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1、Population aging, which has made it difficult for many companies to recruit eligible young employees, pushes people to rethink whether compulsory retirement has been out-of-date. In my opinion, we should abolish this regulation and create more flexible legal articles instead, to protect the benefits
2、 of both workers and employers.One of the reasons is that mandatory retirement results in a huge waste of human resources. People differ in innate talents, physical conditions and career types, so a unified requirement for their retiring age will probably prevent them from continually contributing t
3、o the society. For example, an elder prestigious professor will be required to stop working when he reaches the age for retirement, no matter how well his body function is and how enthusiastic of him to commit to his job. It is counterproductive for him to realize potential to the utmost and achieve
4、 a sense of accomplishment, thereby causing a waste of his knowledge and intelligence.This regulation is likely to lead to skills gap in many corporations and end with the shortfall of capital. This is particularly the case for companies in high-technology area, in which the manager needs to spend l
5、ots of money and effort on recruiting and training new workers after the old stuff retire, especially when young talents are more and more difficult to find under the aging trend. Consequently, the lower quality of work outputs at the meantime will exert a detrimental effect on their financial power
6、 and competitiveness. Some people may argue that if the mandatory retirement is abolished, the benefits that employees are endowed with will be easily disregarded. It is possible for them to suffer from labor exploitation of greedy superiors, and be required to take large amount of workloads to maxi
7、mize companies interests. As a result, they are deprived the chance of enjoying the happiness of family reunion and are at greater risks of sickness. In my mind, however, this concern can be addressed through specific legislation, like setting rules specialized in labor-incentive works, but intellec
8、tual works should be in the same case.As suggested above, considering the potential damages which are brought by compulsory retirement, it should be abolished.评语：1. 总结段有些单薄，最好能总结上文出现的观点。2. 第二段中提出公司会花钱培养新员工，这是一个普遍的现象，因为现在的员工都有一个入职培训，所以可以将这一段的观点改为用老员工，可以减少公司培养新人的花费同时也可以缓解新人难找的压力。3. 句意表达比较流畅，词汇使用丰富，多样。
9、评分项解释 评 分Task Achievement任务完成情况Covers all requirements of the task满足题目所有要求6Coherence and Cohesion连贯性和衔接性Sequencing of information and ideas logically, sufficient and appropriate paragraphing.信息和内容组织符合逻辑，分段足够且恰当7Lexical Resource词汇多样性Correct word choice and a lot of uncommon words.选词正确，能使用不常见词汇7Grammar语法Command of the elements of Standard Written English, including grammar, and sentence structure.能运用标准的书面英语，包括语法及句式结构7得分：6.5
