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1、分类仿写与点评分类仿写与点评 谈书面表达与训练谈书面表达与训练汝州二高汝州二高 张占清张占清分类仿写分类仿写书面表达的评分标准分五档：书面表达的评分标准分五档： 第五档次（很好）：（第五档次（很好）：（21-25分）完全完分）完全完成了试题规定的任务。覆盖所有内容要点。成了试题规定的任务。覆盖所有内容要点。应用较多的语法结构和词汇。语法结构或应用较多的语法结构和词汇。语法结构或词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复词汇方面有些许错误，但为尽力使用较复杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语杂结构或较高级词汇所致；具备较强的语言运用能力。有效地使用了语句间的连接言运用能力。有效地使用了语句间的连接成分
2、，使全文结构紧凑。书写规范，完全成分，使全文结构紧凑。书写规范，完全达到了预期的写作目的。达到了预期的写作目的。分类仿写分类仿写第四档（好）（第四档（好）（16-20分）分） 完全完成了试题规定的任务。虽漏掉完全完成了试题规定的任务。虽漏掉1、2个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用个次重点，但覆盖所有主要内容。应用的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。语的语法结构和词汇能满足任务的要求。语法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错法结构或词汇方面应用基本准确，些许错误主要是因尝试复杂语法结构或词汇所致。误主要是因尝试复杂语法结构或词汇所致。应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使全文结应用简单的语句间的连接成分，使
3、全文结构紧凑。书写比较规范，达到了预期的写构紧凑。书写比较规范，达到了预期的写作目的。作目的。分类仿写根据每一类书面表达的特点，做分类训练：根据每一类书面表达的特点，做分类训练： 1、人物介绍、人物介绍 2、招聘应聘、招聘应聘 3、小故事（提纲式作文）、小故事（提纲式作文） 4、通知、通知 5、能源环保、能源环保 6、书信、书信 7、人口旅游与交通、人口旅游与交通 8、生活起居、生活起居 9、利弊讨论、利弊讨论 10、图表介绍、图表介绍 11、描述过程、描述过程 分类仿写招聘的写作常用到下列短语招聘的写作常用到下列短语（1）、）、apply for申请，请求申请，请求 Has he appli
4、ed for a visa? 她申请签证了吗？她申请签证了吗？ (2)、apply to sb for sth 向某人申请要什么东西向某人申请要什么东西The poor student has applied to the university for scholarship. 这位贫困大学生申请了奖学金。这位贫困大学生申请了奖学金。 (3)、provide sb with sth 为某人提供某物为某人提供某物 He provided us with a car when we went for travelling. 我们出去旅游时，他给我们提供了一辆车。我们出去旅游时，他给我们提供了一辆车
5、。分类仿写（4）、）、 look forward to 期待，盼望期待，盼望 We are looking forward to hearing from you soon.（5）、）、 call for需要，要求需要，要求 This job calls for patience. People were calling for the freedom of all slaves.（6）、）、 a variety of多种多样的多种多样的 This box contains a variety of toys.分类仿写（7）、）、 be fit /suitable for 适合，适合， 胜任。
6、胜任。 She is completely fit for the job.分类仿写学以致用：学以致用： 1.她准备向公司申请办公室秘书一职。她准备向公司申请办公室秘书一职。(apply) She is going to apply to the company for a job as a secretary of the office. 2.农业为我们提供食物。农业为我们提供食物。(provide) Farming provides us with food.分类仿写3.她盼望着某一天能出国深造。她盼望着某一天能出国深造。(look forward to) He is looking fo
7、rward to going abroad for further study.4.贫困地区目前的形势要求在教育培训上有更高的投贫困地区目前的形势要求在教育培训上有更高的投入。入。(call for) The situation in the poor area at present calls for more investment on the education.5.该工程因各种原因而破产。该工程因各种原因而破产。(a variety of) The project broke down for a variety of reasons.6.这些书适合儿童阅读。这些书适合儿童阅读。(be
8、 suitable for) These books are suitable for children.写作中常用到一些经典句型写作中常用到一些经典句型:1.There is an opportunity for you to apply for the job as a secretary of the English language. 有机会供你申请英文秘书一职。有机会供你申请英文秘书一职。2.Applicants are required to have a good knowlede of English. 受聘者要求精通英语。受聘者要求精通英语。3.You will have a
