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1、、四级作文评分标准:2 分 （相当于710）条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误。 （一塌糊涂）5 分 （相当于710）基本切题。表达思想不清楚，连贯性差。有较多的严重语言错误。（糊里糊涂）8 分 （相当于710）基本切题。有些地方表达思想不够清楚，文字勉强连贯；语言错误相多，其中有一些是严重错误。 （马马虎虎）11 分 （相当于710） 切题。表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误。（清清楚楚）14 分 （相当于710） 切题。表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性好。基本上无语言错误，仅有个别小错。 （漂漂亮亮）二、作文讲评Directions: For thi
2、s part, you are required to write a composition on the topic Competition and Cooperation. You should write at least 120 words and base your composition on the outline given in Chinese below:1 .在生活中，我们到处都能见到竞争。2 .有时竞争与合作是并存的。3 .我们要以正确的态度对待竞争与合作。审题步骤：1 .在生活中，我们到处都能见到竞争。第一段的关键词是“ 到处都能见到竞争 ”，用列举法稍作展开，点到
3、为止。2 .有时竞争与合作是并存的。第二段重点论述 两者之间的关系 ，用一个具体事例来论证两者是如何 并存 的后，再列举几个同样的事例补充说明，会使得论证充分翔实些。3 .我们要以正确的态度对待竞争与合作。第三段关键词在“ 态度 ”上。可以使用观点陈述法；也可以使用辩证法来说明不同的态度会带来的不同影响。三、本次作文的总体印象：1 . 多数同学都能做到基本切题和切题；2 . 能运用所学句型结构和高频词汇表达思想；3 .多数同学能做到卷面整洁，书写较工整；4 .少数同学未能按照写作提纲展开段落；5 .部分同学存在语言表达不够简洁或表达不清楚的问题；6 .段与段之间的过渡问题、句和句之间的连贯性问
4、题；7.拼写问题； competition 四、范文赏析 Sample 1 for Paragraph 1Competition exists in widely varied activities. Players of the same football team compete for slots on the team.In a workplace, colleagues compete for higher positions. And alson business firms become rivals for more consumers and a bigger markets
5、 sharAs for students we compete in the studies for the opportunities to join in a society.（运用列举法简要说明竞争无处不在）（13 分） （13级生科一一张蒙）Sample 2 for Paragraph 1Competition is a common phenomenon in our social life. We competewhen we play games we try to do better than others in study, and our job, fame, wealth
6、 and something else all involve competition. Consequently, we can say that, to some extentcompetition is one of the driving forces of the development of the society. （12 分）（13级物理朱朝阳）Sample for Paragraph 2For example, a film is released successfully as a result of the willing cooperative efforts of m
7、any workers. But different films compete against each other for higher profits at the boxoffice” （票房）.Actually, there are a lot of phenomenon paralleling shooting a movie in these respects such as the debate and the production of goods.举例贴切、新颖）（13 分）（13级历史付梅颦）Sample 1 for Paragraph 3To avoid meaning
8、less competition, what we should do can be listed as follows. Firstly, to consider competition as a method of improving ourselves, we are supposed to take competitors as accompanies who can company us on the way of life instead of our enemies. Furthermore, it would be a blessing if we can pull toget
9、her with prospective competitors to advance achievements. Bycooperating with them, we can undoubtedly, strengthen ourselves and find out their disadvantages in hope of seizing the opportunity.（观点陈述清楚、有条理。）（13 分）（13级历史骆勇）Sample 2 for Paragraph 3It follows that there is an inseparable relationship bet
10、ween competition and cooperatioWe cooperate with others to be more competitive, and we compete to earn a better environment for cooperation. Thus, we can make a progress continuouslySo, we should keep a right attitude about this: Only together with cooperation, can competition lead us to realize our
11、 common goals and encourage us to build a peaceful and prosperous, society.句式变化灵活多样！）（.14分）（13级历史程子璇）Sample 2 for Paragraph 2Although the law of the jungle which makes many people become out of work seems to be pretty cutthroat. However, cooperation is alsowildly distributed in the market and our da
12、ily life. Actually , they even rely on each other tcreach a balancebecause if employers always prefer to reflect on how could they beat their rivals rather than meet and satisfy the demands of the consumers, no one would be the winner at last.（12 分）（13级物理一一严体曾）Sample 3 for Paragraph 2Competition is
13、vital for a better life, but, does it mean that, cooperation is of no use? The answe is definitely no!（承上启下，过渡自然）In fact, competition and cooperation exist side by side in many situations. For example, like an researcher longing for Nobel Award, its a must for him or her to cooperate with others and
14、 work together with the whole team to defeat the opponents.（13 分） （13级心理一一莫宇琪）Sample 3 for Paragraph 3Its the attitude towards competition and cooperation we hold that determines whether we can have a colorful life. If we take competitom too seriously, life will be pale, and greed will destroy ourse
15、lves.In contrast, life will be so dull, and well lose our individuality. Hold a correct attitude to coordinate competition and cooperation; only in this way can we live a harmonious life. （1纷） （13级一一物理杨军文）Sample 1Competition exists widely in our daily life. For instance, students compete for grades,
16、 workers compete for higher positions and different firms compete for . profits （语言简洁，紧扣 exist widely 展开说明生活中，竞争无处不在。）However, competition is inseparable from cooperation .Indeed, to succeed in competition requires great cooperation skills.A basketball team is an unequaled example of cooperation, yet competition has a role to play even in teams. Different members com
