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1、书面表达学生观摩篇（2）书面表达训练为配合我县开展“创建卫生文明城市(build a civilized and clean city)”活动，学校举办以“How to Behave Well”为主题的英语征文比赛。现在请你根据所给提示内容，用英语写一篇参赛短文。提示：1.衣着整洁； 2.保持环境卫生，不随地吐痰和乱扔垃圾； 3.待人有礼，乐于助人； 4.遵守交通规则； 5. 要求：1.文章必须包括所给提示中14项内容，可展开思路，适当发挥；2.文中不能出现考生的真实姓名、校名和其他真实信息；3.词数：80-100词左右。How to Behave Well?In order to build
2、 a civilized and clean city, we students should_【参考范文】How to Behave Well? In order to build a civilized city, we students should try our best to behave well in the activities. Its a good habit to keep our clothes clean and tidy. Our city should be kept clean every day. Dont throw litter or spit abou
3、t. Its good manners to say Thank you and Please and so on. We should never say dirty words. Be friendly to others and always ready to help the people in need. For example, when we are on a bus, we should give our seats to the old and the women with babies. We should also obey traffic rules. When the
4、 traffic lights are red, we should stop. And wed better not talk or laugh loudly in public. If everyone behaves well, our city will be more beautiful and more attractive书面表达训练假如你是李华，最近收到一封英国笔友Tom的来信。他希望了解你校如何保证学生在校期间的安全。请你根据下面的提示用英语写一封回信，介绍你校的做法并发表你的看法或建议。学校已采取的措施你的看法或建议1. 各方面安全教育，增强安全意识: 如食品、交通2. 安
5、全监督：如与家长及时沟通，3. 保安人员管理：如增加保安人员数量, 明确职责4. 对外来人员：来访出示证件、登记等 注意：(1) 信的开头、结尾已给出、不计入总词数。(2) 词数：100左右，信的内容可适当发挥以使行文连贯。 参考词汇：安全意识 awareness of safety 登记register(vi.) 保安 security guard Dear Tom, Im glad to receive your letter and thank you for your concern about our students security._ We believe a safer sc
6、hool will provide us students a better learning environment. Yours, Li Hua【参考范文】Dear Tom, Im glad to receive your letter and thank you for your concern about our students security.So far many measures have been taken to ensure the students security in and out of our school. The security issue has be
7、en emphasized on. We have organized several school meetings to strengthen the students awareness of safety about food, traffic and so on. By communicating with parents often and in time, our school can supervise and ensure our safety. Besides, a proper number of security guards have been employed to
8、 guard the school under a clear duty. Stricter security measures have been taken by our school, including a requirement that all visitors provide identification and register. The students have been taught the ways to protect themselves from danger. For example, once we smell something unusual, we sh
9、ould report it to the school guard immediately. In my view, our school has been doing pretty well and we are looking forward to more effective measures. We believe a safer school will provide us students a better learning environment.【2014高考英语广东省梅州市质检试卷】基础写作 (共1小题，满分15分)以下是网上走红的 “低碳哥”的基本情况.时 间: 2011
10、年。人物介绍: “低碳哥”, 用行动宣讲环保概念的年轻人,主张少用能源,减少二氧化碳的排放。主要做法: 1. 捡起废纸,用空白一面写字； 2. 不开灯看电视,还把电视亮度调到最低(minimum)； 3. 上班骑自行车,不开车等。人们的看法: 做秀,不现实。你的看法: 我完全支持他的想法和行为，尽管他的行为未能对全球气候变暖造成很大的影响，但他至少可以享受健康的生活。【写作内容】根据以上“低碳哥”的基本情况写一篇介绍,内容包括:1、 “低碳哥”的简要介绍及走红的时间;2、 他的主要做法及人们的看法3、你的看法【写作要求】只能使用5个句子表达全部内容。【评分标准】句子结构准确，信息内容完整，篇章
11、结构连贯。参考词汇: 低碳哥Low-carbon Brother 二氧化碳 carbon dioxide【参考范文】Possible version:A young man called Low-carbon Brother became a hit one on the Internet in 2011, who suggests living a low carbon life, which means using less energy in our daily life so that we can help reduce carbon dioxide in the air. For
12、example, he always picks up some waste paper on the street and uses the blank side to write something and while he is watching TV, he always turns down the brightness to the minimum and turns off the light. Besides, he goes to work by bike instead of driving. Some people think that what he is doing
13、is just a show and impractical. But as far as I am concerned, I strongly support his idea and his behavior because although what he is doing has no huge effect on global warming, he at least can enjoy a healthy life.基础写作评分说明基础写作主要考查考生的语言结构的应用能力：能够应用正确、规范的语言表达特定的内容。本试题要求考生根据所提供的信息，使用5个句子表达写作内容所提供的全部内
14、容。在评分时，应注意以下几个方面：1按照评分标准，实行分析法评分：按语言、内容和连贯三项标准分别给分；2在语言方面，重点评判句子的语法结构是否正确、用词是否规范；考生是否使用了合适的句型结构；3在内容方面，重点评判考生是否表达所提供的全部信息；如果考生在表达完整的内容时，适当添加一些内容，不扣分；4在连贯方面，重点评判5个句子是否构成一篇连贯的短文。三、基础写作评分标准:语 言7-8具有很好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性高，词汇方面使用较好，只有少许错误。5-6具有较好的语言运用能力；语法和句子结构准确性较好，有一些语法结构或词汇方面的错误，但不影响理解。3-4语言运用能力一般；语法和句
15、子结构基本准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误不影响理解。1-2语言运用能力较差；语法和句子结构基本不够准确，语法结构或词汇方面的错误较多，而且影响了对句子意义的理解。0语言运用能力很差；语法、句子结构、词汇错误很多，句子意义无法理解。备注每多或少写一个句子，扣1分。内 容5包括了所有信息内容。4包括了大部分信息内容。3包括了基本信息内容。2包括了小部分信息内容。1包括了少许信息内容。0没有包括所提供的信息内容。连 贯2内容连贯，而且结构紧凑。1.5内容连贯性比较好，而且结构比较紧凑。1内容连贯性较差，而且结构不够紧凑。0内容缺乏连贯性，而且结构松散。备注文不对题，给0分。【2014高考英语安徽省六校联考】书面表达 (满分25分)手机和我们的生活越来越密
