《高考英语 书面表达专题指导与练习讲评(图画式作文)专题指导课件》由会员分享,可在线阅读,更多相关《高考英语 书面表达专题指导与练习讲评(图画式作文)专题指导课件(49页珍藏版)》请在金锄头文库上搜索。
1、本系列资料简介专题一 2012届高考英语书面表达(图画式作文)专题指导与练习讲评专题二 2012届高考英语书面表达(文字提纲式作文)专题指导与练习讲评专题三 2012届高考英语书面表达(图表式作文)专题指导与练习讲评专题四 2012届高考英语书面表达(开放式作文)专题指导与练习讲评专题一2012届高考英语书面表达(图画式作文)专题指导与练习讲评目录一、一、2012届高考英届高考英语书面表达(面表达(图画式作文)画式作文)专题指指导(含(含课件和文字稿)件和文字稿)二、二、2012届高考英届高考英语书面表达(面表达(图画式作文)画式作文)练习讲评 2012届高考英届高考英语书面表达面表达练习讲评
2、一(含一(含课件和文字稿)件和文字稿) 2012届高考英届高考英语书面表达面表达练习讲评二(含二(含课件和文字稿)件和文字稿) 2012届高考英届高考英语书面表达面表达练习讲评三(含三(含课件和文字稿)件和文字稿) 2012届高考英届高考英语书面表达面表达练习讲评四(含四(含课件和文字稿)件和文字稿)2012江苏高考说明江苏高考说明高考英语书面表达示例高考英语书面表达示例2-看看图作文(亦为图作文(亦为2011高考题):高考题):看图作文的看图作文的 “图图”不局限于某一类型的图,如漫画、不局限于某一类型的图,如漫画、广告,也包括其他图片、照片等情景材料。考生们广告,也包括其他图片、照片等情景
3、材料。考生们可根据图示的寓意、内容或情节线索,自己组织文可根据图示的寓意、内容或情节线索,自己组织文字,进行描述、叙述、比较或表达思想观。作文应字,进行描述、叙述、比较或表达思想观。作文应覆盖提示的要点,但应避免仅根据提示文字作简单覆盖提示的要点,但应避免仅根据提示文字作简单翻译。因此,图画式作文要求考生不仅具有一定的翻译。因此,图画式作文要求考生不仅具有一定的观察分析能力,还要有较强的语言表达能力、想象观察分析能力,还要有较强的语言表达能力、想象力和逻辑思维能力。力和逻辑思维能力。图画式作文就是通过图画提供的图像信图画式作文就是通过图画提供的图像信息写一篇短文,包括叙述一个故事,或息写一篇短
4、文,包括叙述一个故事,或通过几幅相关的图画说明某个问题或得通过几幅相关的图画说明某个问题或得出结论。图画式作文就内容而言,可以出结论。图画式作文就内容而言,可以写观察到的内容,也可以根据合理想象写观察到的内容,也可以根据合理想象适当进行发挥来补充一些内容;就表达适当进行发挥来补充一些内容;就表达方式而言,可以单纯地理解、说明,也方式而言,可以单纯地理解、说明,也可以在说明中加以描写、叙述。可以在说明中加以描写、叙述。写好写好图画式作文的要求是:画式作文的要求是:认真真审图,确立主,确立主题,提,提炼要点,展开要点,展开联想或想或发表感想,表感想,变点点为句,句,连句成篇。要达到句成篇。要达到这
5、些要求,我些要求,我们就必就必须认真真审图,善于利用,善于利用图中人物中人物间的关系、人物的关系、人物的的对话、人物的活、人物的活动及所及所处场所,以及所,以及图(表)(表)中的文字中的文字说明和明和标识来提来提炼要点;要要点;要围绕主主题展开合理的想象,切忌游离于主展开合理的想象,切忌游离于主题展开不着展开不着边际的的联想或感想。想或感想。如何写好这种类型的书面表达,本课件结合两个实例做些具体的指导。实例一(例一(2011年江年江苏卷)卷)下面下面这幅照片展幅照片展现了女儿了女儿为回家回家妈妈拿包的情拿包的情景。景。请根据你根据你对这幅照片的理解用英幅照片的理解用英语写一写一篇短文。你的短文
6、篇短文。你的短文应包含以下内容:包含以下内容:描述照片内容,如情景、人物、描述照片内容,如情景、人物、动作等等;作等等;结合自身合自身实际,谈谈你的感想;你的感想;举例例说明你能明你能为家家长减减负做些什么。做些什么。注意:注意:可参照可参照图中文字及下面文章开中文字及下面文章开头所所给提示,作必要的提示,作必要的发挥想象;想象;词数数150左右。开左右。开头已已经写好,不写好,不计入入总词数;数;作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。作文中不得提及考生所在学校和本人姓名。The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but th
7、e load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.总体分析体分析这是一篇漫画是一篇漫画类作文作文,是是江江苏考考试说明明中一直出中一直出现,但是首次露面的但是首次露面的题型。也是江型。也是江苏自主命自主命题以来,以来,开放程度最大的开放程度最大的试题。参照。参照图中文字及下面文章开中文字及下面文章开头所所给提示我提示我们发现所所谈的的话题其其实非常非常传统,体,体现的是考生所熟悉的的是考生所熟悉的“感恩感恩”的内容的内容 。但是但是图中的提中的提示,与其他省市以往的中文提示不同
8、,示,与其他省市以往的中文提示不同,这次使用了英次使用了英文提示,但是英文提示并不文提示,但是英文提示并不难。这幅幅图形象清晰明了,形象清晰明了,考生只要注意考生只要注意观察,描述察,描述图的内容的内容难度度应该不是很大不是很大的。的。难点在于点在于试题要求的第二和第三点即是拿高分的要求的第二和第三点即是拿高分的关关键点所在。点所在。 在写图画式作文时,最重要的是理解图画所描述的基本事实,掌握它所表达的主题和梗概,只要能充分运用想象并适当发挥就可以有条理地表达,写出图画中心意思;还要结合图画内容发表自己的看法或感想。甚至还要举例说明(就像我们今天所讲的2011江苏卷)。表达时尤其要注意句与句、
9、段与段之间的意思连贯,力求做到层次分明、结构严谨,准确地传递信息。一、确立主题一、确立主题 The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.根据照片和文字根据照片和文字说说明(包括开明(包括开头头句和照片中的文字),我句和照片中的文字),我们们可以确立表达的主可以确立表达的主题题是是“感恩感恩父母,父母,为妈妈为妈妈减减负负”。体裁是。体裁是议论议论文。文
