例题点评）高考例题点评（2 2）学生习作点评）学生习作点评（3 3）书面表达练习）书面表达练习 习作练习习作练习 短文改错短文改错 改写练习改写练习 润色练习润色练习养成良好的写作习惯养成良好的写作习惯一、书

2、写规范，卷面整洁。一、书写规范，卷面整洁。写作质量指内容和书面形式，不可或缺。写作质量指内容和书面形式，不可或缺。二、审清题目，提炼要点。二、审清题目，提炼要点。如，叙述故事包括：时间、地点、人物、事如，叙述故事包括：时间、地点、人物、事件（起因，背景，发展和结局等）件（起因，背景，发展和结局等）三、组词造句，组句成篇三、组词造句，组句成篇四、仔细检查，认真修改四、仔细检查，认真修改书面表达方法与步骤书面表达方法与步骤方法：方法：（1）常常用用词词汇汇储储备备：从从基基本本词词汇汇和和应应用用入入手手，牢牢记记并并能能使使用用核核心心词词、主主动动词词汇汇1000-1500左右。左右。（2）适

3、适当当背背一一些些合合适适的的范范文文：如如新新概概念念上上的的小小文文，高高考考参参考考答答案案等等。主主要要是是背背常用的句型和短语词组。常用的句型和短语词组。（3）组组织织文文体体结结构构注注意意层层次次有有序序，正确完整有逻辑性。正确完整有逻辑性。（4）加强连贯表达基本功的训练：）加强连贯表达基本功的训练：特特别别注注意意使使用用过过渡渡词词语语和和逻逻辑辑关联词。关联词。（5）注意支撑句段要紧扣主题。）注意支撑句段要紧扣主题。步骤步骤:（1）拟拟基基本本点点找找出出5-6个个动动词词或或搭配，进入基本点。搭配，进入基本点。（2）连词成句）连词成句给出时间、地点、人称等给出时间、地点、

4、人称等（3）连句成文）连句成文组句搭架，打好草稿组句搭架，打好草稿4）润润色色如如简简单单句句可可变变成成复复合合句句，改改变变句句型型，是是句句子子丰丰满满起起来来。作作到到连连贯贯流流畅畅有有可可能能加分加档。加分加档。（5）检检查查完完善善有有40分分钟钟时时间间查查拼拼写写、用用词、事态、连词、标点、内容等。词、事态、连词、标点、内容等。（4）润色）润色改改变变句句型型，如如：简简单单句句可可变变成成复复合合句句，让让句句子子丰丰满满起起来来。使使用用新新颖颖词词汇汇或搭配，让句子连贯活泼流畅。或搭配，让句子连贯活泼流畅。（5）检查完善）检查完善查查拼拼写写、用用词词、时时态态、连连词

5、词、标标点点、内容等。内容等。掌握写作规范技巧一、一、写对格式：不同文体要求规范写对格式：不同文体要求规范二、二、写好三部分：开头、中间、结尾写好三部分：开头、中间、结尾三、三、规范三写：大小写；规范三写：大小写；拼写和书写拼写和书写规范达标规范达标四、四、突破四关：要点全面、语言无误、突破四关：要点全面、语言无误、表达清楚、行文连贯。表达清楚、行文连贯。例题：例题：2002NMET60%的同学认为的同学认为40%的同学认为的同学认为1.不应收门票不应收门票1.应收门票但票价不宜高应收门票但票价不宜高2.公园是公众休闲的地方公园是公众休闲的地方2.支付园林工人工资支付园林工人工资3.如收门票，

6、需建大门如收门票，需建大门3.购买新花木购买新花木会影响城市形象会影响城市形象1。审题。审题（1）确定文体：）确定文体：写一封信写一封信（2）内容要求：介绍讨论的情况）内容要求：介绍讨论的情况（3）讨论主题：公园要不要收门票）讨论主题：公园要不要收门票（4）确定人称：第三人称）确定人称：第三人称（5）确定时态：一般现在时、将来时）确定时态：一般现在时、将来时必要时用被动语态必要时用被动语态2。提炼要点。提炼要点（1）不收费）不收费freeofcharge（2）公众需要休闲场所）公众需要休闲场所peopleneedanenjoyableplace（3）建大门、围墙会影响城市形象）建大门、围墙会影

7、响城市形象doharmtothecityappearance（4）低收费）低收费bechargedlow（5）支付工资）支付工资payfor（6）购买新花木）购买新花木buyplantsandyoungtrees3。紧扣要点，连词成句紧扣要点，连词成句(1)60%ofthestudentsbelievethatapublicparkshouldbecharged.(2)Peopleneedaplacewheretheycanrestandenjoythemselves.(3)Tobuildgatesandwallswilldoharmtotheappearanceofacity.（4）40%t

8、hinkthatfeesshouldbechargedlow.（5）Youneedmoneytopaygardenersandworkers.（6）Youneedtobuyplantsandyoungtrees.4。分清层次，连句成篇。分清层次，连句成篇(2002NMET)DearEditor,Im writing to tell you about the discussionwevehadaboutwhetheranentrancefeeshouldbechargedforparks.Opinionsaredividedonthequestion.60%ofthestudentsareag

9、ainsttheideaof entrance fees. They believe a public parkshould be free of charge. People need a placewhere they can rest and enjoy themselves.Chargingentrancefeeswillnodoubtkeepsomepeopleaway.Whatismore,itwillbecomenecessarytobuildgatesandwalls,whichwilldoharmtotheappearanceofacity.Ontheotherhand, 4

10、0% think that fees should becharged because you need money to paygardenersandotherworkers,andtobuyplants and young trees. They suggest,however,feesshouldbechargedlow.Yourtruly,LiHua一、文体一、文体 高考书面表达的体裁有三种：高考书面表达的体裁有三种：1.应用文（应用文（practicalwriting)应应用用文文包包括括书书信信、日日记记、便便条条、通通知知、讲讲演演稿稿、履履历历表表等等。通通常常应应用用文文都

11、都较较简简短短，它它有有自自己己的的固固定定格格式式，有有些些应应用用文文连连措措辞辞都都是是相相对对固固定定的的，如如：欠欠条条、请请柬柬等等。应应用用文文重重在在应应用用、力力求平实、准确简洁。求平实、准确简洁。应用文范文应用文范文MayIhaveattention,please?Ihaveannouncementtomake.TheStudentsUnionisgoingtoholdapartyonSaturdayevening,August15,towelcomeourfriendsfromtheUnitedStates.Thepartywillbeheldintheroofgarde

