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1、 最权威的国际教育服务平台 资料来源：教育优选 http:/ all things are considered, young adults of today live moresatisfying lives than those of their parents, in my opinion。这句话当中的“when all things are considered”和“in my opinion“都显得多余。完全可以去掉。改为：Young adults of today live more satisfying lives than their parents。2.有些空洞和繁琐的表达方
2、式可以进行替换例如：Due to the fact that our grandparents were under an obligation to helptheir parents, they did not have the options that young people have at thispoint in time。“due to the fact that”就是一个很典型的繁琐的表达方式的例子，可以替换，简化为下面的表达方式：Because our grandparents were obligated to help their parents, they did no
3、thave the options that young people have now。最权威的国际教育服务平台 资料来源：教育优选 http:/ farm my grandfather grew up on was large in size。large 对一个 farm 来说就是 size 方面的 large，所以 in size 可以去掉，改为：The farm my grandfather grew up on was large。更简洁的表达方式为：My grandfather grew up on a large farm。2.有时一个词组可以用一个更简单的单词来替换例如：My
4、grandfather has said over and over again that he had to work on hisparents farm。这里的 over and over again 就可以改为 repeatedly，显得更为简洁：My grandfather has said repeatedly that he had to work on his parentsfarm。建建议议三：三：选择选择最恰当的最恰当的语语法法结结构构最权威的国际教育服务平台 资料来源：教育优选 http:/ situation that resulted in my grandfathe
5、rs not being able to studyengineering was that his father needed help on the farm。从意思上来分析，上面这句话需要表达的重要的概念是“grandfathers not being able tostudy”，而在表达这个概念时，原句用的主语是 situation，谓语动词是 was，不能强调需要表达的重点概念，可以改为下面这句话：My grandfather couldnt study engineering because his father needed help onthe farm。2.避免频繁使用“th
6、ere be”结构例如下面的句子：There were 25 cows on the farm that my grandfather had to milkevery day. It was hard work for my grandfather。可以改为：My grandfather worked hard. He had to milk 25 cows on the farm everyday。更简洁的句式为：My grandfather worked hard milking 25 cows daily。3.把从句改为短语或单词。最权威的国际教育服务平台 资料来源：教育优选 http
7、:/ cows were raised on the farm, which was located100 kilometers fromthe nearest university and was in an area that was remote。简介的表达方式为：The dairy farm was located in a remote area, 100 kilometers to the nearestuniversity。4.仅在需要强调宾语而不是主语的时候，才使用被动语态。例如：In the fall, not only did the cows have to be mil
8、ked, but also the haywas mowed and stacked by my grandfathers family。本句不够简洁的原因是本句的重心应该是“忙碌的家庭-my grandfathersfamily”，而使用了被动语态後，彷佛重心变成了 cows 和 hay。下面的表达方式是主动语态，相对来说更简洁一些：In the fall, my grandfathers family not only milked the cow but also mowedand stacked the hay。5.用更为精确的一个动词来代替动词短语，例如：My grandfather
9、 didnt have time to stand around doing nothing with hisschool friends。Stand around doing nothing 其实可以用一个动词来表达，即 loiter：My grandfather didnt have time to loiter with his school friends。6.有时两句话的信息经过组合完全可以用一句话来简练地表达最权威的国际教育服务平台 资料来源：教育优选 http:/ from the farm were not large. Sometimes they were too small tomeet the expenses of running a farm. They were not sufficient to pay for auniversity degree。两句话的信息可以合并为下面这句更为简洁的句子：Profits from the farm were sometimes too small to meet operationalexpenses, let alone pay for a university degree。