10、。认真看图,结合文字和图画,确立所要表达的主题认真看图,结合文字和图画,确立所要表达的主题是什么。是什么。二、提炼要点二、提炼要点本本题题提提炼炼要点的关要点的关键键是是结结合文字(中英文)看懂照合文字(中英文)看懂照片所反映的内容。片所反映的内容。人物:人物:小女孩和她的小女孩和她的妈妈妈妈情景和情景和动动作:作:女儿女儿为为回家的回家的妈妈妈妈拿包拿包妈妈妈妈蹲着;两个人都面蹲着;两个人都面带带笑容笑容围绕确立的主题,仔细看图,初步列出图中的要点。围绕确立的主题,仔细看图,初步列出图中的要点。写好本篇书面表达的关键是处理好题目中的第二点和第三点的写好本篇书面表达的关键是处理好题目中的第二点
11、和第三点的要求。因此考生要根据这两点要求首先是结合自身实际的谈感要求。因此考生要根据这两点要求首先是结合自身实际的谈感想,其次是举例说明。想,其次是举例说明。全文要求字数全文要求字数150150个左右,因此在谈感想时要更合理,更具逻个左右,因此在谈感想时要更合理,更具逻辑性的表述自己的观点是十分重要的。举例的过程中,应当注辑性的表述自己的观点是十分重要的。举例的过程中,应当注意例子的简洁明了,易于说明问题及应和自己的观点。意例子的简洁明了,易于说明问题及应和自己的观点。三、发表感想及举例三、发表感想及举例描述描述图片:一般来片:一般来说“描述描述图片片”应该包括人物和事情以及当事人和看包括人物
12、和事情以及当事人和看到照片的人的感受。到照片的人的感受。 1.遣遣词人物:人物:a little girl and her working mom事情:事情:The little girl :come to greet her working momhelp to remove the bag from moms shoulder .Mom:kneel down 感受:感受:The little girl:be happyMom:be thankful and delighted We(看照片的人)(看照片的人):be all touched .四、遣词造句四、遣词造句2.造句A little
13、 girl comes to greet her working mom happily. The little girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder.The mom kneels down.The mom is thankful and delighted.Seeing this ,we are all touched.“联系系实际谈感想感想”可以可以结合自身合自身实际,说一下,自己有没一下,自己有没有做到有做到给父母减父母减负。遣遣词什么人:什么人: my mom and I我的做法(一般是我的做法(一般是贬义的)的):seldom
14、pay attention to what mother needs and feels ,always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return造句造句I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels I always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return.“个人个人见解解”则是根据是根据“我的做法我的做法”给出相出相应的解决方式。的解决方式。这边还可以可以说一下自己将来准一下自己
15、将来准备怎么怎么给父母父母“减减负”遣遣词Do my bit to help with the everyday washing ,bedroom cleaning.try my best to prepare breakfast myself share mothers daily burden .造句造句I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing, bedroom cleaning, I try my best to prepare breakfast myself,.I should share mothers daily burd
16、en. 连句成篇要句成篇要过渡自然,渡自然,对译出的要点通出的要点通过合理的合理的组合,加上必要的合,加上必要的连接接词或或词语以使表达以使表达连贯,再加,再加上文章开上文章开头和和结尾的尾的话照照顾到文章的首尾呼到文章的首尾呼应。本篇本篇书面表达是典型的面表达是典型的“三段式三段式”。第一段第一段题目已目已经给出,因此我出,因此我们所要所要处理的就是第理的就是第二段和第三段。第二段描述照片内容(如情景、人二段和第三段。第二段描述照片内容(如情景、人物、物、动作)等等。作)等等。第三段第三段结合自身合自身实际,谈谈你的感想,并你的感想,并举例例说明明你能你能为家家长减减负做些什么。做些什么。五
17、、连句成篇五、连句成篇连句成篇1The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mom happily. Realizing her mom must be very tired after a days work ,the little girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder .In response ,the mom kneels down to show how thankful and delighted she
18、 feels . 连句成篇句成篇2All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could do to let me have the best. But, totally engaged in my own study, I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels, and always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return. 连句成篇句成篇3Now I know I