12、noftheMainBuilding.Itwillbeginat7:30pm.Therewillbemusic,dancing,singing,gamesandexchangingofgifts.Willeverybodypleasebringalongasmallgiftforthispurpose?Remembertowrapitup,signyournameandwriteafewwordsofgoodwishes.Dontforget:7:30,Saturdayevening,roofgarden,MainBuilding.Theressuretobealotoffun.Everybo

13、dyiswelcome.2.说明文说明文(expositorywriting)说明文是用说明的方法以简明的文说明文是用说明的方法以简明的文字介绍事物的形状、性质、构造、变字介绍事物的形状、性质、构造、变化、成因、结果、功用、特征的文章化、成因、结果、功用、特征的文章。写好说明文要抓事物特征，安排好写好说明文要抓事物特征，安排好合理的说明顺序：合理的说明顺序：1）时间）时间2）空间）空间3）逻辑逻辑4）认识认识总体结构：总体结构：1）提出对象）提出对象2）分析说分析说明明3）归纳小结归纳小结写说明文要求你作到：写说明文要求你作到：1）条理清楚条理清楚2）层次分明层次分明3）语言简洁语言简洁4）用

14、词准确用词准确5）具有严格的科学性具有严格的科学性说明文范文：说明文范文：TheWorldTradeOrganization(WTO),foundedonJanuary1,1995,aimstoencourageinternationaltradetoflowasfreelyaspossible,makingsurethattradeagreementsarerespectedandthatanydisputescanbesettled.Inthefiveyearssinceitsfounding,theWTOhasbecomewell-knownasoneoftheworldsmostpow

15、erfuleconomicorganizations,takingitsplacealongsidetheWorldBankandinternationalMonetaryFund.TheWTO,withitsheadofficeinGeneva,has135memberswith30morewaitingtojoin.3.记叙文记叙文（narrativeessays）记记叙叙文文即即“故故事事”：他他人人的的故故事事或或自自己己的的故故事事。故故事事最最显显著著的的特特点点是是它它有有情情节节，而而故故事事的的情情节节由由故故事事的的起起因因、发发展展、高高潮潮、结结局局组组成成。内内容容包

16、包括括写写作作角角度度及及目目的的、来来龙龙去去脉脉、关关键键情情节节等等；交交代代清清楚楚人人物物、时时间间、地点、事件等。地点、事件等。写记叙文要求你做到：写记叙文要求你做到：1）按事件发生的先后顺序叙述具体完整；）按事件发生的先后顺序叙述具体完整；2）记叙文大多按时间顺序叙述；也有倒叙）记叙文大多按时间顺序叙述；也有倒叙或穿插手法；或穿插手法；3）要重点突出，内容完整，条理清楚，详）要重点突出，内容完整，条理清楚，详略得当；主次分明；略得当；主次分明；4）记叙文一般记述过去发生的事，多用过）记叙文一般记述过去发生的事，多用过去时态写。去时态写。记叙文范文记叙文范文：MrsMyraWebb

17、,whowastoldbydoctorsthatshewouldneverhearagain,livedforsixyearsinaworldofsilence.ButyesterdaysheheardablackbirdsinginthegardenofherhomeatBrighton,Sussex.“Myhearingiscomingback-anditswonderful.”shesaid.MrsWebb,26,issaidtobethefirstwomaninBritaintohaveherhearingbroughtbackbyacupuncture,theneedletreatm

18、entwidelypracticedinChina.Aftersixmonthstreatmentshecanlistentomusicagain,carryonaconversationwiththeaidofahearingaid,andshehasgotajobasatypistwiththeSouthEasternElectricityBoard.4.议论文议论文（persuasive/argumentativeessays)提出论点并给出论据支撑、提出论点并给出论据支撑、表明观点。表明观点。（1）引论）引论（2）本论）本论（3）结论）结论议论文范文：议论文范文：StopWasting

19、Food不要浪费食物不要浪费食物Somepeopleseyesarebiggerthantheirstomachs.China,anditspeople,cannowenjoytheresultsofsacrifices made over past decades. Good food,comfort, and beauty are well-deserved rewards.However,weallneedtodoourlittlebittoensureweare not living on natural resources borrowed fromMotherNature.Even

20、tuallywemustrepaythedebt.Intheevenmorewastefulwest,wecallit“RobbingPetertopayPaul.”Mymotheroftensaid“wastenot,wantnot.”Itisstillverygoodadvice.二、文法基本知识二、文法基本知识1。结构完整（句子、篇章）。结构完整（句子、篇章）2。主题突出（支撑句）。主题突出（支撑句）3。语言连贯、文字流畅。语言连贯、文字流畅4。表达准确、达意。表达准确、达意5。文体规范。文体规范2001NMET周末活动（减负前）周末活动（减负前）周末活动（减负后）周末活动（减负后）白天

21、：上课、做作业白天：上课、做作业白天：参观博物馆、白天：参观博物馆、学习电脑、绘画等学习电脑、绘画等晚上：做作业晚上：做作业晚上：看新闻、读书晚上：看新闻、读书、看报、看报就寝时间：就寝时间：11：30就寝时间：就寝时间：10：00Goodbeginning:Althoughthereisstillmuchdebateoverwhethertheplanofreducingstudentslearningloadshouldbecarriedout,ithasindeedbroughtusmanypleasantchanges.Body:Taketheweekendlifeforexample

22、.Onemonthago,wejustattendedclassesanddidourhomeworkfrommorningtillnight.Thatleftusverytired,andwehadnotimeatalltodowhatwewanted.Butnow,asaresultoflessburdenofstudies,wecandowhateverwelike.Forinstance,duringthedaytimewecanvisitmuseums,studycomputerprogramming,joinsomeclubsandsoon.Intheevening,wecanwa

23、tchTV,readbooks,ordoanythingwelike.Ending:AsfarasIamconcerned,Istronglyholdthatthisplanshouldbecarriedoutcontinuallynotonlybecauseitgivesusmorespacetodevelopourcriticalthinkingandindependentabilitybutalsobecausewereallyfeelmuchhappierthaneverbefore.2002年北京题年北京题英语书面表达例文：英语书面表达例文：LiMingandIstartedoff,

24、whenthesunwas rising from the horizon, singinghappily. Wehadcompass,camp,bread,map, light, matches, knife, clothes,flashlight and first-aid kit in our bagsand prepared our minds for the hardtraining. We first climbed a mountain,thenswamacrossariverwhenourbagsalso“swam”onapieceofwood.Afterthat,weente

