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1、大技巧帮你清减作文冗余快速提分托福写作3 大技巧帮你清减作文冗余 快速提分托福写作在托福写作备考的时候，很多初入托福的学生往往最为担忧的就是凑不齐文章的字数。在拼拼凑凑的写完了一篇托福文章后，回头再看，才会放在自己的文章存在了很多过冗余的地方。也就是内容空洞无物，描写过于繁琐，那么，针对这些问题我们应该怎样加以解决呢?一、选择比拟实际实用的单词，不用空洞的词汇1. 一些空洞的单词或词组根本不能为句子带来任何相关的或重要的信息，完全可以被删掉。比方下面的句子：When all things are considered， young adults of today live more satis
2、fying lives than those of their parents， in my opinion.这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents.2. 有些空洞和繁琐的表达方式可以进展交换，例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to help their paren
3、ts， they did not have the options that young people have at this point in time.“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以交换，简化为下面的表达方式：Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents， they did not have the options that young people have now.二、尽量减少重复，不要太啰嗦1. 尽量防止重复使用同样的词汇。或者有的时候虽然词汇没有重
4、复，但意思却有重复。这时候可以做一些简化的工作。例如下面这个例子：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size.large 对一个 farm 来说就是 size 方面的 large，所以 in size 可以去掉，改为：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large.更简洁的表达方式为：My grandfather grew up on a large farm. 2. 有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来交换，例如：My grandfather has said over and over
5、again that he had to work on his parents farm.这里的 over and over again 就可以改为 repeatedly，显得更为简洁：My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parents farm.三、相关语法要选择最恰当的表达方式选择适宜的语法构造可以使句子意思的表达更为准确和简练。虽然语法的多样性也很重要，但选择最恰当的语法构造仍然是更为重要的考虑因素。以下，推荐几种考生们在考虑选择何种语法构造时可以参考的原那么：1. 一个句子的主语和谓语动词应该可以
6、反映句子中的最重要的意思。例如：.The situation that resulted in my grandfathers not being able to study engineering was that his father needed help on the farm.从意思上来分析p ，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfathers not being able to study”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是 situation，谓语动词是 was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念，可以改为下面这句话：My grandfather couldnt study
7、engineering because his father needed help on the farm.2. 防止频繁使用“there be”构造，例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milk every day. It was hard work for my grandfather.可以改为：My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm every day.更简洁的句式为：My grandfather work
8、ed hard milking 25 cows daily.3. 把从句改为短语或单词。例如：Dairy cows were raised on the farm， which was located100 kilometers from the nearest university and was in an area that was remote.简介的表达方式为：The dairy farm was located in a remote area， 100 kilometers to the nearest university.4. 仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态
9、。例如：In the fall， not only did the cows have to be milked， but also the hay was mowed and stacked by my grandfathers family.本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“繁忙的家庭-my grandfathers family”，而使用了被动语态后，仿佛重心变成了 cows 和 hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一些：In the fall， my grandfathers family not only milked the cow but also mowed a
10、nd stacked the hay.5. 用更为准确的一个动词来代替动词短语，例如下面这句话：My grandfather didnt have time to stand around doing nothing with his school friends.Stand around doing nothing 其实可以用一个动词来表达，即 loiter：My grandfather didnt have time to loiter with his school friends.6. 有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达，例如：Profits from the far
11、m were not large. Sometimes they were too small to meet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for a university degree.两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子：Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operational expenses， let alone pay for a university degree.简单并不代表没有难度，一篇好的托福作文，必须逻辑明晰、词汇和句式运用恰当。假如考生对新托福写作备考中的长句没有太大的把握，那么不妨拆成更有把握的短句，一样能获得高分。第 页 共 页