19、 can do my bit to help with the everyday washing, bedroom cleaning, or at least prepare breakfast myself, so as to share mothers daily burden. 结尾尾处来一个升来一个升华句:句:Being a good daughter outweighs being a good student.范文评析1(五档)The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents
20、 has received little attention, especially from their own children.The picture shows us a touching moment when a little girl comes to greet her working mum. Realizing her mum must be very tired after a days work, the girl helps to remove the bag from her shoulder. In response, the mum kneels down to
21、 show how happy and thankful she feels.All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could do to let me have the best. But, totally engaged in my own study, I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels, and always think studying well is the only thing I could do in return
22、. Now I know I can do my bit to help with the everyday washing, bedroom cleaning, or at least prepare breakfast myself, so as to share mothers daily burden. The picture convinces me it is even more important to be a good daughter than a “good” student. 第一内容要点齐全对照片的描述恰当到位。在“结合自身实际,谈感想,举例说明”中都点到为止,恰到好
23、处。第二高级词汇较多a touching moment,removefrom,In response,remindsof sth,totally engaged,do my bit,share,convinces me等等。等等。第三句型结构高级:范文共用了7个句子(不包括已经给出的开头句),全部是复合句。最长的句子为“But, totally engaged in my own study, I seldom pay attention to what mother needs and feels, and always think studying well is the only thi
24、ng I could do in return.”计31个字,占了整个书面表达字数的三分之一强。非谓语动词用得比较多:touching ,to greet ,Realizing,to remove,to show,to let,have the best,engaged,to help,washing,cleaning,prepare,so as to share,to be a good daughter等。囊括了非谓语动词所有形式:动词不定式,动词的-ing形式和过去分词。复合句中三大从句“名词性从句、定语从句、状语从句”都有。由此可见:非谓语动词和复合句的运用受到命题专家的青睐。第四行文
25、结构紧凑:关联词(In response,But,or)和过渡句(All this reminds me of my mother who has been doing whatever she could do to let me have the best.)的使用使得文章行文结构更加紧凑,上下文连贯,信息的准确传递水到渠成。特别是最后一句更是传神之作。范文评析2(四档)(范文引用于2012江苏卷考试说明)The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received l
26、ittle attention, especially from their own children.As it is illustrated in this picture,the tired mom just went home from work. The little gorl helped remove her mothers heavy bag from her mothers shoulders at the door. The mother was looking at her good girl with a smile on her face. The little gi
27、rl also wore a smile as she felt delightful and pround that she could do something for her mother. It is just a moving picture. Having seen what the little did in the picture,I realize that I always thought of myself but ignored how heavy my parents loads were. They must feel much more pressure from