25、redaforest.IwasjustwonderingwhichwasthecorrectwaywhenLiMingusedthecompassandshowedmetheway.Afteralongwalk, we finally arrived at thecampsite. I was in charge of settingup the camp while Li Ming made afireandcookedourdinner.Believeitornot,itwasthemostdeliciousmealIveeverhad!1.要点齐全、内容完整要点齐全、内容完整五幅画面六个

26、要点：五幅画面六个要点：(1)出发出发LiMingandIstartedoff,when(2)背背包包中中的的物物品品We had compass, camp,bread, map, light, matches, knife, clothes,flashlightandfirst-aidkitinourbags(3)爬山爬山Wefirstclimbedamountain(4)过河过河thenswamacrossariver(5)找找路路Iwasjustwonderingwhichwas the correct way when Li Mingusedthecompassandshowedme

27、theway.(6)宿宿营营Afteralongwalk,wefinallyarrived at the campsite. I was inchargeofsettingupthecampwhileLiMingmadeafireandcookedourdinner.2.词汇、语法结构变化丰富词汇、语法结构变化丰富：（1）交交叉叉使使用用简简单单句句、复复合合句句、并并列句列句。简单句：简单句：Afterthat,weenteredaforest.Afteralongwalk,wefinallyarrivedatthecampsite.复合句：复合句：LiMingandIstartedoff,

28、whenthesun was rising from the horizon,singinghappily.We first climbed a mountain, thenswam across a river when our bagsalso“swam”onapieceofwood.复合句：复合句：I was in charge of setting up thecampwhileLiMingmadeafireandcookedourdinner.Believe it or not, it was the mostdeliciousmealIveeverhad!并列句：并列句：Wehad

29、compass,camp,bread,map,light,matches,knife,clothes,flashlight and first-aid kit in ourbagsandpreparedourmindsforthehardtraining.（2）交叉使用长句、短句。交叉使用长句、短句。1）使用各类状语从句）使用各类状语从句(when;when;while)、非非谓谓语语动动词词作作状状语语(singinghappily)、宾宾语语从从句句(wonderingwhichwasthecorrect way)、定定语语从从句句 (themostdeliciousmealIveever

30、had!)、插插入入语语(Believeitornot)等等复复杂杂结结构。构。2）使用丰富的词汇和词组）使用丰富的词汇和词组startoff,horizon,prepareourmindsfor,apieceofwood,forest,wonder,showmetheway,arriveat,inchargeof,setup,makeafire,believeitornot,delicious3.几乎没有语言错误；几乎没有语言错误；4.有有效效使使用用了了语语句句连连接接成成分分，所所以以文文章的语言连贯、结构紧凑。章的语言连贯、结构紧凑。when the sun was rising fr

31、om thehorizon/first/then/afterthat/afteralongwalk/while三、语言表达的连贯性语言表达的连贯性1.连贯的标准连贯的标准：流畅：流畅1)思路清楚，思路清楚，思维没有跳跃，思维没有跳跃，使读者使读者能跟上作者的思路。能跟上作者的思路。2)两个相邻的句子之间逻辑关系清楚；两个相邻的句子之间逻辑关系清楚；如进一步说明、概括和具体、比较、如进一步说明、概括和具体、比较、对照、因果或转折；句子衔接自然。对照、因果或转折；句子衔接自然。2.衔接的技巧衔接的技巧1)使用衔接词或过渡词使用衔接词或过渡词because,but,therefore,instead

32、,themostimportance,besides,inaddition,asaresult.2)保持时态、语态及人称的正确保持时态、语态及人称的正确性和一致性。性和一致性。3)在说明一层意思时，主语不随在说明一层意思时，主语不随意转换。意转换。概括性句子可以例外概括性句子可以例外，如：谈减负问题时前面用的都是主语we，概括时用了：Imsohappythesedaysbecausealotofchangeshavetakenplaceinmydailylifesinceourlearningloadwasreduced.Butnow,everythinghasbeenimproved.I.用

33、适当的连接词语完形填空用适当的连接词语完形填空1peoplehavespreadintheworld,theyhavekilledwolves,usuallytoprotecttheirownanimals2sheepandcattle.3,thenumberofwolveshasbeengreatlyreduced.Theyareextinctinmanycountries.InBritain,4,wolvesbecameinabout1650.5,thereusedtobemanythousandsofwolvesinAmerica.Nowtherearefewerthan2,000.If

34、peoplehadnotcometoAmerica,wolveswouldnothavedisappeared.Wheneverpeoplehavespreadintheworld,theyhavekilledwolves,usuallytoprotecttheirownanimalssuchassheepandcattle.Asaresult,thenumberofwolveshasbeengreatlyreduced.Theyareextinctinmanycountries.InBritain,forexample,wolvesbecameinabout1650.Similarly,th

35、ereusedtobemanythousandsofwolvesinAmerica.Nowtherearefewerthan2,000.IfpeoplehadnotcometoAmerica,wolveswouldnothavedisappeared.II.找出连接词语找出连接词语Findouttheconnectors:TheSmithsonianInstitutioninWashington,D.C.hasaddedseveralbuildingstodisplayitsgrowingcollection.First, work has been completed on a three-

36、levelunderground museum complex called the Center ofAfrican,NearEastern,andAsianCulture.Thereisalsoan above ground entrance pavilion for the NationalMuseumofAfricanArt.Anotherabovegroundentrancepavilion exists for the Albert M. Sackler Gallery ofNear Eastern Art., In addition a Center of IslamicStud

37、ies is under construction. The entire project,moreover, is being financed not only by the UnitedStates, but also by contributions from Japan, SouthKorea,SaudiArabia,andBahrain.III.用表示原因关系的连词填空用表示原因关系的连词填空1.ThebusinessmentooktheplaneinsteadofthetraintoBeijing,_theywantedtoconcludethegooddealquickly.2

38、._manystudentscamelate,theclasscouldntbeginontime.3.TheadvisordidnotallowthestudentstotakeTOEFL_theydidnotfollowinstructions.4._theheavytraffic,JohndidntcatchthetraintoShanghaithismorning.1.ThebusinessmentooktheplaneinsteadofthetraintoBeijing,fortheywantedtoconcludethegooddealquickly.2.Asmanystudent