9、 starting salary at RMB 1500 per month. 你的起薪每月你的起薪每月1500元人民币。元人民币。4.I shall be glad to call for an interview at any time. 本人很乐意在任何时候前来面试。本人很乐意在任何时候前来面试。5.I am majoring in 本人主修本人主修6.I look forward to your call at 74568741 恭候您的电话，我的号码是恭候您的电话，我的号码是74568741。 7.I am confident that my experience and refer
10、ence will show that I can fulfill the particular requirement of your position. 我确信我的经历和证明材料将说明我能满足贵职位的我确信我的经历和证明材料将说明我能满足贵职位的特殊要求。特殊要求。8.I wish to apply for the post 本人有希望获得贵单位所提供的职位。本人有希望获得贵单位所提供的职位。热身训练热身训练 我看了贵公司昨天登在中国日我看了贵公司昨天登在中国日报上的广告，我觉得我适合贵公报上的广告，我觉得我适合贵公司所提供的职位。我今年司所提供的职位。我今年20岁。身岁。身体状况良好，我
11、擅长于操作电脑和体状况良好，我擅长于操作电脑和英语口语，我期待着能成为贵公司英语口语，我期待着能成为贵公司的一员。的一员。 I am happy to read your ad put in China Daily yesterday. There is an opportunity for everyone to apply for the job as a secretary of English language. I think I will be fit for the post and I am the very person you want. For one thing, I
12、am 20 and in good health. For another thing, I am good at computer. And first of all, I have a good knowledge of spoken English. If I am accepted, I will devote myself to the job. I am looking forward to being your employer. Yours sincerely评价书面表达的评价书面表达的评价 在高考评卷中发现，学生普遍存在写作能在高考评卷中发现，学生普遍存在写作能力较弱的现象。
13、现行高中英语写作的评价方法力较弱的现象。现行高中英语写作的评价方法主要是，教师抽查批改或全批全改，然后在课主要是，教师抽查批改或全批全改，然后在课堂上讲评，这种评价方法往往有弊端。堂上讲评，这种评价方法往往有弊端。评价1、忽视学生在评价中的主体作用。、忽视学生在评价中的主体作用。2、只注重评价写作结果，忽视写作过程。、只注重评价写作结果，忽视写作过程。3、评价的手段和方法过于单一。、评价的手段和方法过于单一。 写作评价应该遵循互动性原则，多元化原写作评价应该遵循互动性原则，多元化原则则,发展性原则。发展性原则。评价范文范文: It is almost known to all that smo
14、king is bad for peoples health. Smoking can lead to heart disease, cancer and other problems and 2.5 million people die from smoking each year. Still, many people find it difficult to stop smoking. One reason is that smoking usually becomes a habit, which is not easy to be given up. Another reason i
15、s the effect of nicotine, which is contained in tobacco.评价 Measures have been taken to help people keep away from the harm of smoking. In many cities, smoking is forbidden in public places. The danger of smoking is warned of everywhere. And newspapers are asked not to publish advertisements for ciga
16、rettes. World “No Tobacco Day” has been set against smoking. 分析1）段落的开展）段落的开展: topic sentence-supporting sentence(1). It is almost known to all that smoking is bad for peoples health.(2). Still, many people find it difficult to stop smoking.(3). Measures have been taken to help people keep away from
17、the harm of smoking.评价2）精彩佳句）精彩佳句(1). One reason is that smoking usually becomes a habit, which is not easy to be given up. (表语从句和非限制性定语从句的应用使文章行表语从句和非限制性定语从句的应用使文章行文简练，结构严谨，句法得当。文简练，结构严谨，句法得当。)(3). Measures have been taken to help people keep away from the harm of smoking. In many cities, smoking i