28、 both work and family supporting. As their child,I should concentrate more on their conditions. They need us to help them relieve from so much burden. We ought to take actions right now. We dont have to try to make big changes in their daily lives. Just like help giving them a hand when they are doi
29、ng housework or when they are occupied with their work,not disturb them. Maybe we can also tell them some funny jokes to make them feel relaxed when they seem to be tired. Spend more time talking to them,so that they will not feel lonely. Just little action will make them feel better. Dont be selfis
30、h,they are the only people who will love us until the ends of the life. And all sons and daughters should love them in return.第一内容要点方面作者较好地完成了试题规定的任务,涵盖了所要表达的主要内容。但是文章长度大大超出了规定的字数(多达239个),按评分标准要扣分,所以只能判为四档(16-20分)。对照片的描述到位,但是过于啰嗦。在“结合自身实际,谈感想,举例说明”中都有好的表现,但是发挥得太多,反而适得其反。第二词汇运用方面 运用了不少高级词汇。比如:removef
31、rom, ignored, concentrate on, take actions, be occupied with, relaxed等等。但要注意有些高级词汇的运用要规范。如: They need us to help them relieve from so much burden.要改为:We should relieve them of too much burden.词汇运用基本准确(但是要避免像gorl,pround这样的拼写方面的低级错误)。第三句型结构方面作者所运用的语法结构基本准确能够满足任务的要求。全文共17句,用了7个复合句。复合句中三大从句“名词性从句、定语从句、状
32、语从句”都有。简单句、并列句和复合句的交替使用使文章的可读性增强。注意运用非谓语动词:help remove, tired, moving, having seen, make them feel relaxed等等。由此可见:非谓语动词和复合句的运用是该文的亮点。但某些句子明显就是中文式的句子。如: Just like help giving them a hand when they are doing housework.要改为:For example, we should give them a hand when they are doing housework第四行文第四行文结构方
33、面构方面作者应用了一些词语间的连接成分,使全文内容连贯。本文达到了预期的写作目的。四档范文的修改The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children. As it is illustrated in this picture, the tired mom just went home from work. The little girl helps remove
34、 her mothers heavy bag from her shoulder. The mother is looking at her good girl with a smile while the little girl is also wearing a smile. She feels delightful and proud that she can do something for her mother. It is just a moving picture. Seeing the touching picture, I realize that I always thin
35、k much of myself but less of my parents. As their child, I seldom concentrate on what they need and feel. Now I think we should relieve them of too much burden. For example, we should give them a hand when they are doing housework. Whats more, we can also tell them some funny jokes to make them feel
36、 relaxed when they are tired or worried. In a word, it is our duty to share parents daily burden.(153words)实例二请根据下面四幅图画内容,写一篇短文,记述昨天发生在你叔叔身上的事。注意:1.词数150左右。2.参考词汇:吊销驾照revoke a driving license 1.认真看图,确立主题结合文字和图画,确立所要表达的主题是什么。四幅图记述了昨天发生在叔叔身上的事,我们可以确立本篇书面表达的主题是:昨天叔叔酒后开车,出事故而受伤,被吊销驾照。2.围绕主题,提炼要点围绕确立的主题,
37、仔细看图,初步列出每幅图的要点。第一幅图:与朋友聚会,喝酒 第二幅图:酒后驾车 第三幅图:出事故受伤 第四幅图:住院 。警察到场处罚。3.合理想象,补出要点将四幅图连起来并结合考虑每幅图中的各个细节进行想 象,将隐藏的要点补出来,使故事连贯。第一幅图:喝酒的地点(可能在朋友家,也可能在小酒馆),根据喝酒的地点确定是谁邀请谁。可能因为高兴叔叔酒喝多了喝醉了(为下文铺垫)第二幅图:根据他说的话:No problem可以推断:朋友劝他,他没听,坚持驾车回家。第三幅图:酒后驾车,可以想象开车的情况:蜿蜒向前,撞树出事故。根据第四幅图可推断他没有死而是受了伤。警察到现场,将他送往医院。第四幅图:因伤势严