39、scamelate,theclasscouldntbeginontime.3.TheadvisordidnotallowthestudentstotakeTOEFLbecausetheydidnotfollowinstructions.4.Duetotheheavytraffic,JohndidntcatchthetraintoShanghaithismorning.IV.用表示结果关系的连词填空用表示结果关系的连词填空1.Itissaid90%ofthebodyheatgoesoutfromthetopofhead._,peopleshouldwearhatstokeepwarmoncold

40、days.2.HelistenstoEnglishprogramseveryday._,hislisteningabilityhasbeenimprovedgreatly.1.Itissaid90%ofthebodyheatgoesoutfromthetopofhead.Forthisreason,peopleshouldwearhatstokeepwarmoncolddays.2.HelistenstoEnglishprogramseveryday.Asaresult,hislisteningabilityhasbeenimprovedgreatly.3.Heisagooddoctor.He

41、has,_,manypatientswhoaskhimforhelp.4._ofstayinganextraday,Iwasabletogainsomevaluableinformation.3.Heisagooddoctor.Hehas,therefore,manypatientswhoaskhimforhelp.4.Asaresultofstayinganextraday,Iwasabletogainmoreinformation.V.用表示条件关系的连接词语填空用表示条件关系的连接词语填空1.Peaceintheworldwillremainonlyadream_themajorpowe

42、rsstopthearmrace.2.SusanplanstomarryHarry_herparentsapproveornot.3.Youshouldgetadriverslicenserightaway,_youllhavetopayafine.4.Youbetterleavenow,_youwillbelate.5._fire,leavethebuildingimmediately.1.Peaceintheworldwillremainonlyadreamunlessthemajorpowersstopthearmrace.2.SusanplanstomarryHarrywhetherh

43、erparentsapproveornot.3.Youshouldgetadriverslicenserightaway,oryoullhavetopayafine.4.Youbetterleavenow,otherwiseyouwillbelate.5.Incaseoffire,leavethebuildingimmediately.6._theyhadplentytoeatanddrink,themenwerehappy.7.Hesayshellacceptthejob_thesalaryissatisfactory.8._theydontknowtheway,theywillhaveto

44、stopandbuyamap.9.Youdbetterbuyalotoffoodfortheparty.Theguestswillnothaveenoughtoeat,_.6.Aslongastheyhadplentytoeatanddrink,themenwerehappy.7.Hesayshellacceptthejobonconditionthatthesalaryissatisfactory.8.Intheeventthattheydontknowtheway,theywillhavetostopandbuyamap.9.Youdbetterbuyalotoffoodforthepar

45、ty.Theguestswillnothaveenoughtoeat,otherwise.3.使用平行结构使用平行结构-指结构基本相同的一排句子、从句或词指结构基本相同的一排句子、从句或词组，如：组，如：A.Everynightforweekstherehadbeenmuchsinging,dancingandshouting.B.“Iwantabikeformyself,awashingmachineformymother,agoodtemperformyfather,andaverylongsickleaveformyteacher.”4.增加句子连贯性增加句子连贯性(2001NMET)I

46、m so happy these days because a lot of changes havetakenplaceinmydailylifesinceourlearningloadwasreduced.Beforetheplanofreducingstudents loadwascarriedout,wehadtodoalotofhomeworkdayandnight.Wehadtogotoschoolevenattheweekend.Wecouldntgo to bed until 11:30 every day. But now, it has beenimproved.Wehav

47、elesshomeworktodo.Besides,wedonthavetogotoclassesattheweekend.Instead,wecanvisitmuseums, learn to use the computer or learn paintingpictures.AtnightwecanspendsometimewatchingTVnews or reading newspapers or our favorite books. Themostimportant,wecangetenoughsleepbecausewecangotobedbefore10:00.Ihopewe

48、canenjoysuchalifeforever.DearEditor,Imwritingtotellyouaboutthediscussionwevehadaboutwhetheranentrancefeeshouldbechargedforparks.Opinionsaredividedonthequestion.60%ofthestudents are against the idea of entrance fees. Theybelieveapublicparkshouldbefreeofcharge.Peopleneedaplacewheretheycanrestandenjoyt

49、hemselves.Chargingentrancefeeswillnodoubtkeepsomepeopleaway.Whatismore,itwillbecomenecessarytobuildgatesandwalls,whichwilldoharmtotheappearanceofacity.Ontheotherhand,40%thinkthatfeesshouldbechargedbecauseyouneedmoneytopaygardenersandotherworkers,andtobuyplantsandyoungtrees.Theysuggest,however,feessh

50、ouldbechargedlow.Yourtruly,LiHua无衔接词无衔接词Welefthomeintheearlymorning.Wetookalltheusefulthings,forexample,acompass,aknife,afirst-aidkit,aflashlight,somefoodandclothesandsoon.Wehadalongwaytogettothecampsite.Weclimbedthehillandswamintheriver,intheforest.Wecouldntfindtherightway,heusedthecompassandfindth

51、at.Wehadalotofdifficultiestogettothe campsite. At there, he build a smallhouse.Icookedthefood.改改写写：Welefthomeintheearlymorningafterwepackedalltheusefulthingsinourbags,forexample, a compass, a knife, a first-aid kit, aflashlight,somefoodandclothesandsoon.Onthelongwaytothecampsite,wefirstclimbedahill.

52、Thenweswamcrossariverbeforewegotintotheforest.Intheforest,wecouldntfindtherightway. Fortunately we hada compass andwere able to find the way with the help of it.Withalotofdifficultieswegottothecampsitewhen the sun set down. At the campsite, LiMingbuiltasmallhouseandIcookedthefoodonthecampfire.四、四、 书

53、面表达的润色方法书面表达的润色方法（一）（一）增加较复杂的句子结构增加较复杂的句子结构1状语前置状语前置We met at the school gate and wenttheretogetherearlyinthemorning.改改写写：Earlyinthemorning,wemetattheschoolgateandwenttheretogether.2灵灵活活使使用用强强调调句句、倒倒装装句句、复复合合句句、各各种分词短语介词短语等结构种分词短语介词短语等结构(1)强调句强调句例例1MyparentspraisedAhFuwarmly.Ithadsavedmylittlesister

54、bravely.改写改写:MyparentspraisedAhFuwarmly.ItwasourbraveAhFuwhohadsavedmylittlesister.例例2 We lost our way, but thecompasshelpedus.改写改写:Welostourway,butintheverytime,thecompasshelpedus.(2)复合句复合句例例1Wehadtostandtheretocatchtheoffender.改写改写:What we have to do was tostand there, trying to catch theoffender.

