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1、考研英语短文写作十年真题分析第十节 2009年Section III Writing2009年考研英语考试结束了。今年走出考场的考生普遍感觉今年的试题较往年难度有所降低，尤其是写作部分两道题目难度适中，大家基本发挥出了正常水平。下面针对小作文和大作文分别给予点评，并提供阅卷的范文供大家参考。Part A51. Directions:Restrictions on the use of plastic bags have not been so successful in some regions. “White pollution” is still going on. Write a let
2、ter to the editor(s) of your local newspaper to 1) give your opinions briefly and 2) make two or three suggestionsYou should write about 100 word. Do not sign your own name at the end of the letter. Use Li Ming instead. You do not need to write the address. (10 points)一审题构思小作文去年考的道歉信，09年小作文要求写一封建议信。
3、今年的建议信相比07年的建议信要求更加具体，且话题更为熟悉。考生对这个话题可写的东西比较多。且在平时大作文的训练中考生都接触过不少表达观点看法和提出建议的方法，尤其在环境保护方面的建议措施接触的更多，因此这篇小作文题材大家非常熟悉，难度适中。如果同学在考前临阵抱佛脚，只要把建议信的套话背下来，比如建议信的第一句话怎么写，中间怎么写，最后一句怎么结尾，直接把有关内容换成白色污染即可。二框架思路确切地讲，今年的小作文仍然是没有脱离开过去的老套，又是一封信，而这封信对同学们来讲，是我们很熟悉的白色塑料袋的使用问题。有很多商家为了争取自己定期的常客，他们可能会想到促销的手段或者销售的途径，那就是说送给
4、你塑料袋，方便你使用。但是这些顾客们可能有些人是懂得或者说环保意识很强的，有些塑料袋，他们总是重复地去用；可是有一些不尽然，像年轻人这样，用过后就扔掉。谈到了白色污染这个话题，就想给编辑写封信，信中反映的是你对这个现象的一个看法，之后，你应该提出一些解决的措施，所以这封信里面要讲的话一点都不难写，最重要的是我们要做一个对社会有责任的人，因为只有如此我们才能够用我们的心去感知这个社会的问题，才能真正从我们内心想出一些方法，使我们的社会更加洁净，这样才能更加和谐。 本文可以按三段处理，首段直接谈白色污染的情况，中段讲出解决问题的建议和措施，最后再次提醒编辑关注此事刻不容缓，并加强礼貌语气。三参考范
5、文Dear Editor(s), I am writing this letter to draw your attention to“White Pollution”. No one can avoid using plastic bags in our daily lives and too many plastic bags bring about many problems. How to solve this problem has become a hot issue among many people in recent years.To address this problem
6、, I would like to lodge several suggestions. On the one hand, the authorities should set up rules and regulations to control the production and circulation of the plastic bags. On the other hand, people should realize the significant of protecting our environment and not use too many plastic bags.I
7、sincerely hope that you can take my letter seriously. Thank you very much for your time and consideration.Yours faithfully,Li Ming (126words) 亲爱的编辑：我写此信是为了让您关注“白色污染”这一问题。在日常生活中人们总是会用到塑料袋，而塑料袋过多会产生很多问题。如何解决这一问题成为近年来很多人关心的话题。 为了解决这一问题，我想提如下的建议。一方面，政府当局应该制定一些规章制度来控制塑料袋的生产和流通使用。另一方面，人们应该意识到保护环境的重要性并不使用太
8、多的塑料袋。 我真诚地希望您能认真对待我的信。感谢您拨冗关注。您诚挚的李明四文章点评：范文为缩进格式。由于本信函属于公务信件，题目提供的名字就是编辑，所以要按较正式的口吻来写作，文章开始的称呼为Dear Editor，语气就比较正式。第一段开门见山，使用draw your attention to结构直接表示请求关注。首段使用了and连接两个并列句的信息。语法上，最后一句使用了How to引出的名词短语作为主语，点明了文章的中心。第二段承上启下，按议论文模式设定了段首句，提出的两种方案用On the one hand和On the other hand灵活列出。本段中，动词address和lo
9、dge较有特色。第三段中，作者再次请求关注。按照信函写作“感谢客气不能少”的原则，应连续两次使用传达礼貌的句型。五阅卷样文五档：9分Dear editor,Im a sincere reader of your newspaper and I like your discussion of the social problems. Now I want to give some opinions of myself about the “White Pollution”.As we know, regulation was made to solve the problem in June 1
10、st of 2008. The use of plastic bags was restricted in the supermarket and many other shops freely. At the beginning, it was carried on well, but now I found plastic bags were used in some small shops for free or with no pay.I am writing to tell you that we should solve this problem soon with the hel
11、p of your newspaper. You could make some investigators about it and write some reports of it, so as to appeal to all the peoples attentions of our society.Sincerely, Li Ming评语：本文很好地完成了试题规定的任务，与目标读者完全产生了预期的效果： 1内容包含了所有的内容要点，该文第一段的内容更吻合题目的要求。 2所使用的语法结构和词汇比较丰富。 3语言比较自然流畅，尽管存在个别的语法（例如，时态）和用词错误。 4有效使用了各种
12、衔接手段，层次清晰，组织也比较严密。 5格式与语域恰当贴切。 四档：7-8分Dear Editor Wang,I am a senior student living in Beijing. Being a citizen in our capital, I care a lot about our environment. But, although the law of not using plastic bags had been enforced since June, the effect is not very good. I am afraid “White Pollution”
13、 will still exist for a long time.I believe there are ways to improve the situation. Our communities could offer bags free, which will substitute plastic bags. Meanwhile, some education on environment and White pollution should be held to local people. Besides the above two, much more can be done. I
14、 hope you would consider it carefully.Yours trulyLi Ming评语：较好地完成了试题规定的任务，基本能够对目标读者产生预期的效果： 1. 包含了所有的内容要点，既简要介绍了自己的观点，又提出了具体的建议。 2. 所使用的句子结构和词汇相对比较丰富，例如：Being a citizen in, I care等。 3. 语言基本正确，当然也存在着一些语法错误和用词的错误，但是并不会严重影响意义的表达。 4. 采用了适当的衔接手段，例如, but, meanwhile, besides等，层次也比较清晰。 5. 格式和语域比较恰当。 三档：5-6分T
15、o whom it may concern:As a student of a university, I want to take this opportunity to express some points about “White Pollution”.There is no denying that plastic is destroy our environment is we use it excessively. So the government take some means to deal with it. Restrict to use the plastic bags
16、 in whole country. But it didnt get successful as we predict. The “White Pollution” is still around our environment in some regions.Takes measures is needed. I want to take some recommends. First and formost, more strength restriction is needed by pollution education. Second, media should spread more informa