38、重要住院几天;警察对他处罚吊销驾照。4.确定时态,译出要点确定表达时所用的正确时态,将围绕主题初选出的要点和经过合理想象补出的要点翻译出来。本篇书面表达是记述的昨天发生在叔叔身上的事,故用过去时态来表达。第一幅图:Yesterday evening my uncle was invited to dinner by his friends.He was so glad that he drank a lot of beers.As a result he got drunk. 第二幅图:After the meal,his friends tried to persuade him not t
39、o drive home,but he didnt to listen to them,saying“No problem” and insisted on doing so.第三幅图:He got into the car and drove away.A few minutes later,he was widing his way in the street.And suddenly his car ran into a tall tree. He was badly injured but still alive. The police came to the scene, and h
40、e was taken to hospital. 第四幅图:He had to stay in hospital for several days because of being seriously injured. He was fined by the police and his driving license was revoked.5.连句成篇,过渡自然对译出的要点通过合理的组合,加上必要的连接词或词语以使表达连贯,再加上文章开头和结尾的话照顾到文章的首尾呼应。My uncle will never forget what happened to him yesterday.How
41、 he regretted what he had done! My uncle will never forget what happened to him yesterday. Yesterday evening my uncle was invited to dinner by his friends. He was so glad that he drank a lot of beers. As a result he got drunk. After the meal, his friends tried to persuade him not to drive home, but
42、he didnt listen to them, saying “No problem” and insisted on doing so. He got into the car and drove away. A few minutes later, he was winding his way in the street when his car ran into a tall tree. He was badly injured but still alive. The police came to the scene, and he was taken to hospital. Un
43、fortunately he had to stay in hospital for several days .Worse still he was fined by the police and his driving license was revoked. How he regretted what he had done!附录:图画式作文常用的句型1.对漫画进行描述As is vividly portrayed in the pictureFrom the picture we can see thatAs can be seen form the picture,The pictu
44、re describes an interesting/ a common phenomenon.附录:图画式作文常用的句型2.挖掘出漫画所反映出的社会现象和蕴含的哲理It seems very ridiculous thatHowever, this kind of story is performed everywhere.What the picture shows is the exact reflection ofThe implied meaning of the picture should be taken into account seriously. And the soc
45、ial problem has aroused great concern amongThere may/might be three factors which contribute to/ account for / are responsible for this phenomenon. First of all, And then the second reason is that The last reason, I think, is 附录:图画式作文常用的句型3.对漫画中反映的问题作出评价或建议As far as Im concerned ,/ In my opinion,From my point of view, / On my part, Some measures as follows should be taken to deal with Only in these ways, can we solve the problem of It is better/advisable toI consider it necessary