55、例例2Weswamcrossariverandgotourselveswet.Thenwelostourway.改写改写:Weswamcrossariverandgotourselveswet.Whatwasworse,welostourway.(3)介词短语介词短语例例1(with:beingaccompaniedby)Mymothersatinachairwithanewspaperinherhand.例例2Sheleftwithoutsayinggoodbye.例例3With the knowledge gained inclassroomtraining,wewereabletosol

56、ve all the problems we met inthewildernesssurvivalprogram.例例4Itwasverycrowdedintown,withalltheChristmasshoppers.例例5Withbeinginthetrade,Iamabletogetgoodsatadiscount(打折打折).例例6Withallhisboasting,hehasachievedverylittle.(withall=inspiteof)例例7.Hediedwithhislifesworkstillunfinished.(4)分词短语分词短语例例1Satisfied

57、withtheresult,hedecided to go on with a newexperiment.例例2 After putting bags onto aboard, we jumped into the riverandswamcrossitsuccessfully.例例 3 We left home in the earlymorning. We took all the usefulthings: a compass, a map a knife, afirst-aidkit,andsoon.改改写写: We left home in the earlymorning, ca

58、rrying the things whichwere supposed to be useful on ourjourney:acompass,amapaknife,afirst-aidkit,andsoon.例例4AnoldmancameoutoftheCityPark and wanted to cross the ParkRoad.改改写写:Anoldmandressedinblackcame out of the City Park and wasabouttocrosstheParkRoad.（二）使用较复杂的词汇（二）使用较复杂的词汇例1Believeitornot,itwast

59、hemostdeliciousmealIveeverhad!例2Butnow,asaresultoflessburden of studies, we can dowhateverwelike.例例3.Forinstance,duringthedaytimewe can visit museums, studycomputerprogramming,joinsomeclubs and so on. In the evenings,wecanwatchTV,readbooks,ordoanythingwelike.例例4.As far as I am concerned, Istronglyho

60、ldthatthisplanshouldbecarried out continually not onlybecause it gives us more space todevelop our critical thinking andindependent ability but also becausewereallyfeelmuchhappierthaneverbefore.五、典型错误归纳五、典型错误归纳（一）句子基本框架错误（一）句子基本框架错误1.句子不完整。句子不完整。不不完完整整的的句句子子指指以以大大写写字字母母开开头头、以以句句号号结结束束但但缺缺主主语语或或/和和谓谓

61、语语的的独独立结构。它呈现为以下几种情形：立结构。它呈现为以下几种情形：（1）从句问题）从句问题从从句句只只是是句句子子的的一一个个成成分分-状状语语、定定语语、主主语语、宾宾语语、表表语语、同同位位语语。它它不不能能独独立立成成句句子子，除除非非把把从从句句的的引引导导词词，如如because，if等等去掉。去掉。例例1.WhenIwaswalkingalongParkRoad. An old man dressed in blackcameoutofCityParkandwantedtocrossParkRoad.When I was walking along ParkRoad, an

62、old man dressed in blackcameoutofCityParkandwantedtocrossParkRoad.例例2.Every time we go across thepavement, he will grasp my handfirmlyandasifImstillalittlegirl.Every time we go across thepavement, he will grasp my handfirmlyasifImstillalittlegirl.例例 3. First, I would have moreroads built. Because wi

63、th theincreaseofthecars,ourroadsnowbecomemoreandmorecrowded.First,Iwouldhavemoreroadsbuiltbecausewiththeincreaseofthe cars, our roads now becomemoreandmorecrowded.First,Iwouldhavemoreroadsbuilt. With the increase of thecars,ourroadsnowbecomemoreandmorecrowded.例4.Itsnaturalthatamanwilldieatendofhisli

64、fe.Nomatterhowwealthyheisandnomatterhowmuchmoneyheiswillingtopayforhislife.Itsnaturalthatamanwilldieatendofhislife,nomatterhowwealthyheisandnomatterhowmuchmoneyheiswillingtopayforhislife.(2)词组问题词组问题例1.Inthemorning,wetooksomeusefulthings,forexample,compass,camp,bread,map,light,matches,knife,clothes,f

65、lashlightandfirst-aidkitandsoon.Puttheminourbagthenstarted.Inthemorning,wefoundsomeusefulthings, for example, compass, camp,bread,map,light,matches,knife,clothes,flashlightandfirst-aidkitandsoon.Weputtheminourbagandthenstarted.例例2.There are three people in myfamily.Myfather,mymotherandI. There are t

66、hree people in myfamily:myfather,mymotherandI.例3.Inthemiddleoftheroomthereisabrowntableandfourchairs.Atranslucentvaseonthistable.Inthemiddleoftheroomtherearefour chairs and a brown table with atranslucentvaseonthistable.Inthemiddleoftheroomthereisabrowntableandfourchairs.Atranslucentvaseisonthistabl

67、e.例4.There are lots of toys on mybed.Suchasrabbits,bears,dogsandetc.Therearelotsoftoysonmybedsuch as rabbits, bears, dogs andetc.例5. To save money. He had instantnoodleseveryday. To save money, he had instantnoodleseveryday.例6.Atthattime,acarfromnorthtowest.Atthattime,acarwasturningfromnorthtowest.（

68、二）谓语动词与非谓语动词不分（二）谓语动词与非谓语动词不分谓谓语语动动词词以以具具体体的的时时态态、人人称称、数数出出现现，在在句句中中做做谓谓语语。如如：Heworksasadoctor in the town hospital. 其其中中谓谓语语works呈呈现现为为一一般般现现在在时时、第第三三人人称称、单单数。数。非非谓谓语语动动词词以以不不定定式式、-ing形形式式、-ed形形式式出出现现（todo,doing,done）,在在句句中中作作“非非谓谓语语”,即即除除谓谓语语以以外外的的其其他他句句子子成成分分，如如：主主语语、表表语语、宾宾语语、定定语语、状状语语、补补语。语。主语：

69、主语：1. Being a president is not easy.当总统不容易。当总统不容易。2.It is not easy to be a good parent.当好父母不容易。当好父母不容易。表语表语：My plan is to go to college in Beijing, get a job there, and then settle down.我我的的计计划划是是在在北北京京上上大大学学、在在那那儿儿找找份工作、然后安顿下来。份工作、然后安顿下来。宾语：宾语：I love being a mother and wife.我喜欢为人妻母。我喜欢为人妻母。定语：定语：1.

