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1、专题16 书面表达，精彩纷呈技巧1 细审题，扣主题 1.你校正在组织英语作文比赛。请以身边值得尊敬和爱戴的人为题，写一篇短文参赛，内容包括:1. 人物简介；2. 尊敬和爱戴的原因。注意:1. 词数100左右；2. 短文题目和首句已为你写好。_【分析】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求学生以身边值得尊敬和爱戴的人为题，写一篇短文参赛。【详解】第一步：审题体裁：应用文。时态：根据提示，时态应为一般现在时。结构：总分法。要求：1.人物简介：2.尊敬和爱戴的原因。第二步：列提纲（重点短语）As for me；spare some time；listen to me patiently;第三步：连词成句1.A
2、s for me, my father is the person I respect mostly.2.He works very hard every day but he will also spare some time to accompany me and share many funny things with me about his work.3.My father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely.根据提示及关键词（组）进行遣词造句，注意主谓一致
3、和时态问题。第四步：连句成篇1.表示文章结构顺序：介绍人物；阐述原因2.表示并列补充关系：As for; and; but; So第五步：润色修改【点睛】范文内容完整，要点全面，语言规范，语篇连贯，词数适当，上下文意思连贯。复合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多的高端句式，如定语从句：My father is a teacher who loves his work and his students very much；非谓语动词：He achieved a lot in his work, respected by his students；时间状语从句：When I come across
4、the problem of learning in my study, my father will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely等。文章思路清晰，层次分明，上下句转换自然。为文章增色添彩。【答案】The person I respectWe have a lot of respectable people around us. They may be our teachers, parents or one of our elders. As for me, my f
5、ather is the person I respect most. My father is a teacher who loves his work and his students very much. He works very hard every day but he will also spare some time to accompany me and share many funny things with me about his work. When I come across the problems of learning in my study, my fath
6、er will listen to me patiently and encourage me to overcome the difficulties bravely. He achieved a lot in his work, respected by his students. So, in my mind my father is the person I respect most and I love him deeply.2. （2019新课标卷I）假定你是李华，暑假在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要剧版中国画展。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括：1.写信目的；2.个人优势；3.能做的
7、事情。注意：1. 词数100左右；2. 可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3. 结束语已为你写好。_Looking forward to your early reply. Yours, Li Hua.【错因分析】本文虽然看起来比较容易，但学生真正动起笔来，还是比较困惑的。原因为：1.个人的优势，写作时不能简单地罗列自己优点，而要选取与内容相关的、具有说服力的优点来写；2.能做的事情有很多，写作时要简洁扼要地介绍自己能做的、与画展相关的事情，而不要啰里啰嗦地写一堆。【写作指导】本篇书面表达属于应用文。要求考生写申请信，人称使用第一人称和第二人称，时态用一般现在时。书信格式，落款文中已经给出。首段
8、，写信的目的，中间段写个人优势和能做的事，最后一段总结。根据写作要点及构思好的提纲我们可以初步确定文章可能使用到的词汇有：volunteer，a Chinese Painting Exhibition，local city，advantages，a good command of，beneficial for，familiarity with，appreciate ，take my application into consideration。通过词汇铺垫，我们就很容易地行文了，文章写完之后要检查文中是否存在拼写或语法错误，并增加一些细节和过渡性的词汇，如First of all, Besid
9、es, to begin with，moreover，as for me，Last but not least等，使全文衔接自然，语意流畅。【参考范文】 Dear Sir or Madam,I am a Chinese student named Li Hua, who is studying in London during the summer vacation. Knowing that the local art gallery will hold an exhibition of Chinese paintings, I am writing to apply for volunte
10、ering. As a student who has learned Chinese painting since 5 years old, I am very pleased to have an opportunity to introduce Chinese paintings to foreigners. Besides, my fluent spoken English and rich knowledge about Chinese paintings will help visitors understand the meaning behind each painting d
11、eeply. I will appreciate it if I could be given the opportunity.Looking forward to your early reply. Yours, Li Hua.2. 假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，介绍在传统文化进校园活动中，向面人艺术家学习捏面人的过程，并以A Day with a Craftsman为题，给校刊英语角写一篇英文稿件。注意： 词数不少于 60。提示词： 一个面团 a piece of dough 面人 dough figurine（请务必将作文写在答题卡指定区域内）_【错因分析】对
12、于看图作文，考生会由于审题不清，往往纠缠于某幅图中的某个细节而偏离文章的主题。【试题解析】这是一幅图画作文。四幅图向我们展示了一个完整的小故事，应按照事情的发展的时间顺序结合每幅图的要点进行写作。本题考查的细节是手工艺人教大家如何去做这个东西，学生认真聆听，是教与学。第二幅图最重要的点就是学生能不能找到学生认真聆听这个环节，因为老师教一定能看得出来，但是学生能不能写到学生在听，这应该是一个得分点。第三幅图是一个指导。所以，重点在于一对一这样对应的指导关系。最后一幅图是我们在上课的时候会重点讲照相，大家很欢乐，做成一个作品。 所以，除了四幅图的要点之外，重点在于一对一这样对应的指导关系。所以写好
13、这样的作文一定要抓住细节，才能得分。还需要注意时态，词汇不要拼写错误，多用复合句式才能体现出亮点。考生切忌在文章开篇犯低级的语法错误，尤其注意时态、单复数及冠词的正确使用。相比于实用性强的应用文来说，情景作文可以在保证要点齐全的前提下适当增加长难句的使用，如对非谓语、三大从句及连词进行灵活运用。关注句式的多样性及用词的准确性对取得该板块的高分会有更大的保障。本文可分三段来写： 第一段简单介绍故事发生的背景信息；第二段描述图画的内容；第三段对全文进行总结。【参考范文】 Last Tuesday, our class invited an old craftsman to teach us how to make dough figurines
