[文档标题]第一学期福州市高三质量抽测英语读后续写试题第二节 (满分25分)阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文When Aiden asked me to go with him on a camping trip to the mountains, I thought it would mean a cottage with a wood-burning fireplace and hot chocolate. My comfortable image of camping became a nightmare (噩梦) when Aiden and his older brother, Lebron, showed up with camping supplies—tents, rolled-up sleeping bags, and canteens! I did pack a backpack, as instructed, but I had no idea we were going on survival training!Lebron had a perfect plan, and he hurried me to get in so we could leave the busy city life behind us. Ahead, the mountains appeared bigger than I had remembered them: the trees were larger, and the environment was much more dangerous. At least the weather was amazing—cotton-candy clouds dotted the deep blue sky.Before we began hiking, Lebron had a sleeping bag stuffed into my pack and told Aiden and me about hiking rules. The first part of the road looked easy. Soon, the path became narrower and rougher, forcing me to talk less. As we went higher, I could see the road zigzagging (蜿蜒) up the mountain.“It looks closer than it is,” Lebron said, reading my facial expressions. “This is the most difficult part… watch your step, not the view. Loose rocks and tree roots make the road dangerous.”Finally, we reached the top. My legs aching, I dropped my pack and complained. “No time to rest,” Lebron said, looking up at the sky. The weather had been warm all day, and it felt good to relax in the cool wind. “The weather up here changes quickly, and that cool air means a storm is around the corner. We need to set up camp.”注意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式作答。
Paragraph 1: I thought Lebron was kidding, but without delay they worked expertly.Paragraph 2: Lebron, sensing that I was scared, reached in his backpack for candies.【试题信息】试卷名称体裁主题语境词数2021-2022学年第一学期福州市高三质量抽测记叙文人与自我正文英文词数287，两个词给了中文提示，续写第一段首句11个单词，续写第二段首句12个单词语篇分析】1. what（前文主旨）作者被朋友Aiden邀请去参加露营旅行，但不如作者预期一样轻松，甚至令作者感觉不适在旅行途中，他们穿过树林和狭长的小道，一路艰辛并充满危险最后当他们达到山顶，Aiden的哥哥认为天气将会突变，他们需要搭起帐篷，故事也由此展开2. why（故事主题）直面困难，团结互助3. how（写作技巧）第一人称、记叙、描写4. 具体内容（利用拉波夫叙事模式进行分析） 点题这篇文章没有标题，作者将文章的信息浓缩在了第一段中通过阅读第一段可知，本章讲述的是a camping trip to the mountains的事情。
指向本篇文章的指向就是第一二段，时间是他们集合准备去旅行的这一天，地点就是通往山脉的路途以及山上，主要人物是Aiden的哥哥Lebron和“我”，次要人物是Aiden主要活动是三人相约参加徒步露营旅行 进展本文的进展是作者在旅途过程中，发现旅行氛围并不如意，甚至让作者感到想要放弃当同行三人达到山顶时，想要停下休息的作者却要告知马上会有暴雨来临，必须合力一起准备好搭建帐篷躲避 结果/结局结局部分是需要学生续写的，通过前面的情节走向，再根据续写第一段的首句“I thought Lebron was kidding, but without delay they worked expertly.”可知，他们即将面临大暴雨，Aiden和Lebron已经行动起来，而根据第二段首句“Lebron, sensing that I was scared, reached in his backpack for candies.”可知作者受到大雨的影响而胆颤害怕，说明上一段中帐篷的搭建过程，作者并没有参加或者是离开了营地，当Lebron找到作者并安慰时，作者应该意识到了团结互助的重要，那结局肯定是三人一起度过了风雨，作者也受到了启发，吸取了教训。
评议本文的评议内容比较隐晦，贯穿全文从文章中作者的态度和描述来看，作者对此次旅行并不抱有好的期待，在路途中身体不适，并有所抱怨，致使心情低落，丧失动力而好友Aiden的哥哥Lebron却在文章中起到了至关重要的作用，他不仅是旅行的发起人之一，也在过程中提醒作者注意危险，提供旅行技巧，并正确预测暴雨的来临所以后面的续写一定是形成作者和Lebron行为的对比，一个失落，一个出手救助，让作者重新振奋起来5. 语言 人物角色1：Lebron性格：热心、认真负责行为：发起活动、提醒危险及抚慰心情、搭建帐篷、伸出援手心理：cautious → worried→ determined → happy角色2：“我”性格：内向、不坚定行为：被拉去徒步旅行，发现旅行不如意，心情低落，不听取伙伴意见，受到惊吓后被同伴的援助打动，受到启发吸取教训心理：unhappy → hesitant→ afraid→ happy角色3：Aiden 无场景 通往山脉的路途以及山上语言风格语言风格很平实6. 情节 冲突“我”心情低落，丧失斗志，不听取同伴的意见 行动 “我”没有参加帐篷的搭建，突如其来的暴雨让“我”不知所措，感到害怕。
续写第一段） 解决Lebron伸出援手，用糖果安慰“我”，让我感到团结的重要性，我们一起躲避度过暴雨，享受困难后的美好时光续写第二段） 伏笔前文提到作者对此次旅行并不感冒，并且在路途中身体不适，在到达山顶时，抱怨过程艰难，心情低落而Lebron一直扮演了“老大哥”的角色，热情负责所以在遇到暴雨的时候，他们之间心理和行为的反差，成为了为结局铺垫的引导素材积累】Para 1I did pack a backpack, as instructed, but I had no idea we were going on survival training. (同位语从句)rolled-up: (adj.) 卷起来的wood-burning: (adj.) 烧木头的show up 出现survival training 生存训练Para 3Soon, the path became narrower and rougher, forcing me to talk less. (非谓语动词短语作状语)stuff: (v.) 装填Para 4facial expressions 面部表情Para6Seeing them busy with these supplies, I sat along and enjoyed myself. (非谓语动词短语作状语)expertly: (adv.) 专业地chilled: (adj.) 颤抖的Para7Lebron, sensing that I was scared, reached in his backpack for candies. (非谓语动词短语作状语)I began to be sorry for what I had done before. (宾语从句)It was a lesson I have learned from this camping. (定语从句)settle down 安定下来【范文赏读】I thought Lebron was kidding, but without delay they worked expertly. They took out the tents prepared before and began to put them up. Seeing them busy with these supplies (非谓语动词短语作状语), I sat along and enjoyed myself. Just then, there came a loud thunder, and big wind followed. A storm was coming and the sky was dark too. How could I do? When I was hesitant, a heavy rain poured down. I couldn’t see anything with rain running down my cheeks. Chilled enough, I can’t help crying. Suddenly, Lebron took me to the tent.Lebron, sensing that I was scared, reached in his backpack for candies. With these candies, I felt much better. I began to be sorry for what I had done before, but they comforted me with warm words and help。