70、The United States is a developed country. It is also a country developed in tourism.美美国国是是一一个个发发达达国国家家也也是是旅旅游游业业发发达达的的国家。国家。2.Hes got an opportunity to study abroad.他有了一次出国的机会。他有了一次出国的机会。状语：状语： 1.Made of plastic, the chair wont last long. 2. The war lasted 8 years, killing thousands and thousands of

71、 people. 3. Being a student, we should study hard. 4.We eat to live, not live to eat.补语：补语：There is something wrong with the TV set. I must have it fixed soon. 电视坏了，我得找人修理。电视坏了，我得找人修理。This magazine really helps me to understand the womens world.这本杂志真正帮助我了解了女性世界。这本杂志真正帮助我了解了女性世界。改错句：改错句：例例1.Wesawariv

72、erblockedourway.Wesawariverblockingourway.例例2. I saw an old man going out ofCityParkandwasabouttocrossParkRoad.IsawanoldmangoingoutofCityParkandhewasabouttocrossParkRoad.例例3.Suddenly,ayellowcarturnedrightfrom3rdStreet,arrivedatParkRoad. Suddenly, a yellow car turned rightfrom3rdStreettoParkRoad.例例4.

73、Shedrovethecarleavethestreet.Shedrovethecarleavingthestreet./Sheleftthestreetinthecar.例例5.Sheisalwayswarningme,tellingmedontdothis,dontdothat.She is always warning me, tellingmenottodothisorthat.例例6. We need talented young peoplemakeChinastrong.We need talented young people tomakeChinastrong.例例7.Iha

74、vewideinterestssuchasreading novels, watching films,playtennisandsoon. I have wide interests such asreading novels, watching films,playingtennisandsoon.例例 8.Onlywemastertheadvancedknowledgeandtechnologycanweserveourcountrymoreefficiently. Only when we master the advancedknowledgeandtechnologycanwese

75、rveourcountrymoreefficiently.例例9.Moneycantinsteadofeverythinginourlife.Moneycantreplace everythinginourlife.例例10.Iknowthattherearemanystudentsstillliveinpoverty,andtheywantedtogotoschoolverymuch.Iknowthattherearemanystudentsstillliving/whostilllivesinpoverty,andtheywantedtogotoschoolverymuch.Iknowth

76、atmanystudentsstillliveinpoverty,andtheywantedtogotoschoolverymuch.（三）词的用法与所用句型不配套（三）词的用法与所用句型不配套例例 1. An Englishman teaches ourEnglish.AnEnglishmanteachesusEnglish.注注意意：teach, give, pass, show, buy,sing,send,borrow,lend等等有有时时跟跟一一个个宾语、有时须跟双宾语。宾语、有时须跟双宾语。例例2. Just like bees produce honeyteachersprodu

77、ceknowledge.Justasbeesproducehoneyteachersproduceknowledge.注意：注意：like不是连词，不能引导主谓结构。不是连词，不能引导主谓结构。例例3.Becauseinourcitytherearealotoffactoriesandmanyvehicles,sotheatmosphereisverydirty.Becauseinourcitytherearealotoffactoriesandmanyvehicles,theatmosphereisverydirty.In our city there are a lot offactori

78、es and many vehicles, so theatmosphereisverydirty.注注意意：Because引引导导从从句句，连连接接主主从从结结构构，表表示示主主从从关关系系；而而so连连接接并并列列结结构构,表表示示并并列列关关系系，所所以以不不能能同同时时出出现现在在一一个个句句子子里里，和和although与与but的的关关系一样。系一样。例例4.Ihopesomechancetoimprovemyself.I hope for some chance toimprovemyself.注注意意：英英语语中中只只有有hope+宾宾语语从从句句或或hopeforsth，而而

79、没没有有hopesth的结构。的结构。例例5. We changed selfish and hard-hearted.We became / turned selfish andhard-hearted.注注意意：change不不是是系系动动词词，不不能能直直接接跟形容词。跟形容词。例例6.Theypraisedmeasensiblegirl.They praised me and said I as asensiblegirl.注意：注意：praise不能带宾语补语。不能带宾语补语。例例7.Hedecidedtoputhislifetoservethepeople.He decided t

80、o devote his life toservethepeople.注注意意：英英语语中中没没有有putoneslifetodosth的结构。的结构。例例 8. If we want to construct ourmotherlandtobeadevelopedcountry,wealsoneedmoney.Ifwewanttomakeourmotherlanda developed country, we also needmoney.注注意意：英英语语中中没没有有constructsthtobe+形容词的结构。形容词的结构。例例 9. I will furnish it to bebe

81、autiful.Iwillfurnishitandmakeitbeautiful.注意：英语中没有注意：英语中没有furnishsomethingtobe+形形容容词词结构。结构。例例10.Studyinghistoryneedsthatyougooveriteveryday.Studyinghistory,youneedtogooveriteveryday.注意：注意：need不能跟不能跟that从句。从句。（四）其他句子结构错误（四）其他句子结构错误例例1.Weclimbedamountain,thenswamacrossariver. We climbed a mountain, and

82、 then swam across a river.例例2.Weputourbagsonawoodenplate,pushediton. We put our bags on a wooden board and pushed them cross the river.例例3.Tiredas wewere,but wewerehappy. Tired as we were, we were happy.例例4.Weswimintheriver,andputourbagsonawoodsothatpushedit.We put our bags on a piece of wood so tha

83、t we could push it as we swam cross the river.例例5. As an airhostess can oftenstayinthesky. An airhostess can often stay in the sky. As an airhostess, she can often stay in the sky.例例6.There are many meaningfulthings that we cant buy themwithmoney.There are many meaningful things that we cant buy wit

84、h money.（五）其他结构方面的问题（五）其他结构方面的问题例例1.Weswimintheriver,andputourbagsonawoodsothatpushedit.We put our bags on a piece of wood so that we could push it as we swam cross the river.例例102NMETIwanttotellyouaboutthediscussionwevejusthadaboutwhetheranentrancefeeshouldbechargedforpark.纠正：纠正：I am writing to tel

85、l you about the discussion weve just had about whether an entrance fee should be charged for park.例例202(Beijing)Thoughwefelttired,butwestillmanagedtosetupthecampandtomakefire.Thanks to the compass , we finally arrived at the campsite. Although we felt tired, we managed to set up the camp and make fi

86、re.例例3.Theygotthehappyideatoclimbthehill.(wrong)They got the happy idea of climbing the hill. (right)例例4.Therearemanymeaningfulthings that we cant buy themwithmoney.There are many meaningful things that we cant buy with money.例例5.Some people in order to getmoney,theysoldtheirsouls. In order to get m