18、s forbidden in public places. The danger of smoking is warned of everywhere. And newspapers are asked not to publish advertisements for cigarettes. World “No Tobacco Day” has been set against smoking. （比较主动句和被动句在此段应用的区别，被动句强（比较主动句和被动句在此段应用的区别，被动句强调事实，句子的感染力和表现力更胜于主动句。）调事实，句子的感染力和表现力更胜于主动句。）评价3）精彩词汇）
19、精彩词汇 lead to、 die from、 find it difficult for sb to do sth、 give up、 contain、 take measures to do sth、 keep away from、 warn sb of the danger (高级词汇的使用文章表达更准确高级词汇的使用文章表达更准确)评价4）逻辑过渡）逻辑过渡: still的使用使文章逻辑清楚、的使用使文章逻辑清楚、 连贯。连贯。备考备考建议备考建议： 要写好书面表达，要有材料，有句子，要写好书面表达，要有材料，有句子，这就要求学生背诵一定的优美句子。这就要求学生背诵一定的优美句子。备考
20、一、适用于文章开头的句子一、适用于文章开头的句子1、对比类文章的开头。、对比类文章的开头。 Which is more important, wealth or health? Different people have different opinions. Should students make friends on line? Some people say yes. Others, however, think students should not.备考2、应用文的开头。、应用文的开头。 Our government is aiming to build a harmonious
21、society. I think it is every citizens duty to achieve this goal. As high school students, what should we do? What makes the ocean such a great place to live? The answer is water. May I have your attention, please? I have an announcement to make.备考3、书信或说明类文章的开头。、书信或说明类文章的开头。 I am so delighted to lear
22、n that. Thank you for your last letter asking about our library. Ok, I will tell you about it in detail. I am writing to tell you about the changes in my hometown. Here is my suggestion about your travel during the May Day holiday.备考4、图标类文章的开头。、图标类文章的开头。 From the table, we can see that film is givin
23、g way to TV in our city. According to a survey made last week. As can be seen from the graph, the number of the traffic accidents has been growing in recent years.备考二、适用于结尾的句子。二、适用于结尾的句子。 结尾一般是对文章的升华或对文章主题的结尾一般是对文章的升华或对文章主题的归纳，结尾要能唤起读者的共鸣，给人回归纳，结尾要能唤起读者的共鸣，给人回味，引人深思。结尾的句子可以表示祝愿、味，引人深思。结尾的句子可以表示祝愿、期望
24、或表明自己的观点。期望或表明自己的观点。 备考例如：例如： Lets start work now and do what we can to build a harmonious society. We do hope you can help us to take measures to protect our school and stop it from being polluted. It is my opinion that students should place their study, health and safety before other things.备考写作时，
25、要求学生审好题。（题材、要点、人写作时，要求学生审好题。（题材、要点、人称、时态）称、时态）要求学生写作前养成写提纲的习惯。包括段落、要求学生写作前养成写提纲的习惯。包括段落、词、词组、句型要进行思考取舍，用自己最熟词、词组、句型要进行思考取舍，用自己最熟悉的、最有把握的。悉的、最有把握的。要抓书写规范与卷面干净、整洁。要抓书写规范与卷面干净、整洁。 预测预测 这几年的书面表达，不讲形式，注重内容。这几年的书面表达，不讲形式，注重内容。其目的在于考查学生的基本写作能力，题材内其目的在于考查学生的基本写作能力，题材内容非常接近考生的生活，写作中提倡使用高级容非常接近考生的生活，写作中提倡使用高级
26、词汇和复杂结构。好的文章一般应用较多的句词汇和复杂结构。好的文章一般应用较多的句式结构和较高级的词汇。读起来优美流畅，这式结构和较高级的词汇。读起来优美流畅，这样就有亮点。另外，文章写作的条件性和开放样就有亮点。另外，文章写作的条件性和开放性兼有。体现了学生个性发展和思维的灵活，性兼有。体现了学生个性发展和思维的灵活，符合新课程理念。预计这一理念还将在符合新课程理念。预计这一理念还将在2010年年高考中体现。高考中体现。备考 总之，只要我们坚持正确的策略，持之以总之，只要我们坚持正确的策略，持之以恒恒,就一定能成功。就一定能成功。 最后，感谢各位领导各位老师，希望能多提最后，感谢各位领导各位老师，希望能多提宝贵意见。宝贵意见。