87、oney, some people sold their souls.例例6.Helikestohelpotherseitherheknowsorhedoesntknow.He likes to help others no matter whether he knows them or not.例例7.ItisquiteconfusingthatwhyIwanttostudyinBeijing. It is quite confusing why I want to study in Beijing.（六）语序错误（六）语序错误英语中修饰语英语中修饰语如如：定定语语、状状语语应应尽尽量量靠靠

88、近近被被修饰的词，否则不能接受。修饰的词，否则不能接受。例例1.LiMingandIstartedoff,whenthe sun was rising from thehorizon,singinghappily.When the sun was rising fromthehorizon,LiMingandIstartedoff,singinghappily.例例2.IsawanoldmanwalkingoutofCityParkwhowasinblack. I saw an old man in blackwalkingoutofCityPark.例例3.Because the car r

89、an too fast, thecrossing park road old man wasknockeddown.Becausethecarrantoofast,theold man (who was) crossing ParkRoadwasknockeddown.例例4.When it was turning right, thecarknockedtheoldmanwhowascrossingParkRoaddown. Whenitwasturningright,thecar knocked down the old manwhowascrossingParkRoad.例例5.Thec

90、arcamefromthe3rdstreet,which was driven extremely fastfromnorthtosouth.Thecarcamefrom3rdStreet;itwas running extremely fast fromnorthtosouth.例例6.Shedrovethecarawaytheplacewheretheaccidenthappenedinahurry. She hurriedly drove the carawaytheplacewheretheaccidenthappened.（七）表达不准确七）表达不准确例例1.LiMingsaidhe

91、tookcompassandcampsite,andItoldhimItookbread,map,knife,first-aidkitandsoon.LiMingsaidhetookacompassandatent,andItoldhimItookbread, a map, a knife, a first-aidkitandsoon.例2.Weclimbeddownthemountainhardly.We climbed down the mountainwithdifficulty.例3. Then we swam through theriver.Thenweswamcrosstheri

92、ver.例4.Imadeaconvenientlittleroomtolivein. I set up the tent and made acomfortablelittleroomtolivein.例5.Weturnedtwohills,thensawariverinfrontofus.We climbed two hills, and werestoppedbyariver.（八）逻辑错误（八）逻辑错误1、非谓语动词的逻辑主语错误、非谓语动词的逻辑主语错误例例1.Readingthem,whatIgotarenotonlyjoybutalsoknowledge.Readingthem,I

93、gotnotonlyjoybutalsoknowledge.例例2.Tocutdowncosts,thehomemadecarsshouldbeusedforgovernmentduty.Tocutdowncosts,weshouldusethehomemadecarsforgovernmentduty.例例3.Enteringtheroom,alongsofacanbeseen.Enteringtheroom,you/wecanseealongsofa.例例4.Tobeagoodcitizen,itisnecessarytoobeythelaw.Tobeagoodcitizen,onemus

94、tobeythelaw.例例5.Thenumberwasputdownforfearofgettingit.Iputdownthenumberforfearofforgettingit.我把号码记下来以免忘记。我把号码记下来以免忘记。例例6.Inadditiontosinginglikealittlebird,wesawherdancingbeautifully.Inadditiontosinginglikealittlebirdshedancedbeautifully.她除了唱歌像小鸟一样，舞蹈她除了唱歌像小鸟一样，舞蹈也跳得很好。也跳得很好。例例7.Fortellingthetruthth

95、eteacherrewardedthestudent.Fortellingthetruth,thestudentwasrewardedbytheteacher.该学生因说实话而得到老师的表扬。该学生因说实话而得到老师的表扬。例例8.Bysuddenlybecomingrichhisfriendssuspectedhim.Bysuddenlybecomingrich.Hewassuspectedbyhisfriends.他突然变富被朋友怀疑。他突然变富被朋友怀疑。例例9.(做时间状语时，逻辑是通的）做时间状语时，逻辑是通的）Onmygoingintoherroom,shewasathome.(w

96、hen)我进房间时，我进房间时，她正在工作。她正在工作。Ontheclockstrikingten,allthelightswentout.（assoonas)当钟敲到十下，灯全熄灭了。当钟敲到十下，灯全熄灭了。Some tips for writing1.Remember50to100wordsoridiomsandphrasesbyreadingcomprehension.2.Trytocopy10sentencesatleastusingthewordsyouvelearnedbyheart.3.Tolearnhowtogetyourmainideaapparently.4.Trytoe

97、xpressthesamemeaningindifferentways.5.Tohavethinkingaloudandideascomprehension.6.Soyoudbetterimitate35articlesordiscourseseachday.Andrewriteyourcompositionbetterthanbefore.7.Makeyourwritingcoherence.Writesomethingusingsomeusefulconnectorssothatthepassagecanbegoodenough.8.Makesurethatthemeaningisclea

98、randthecontentisfullenough.训练建议：训练建议：1、限时定量限时定量：完成审题、成文、检查全过程：完成审题、成文、检查全过程用用15-20分钟分钟/每篇；高三每篇；高三36周完成周完成3040篇篇书面表达练习；各种文体：应用文、叙述文、书面表达练习；各种文体：应用文、叙述文、说明文、议论文说明文、议论文2、专题辅导：专题辅导：词汇句型基础复习与写作、词汇句型基础复习与写作、语法复习与写作、语法复习与写作、阅读与写作、改错与写作阅读与写作、改错与写作。书面表达练习书面表达练习Imitation:(MissAndreasModel)MythanksgivingDayact

99、ivitiesareverydifferentfrommynormalweeklyactivities.FirstofallImabletosleeplater.Iusuallywakeuparound8:30.ThenIalwaysgodownstairsandhelpmymotherandmysistercook.Weoftencookuntil3:00intheafternoon.SometimesItakeabreakfromthekitchentowatchthefootballgameonTV.Weseldomeatbefore3:00.Between3:00and4:00,the

100、wholefamilygathersaroundthetabletoeat.Afterwards,wecleanupuntilabout5:30or6:00.Whenthekitchenisclean,wegooutsideandplaygamesuntilabout8:00.Thenwecomebackintoeatapplepieandpumpkin(南瓜南瓜)pie.Ourrelativesusuallyleaveby10:00.Inevergotobedbefore11:00onThanksgivingDay.根据范文的词汇句型，写一篇其他一根据范文的词汇句型，写一篇其他一种节日或假日

101、，种节日或假日，如如SpringFestival，Summer/winterHoliday(1)一一些些美美国国中中学学生生到到你你校校参参观观，希希望望了了解解你你校校学学生生课课外外活活动动，请请你你根根据据下下面面表表中中的的内内容容用用英英语语写写一一篇篇发发言言稿稿，介绍你校学生课外活动情况。介绍你校学生课外活动情况。注注意意：1.词词数数100左左右右；2.发发言言稿稿的的开开头已为你写好。头已为你写好。基本内容梳理：基本内容梳理：1.课外活动时间课外活动时间:下午下午4:205:202.活活动动内内容容:阅阅读读、体体育育、唱唱歌歌、计计算算机机、学科小组学科小组3.最喜欢的项目

102、最喜欢的项目:体育、计算机体育、计算机4.希希望望与与建建议议:减减少少作作业业，增增加加活活动动时时间，多组织参观旅游活动间，多组织参观旅游活动开首句已经为你写好：开首句已经为你写好：Dearfriends,Welcometoourschool.IfeelitanhonortoOnepossibleversion:Dearfriends,Welcome to our school.I feel it anhonortohavethechancetotellyousomething about our activities atschoolafterclass.Wehaveonehourof

103、activities from 4:20 to 5:20 everyafternoon.Somestudentsdodifferentkindsofreadinginthereading-room;somehavesportsontheplayground;somesingsongsinthehall;somelearntooperatecomputersinthecomputer-room and others take part in theirgroup work about different subjects.Most of us are very interested inspor

104、tsandcomputerscience.We hope that we can have lesshomeworkandmoretimetojoininthe activities. We are also lookingforwardtomorevisitsandtourtrips.Thankyou.(2)据调查：中国城市居民电脑的拥有据调查：中国城市居民电脑的拥有率达率达30%。很多农村居民对电脑的兴。很多农村居民对电脑的兴趣越来越浓，许多家庭也买了电脑。趣越来越浓，许多家庭也买了电脑。请你参考下表写一篇题为请你参考下表写一篇题为ComputerinChina的短文。词数为的短文。词数为

105、100词。词。中学生使用电脑的情况中学生使用电脑的情况用途用途比率比率学习资料查询学习资料查询30%上网聊天上网聊天60%游戏游戏65%听音乐、看光盘听音乐、看光盘20%注：注：1。生词：。生词：调查调查investigation聊天聊天chat2。开头语：。开头语：ComputerinChinaAccordingtoarecentinvestigation,Onepossibleversion:Accordingtoarecentinvestigation,withthedevelopmentofeconomicsandtechnologyabout30%ofthecityfamiliesh

106、avecomputers.Besides,manyvillagepeopleareinterestedincomputers.Someofthemevenhaveboughtcomputers.About70%oftheparentsboughtcomputersfortheirchildrentostudy,andsomefortheirwork.Someoftheparentsboughtthemjustbecauseotherchildrenhavecomputers,andevensomepeopleboughtthemforentertainment.Thefactthathowth

107、emiddleschoolstudentsusethecomputersreallysurprisesus.Onlyabout30%ofthemusecomputerstofindoutusefulinformation.About60%usecomputerstochatwithotherpeople.Evenworseabout65%usecomputerstoplaygamesand20%usethemtowatchVCDsorlistentomusic.Inmyopinionweshouldmakebetteruseofourbestinvention-computers.(3)假假设

108、设你你是是李李华华。你你的的外外国国朋朋友友DICK向向你你写写信信询询问问北北京京2008年年奥奥运运会会的的准准备备情情况况，请请根据下列提示写封回信根据下列提示写封回信。(字数字数100左右左右)生词：生词：2008年奥运会年奥运会2008OlympicGames美化美化beautify环境环境environment健身设施健身设施body-buildingfacilities体育场体育场gymnasium废气的排放废气的排放emissionofwastegases交通设施交通设施transportationfacilities北京为北京为2008年奥运会所做的准备工作：年奥运会所做的准

109、备工作：1.种植花草，美化环境；种植花草，美化环境；2.扩建道路、改善交通状况；扩建道路、改善交通状况；3.植植树树、控控制制废废气气排排量量，改改善善空空气气质质量量，减少污染；减少污染；4.修修建建专专业业体体育育场场馆馆和和公公共共体体育育健健身身设设施；施；5.开开展展市市民民讲讲英英语语活活动动，培培养养高高素素质质服服务人员。务人员。September1,2002DearDick:How nice to hear from you again. Imverygladtotellyouaboutthepreparationswehavemadeforthe2008OlympicGam

110、es.Firstofall,wehavegrowngrassandallkindsofflowersandplantedmanytreestobeautifytheenvironment.Second,wehavecutdowntheburningofcoalandtheemissionofwastegasesfromautomobilesinordertocontrolairpollution.Third,wearebuildingprofessionalgymnasiumsandpublicbody-buildingfacilities.AndmoreandBeijing citizens

111、 are taking to body-buildingexercises.Fourth,wearehelpingasmanypeopleaspossible to learn English and training them tobecomequalifiedattendants.IbelieveBeijingwillbecome more and more beautiful and Beijingcitizenswillbecomemoreandmorecultivated.IamlookingforwardtoseeingyouinBeijing.Yours,LiHua4。请你记述一

112、起海难事故。内容要点：。请你记述一起海难事故。内容要点：1）时间）时间1912年年4月的一个夜晚月的一个夜晚2）地点）地点大西洋大西洋3）船上有乘客船上有乘客2224人人4）一艘横渡大西洋的巨轮撞上冰山沉没）一艘横渡大西洋的巨轮撞上冰山沉没5）由于缺少救生船和没有得到另一艘船由于缺少救生船和没有得到另一艘船的相救，有三分之一的人葬身于海底的相救，有三分之一的人葬身于海底提示：提示：1.1912年年4月的一个夜晚月的一个夜晚onenightin/onanAprilnight2.在大西洋上航行在大西洋上航行sail/crossontheAtlantic3.撞上冰山撞上冰山striketheiceb

113、ergs4.救生船救生船lifeboatsOnepossibleversion: One night in April 1912, a huge ocean liner was crossing the Atlantic. It was carrying 2,224 passengers. It was going fast, which was dangerous because there were icebergs around. The passengers were all having a good time when the ship suddenly struck one of

114、 the icebergs.The ship began to sink but there werent enough lifeboats. Another ship was passing nearby. The sinking ship fired rockets into the air in order to get the passing ships help. It could have saved most of the passengers, but it did not even stop. More than two-thirds of the passengers went down with the huge ship. It was one of the greatest sea disasters of all time.