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1、1,The woman I admire mostComposition,2,Everyone all have a admire most woman. I admire most the woman is my mother. 每个人都有一个最崇拜的女性。我最崇拜的女性是我妈妈。,Everyone all has a woman he admires most. The woman I admire most is my mother.,用上定语从句，让句子不再复杂。,3,My mother is the most admire woman. She is a kindness woman
2、.,admire是动词，要用形容词形式admirable。kindness是名词，不可以用来形容名词，要用形容词kind 善良的。,kind,admirable,4,So I do everything more and more better.,So I do everything better and better.,better已经是比较级，要想表达越来越好，就用better and better。,5,I love she very much.,I love her very much. 做宾语，要用人称代词的宾格。,6,She can give up her business and
3、 successful just for I can study more harder than before.,success,so that,7,it was so hard to looked after me that she had to give her job.,look,up,8,She was taught me sing songs.,to,She taught me to sing songs. She taught me how to sing songs.,9,I must thanks to my mother because she gives me new l
4、ife. thanks to不能做动词用，要用say thanks to Thanks to the English language, we can learn a lot from other countries,10,my mother let me understand what is love.,my mother let me understand what love is. 宾语从句的语序必须是陈述语序，尤其要注意whether, if和wh疑问句引导的宾语从句的语序，即按照主语，谓语的顺序。,11,作文写作技巧,(1)注意篇章结构，合理布局 开始部分(opening parag
5、raph)说出文中的要点、核心问题。 正文部分(Body paragraphs)围绕主题开展叙述、讨论。 结尾部分(concluding paragraphs)对全文的总结和概括。 要做到全文中心突出、段落之间必须是有机地联系，内容完整、连贯。前后呼应，去除与主题无关的内容.,12,(2)确定主题句 主题句是对全文的概括，是文章的主旨。它能在文章中起到“画龙点睛”的作用。通常主题句出现在一篇文章的开头，而后，全文对主题句所提出的内容进行解释，扩展。 写主题句应注意以下几点： 归纳出你要写的文章的几个要点 提炼出一句具有概括性的话 主题句应具有可读性，抓住、吸引读者。,13,一：开头 句子的开头
6、方式，不要一味地都是主语开头，接着是谓语、宾语，最后再加一个状语。可以把状语置于句首，或用分词做状语等。 原文We met at the school gate and went there together early in the morning. 修正Early in the morning we met at the school gate and went there together. 原文The young man couldnt help crying when he heard the bad news. 修正Hearing the bad news, the young m
7、an couldnt help crying.,14,二：经过 2.在整篇文章中，避免只使用一两个句式，要灵活运用诸如倒装句、强调句、主从复合句、分词状语等。 强调句 原文I met him in the street yesterday. 修正It was in the street that I met him yesterday. It was yesterday that I met him in the street. 由with或without引导的短语。如: He sat in a chair with a newspaper in the hand.,15,分词短语。如: Sa
8、tisfied with the result，He decided to go on with a new experiment. 倒装句。如: Only in this way can we achieve our goal. Never before have I seen such a wonderful film. Not only should we study in the college, but also learn how to be a decent person.,16,省略句。如: If so，victory will be ours. You can make so
9、me changes wherever necessary. 3.通过分句和合句，增强句子的连贯性和表现力。 原文He stopped us half an hour ago. He made us catch the next offender. 修正He stopped us half an hour ago and made us catch the next offender.,17,原文We had a short rest. Then we began to play happily. We sang and danced. Some told stories. Some play
10、ed chess. 修正After a short rest, we had great fun singing and dancing, telling jokes and playing chess. 注意使用不同长度的句子，要结合使用，不能只用短句或只用长句。,18,4.学会使用过渡词。如: 递进: then(然后)， besides(还有)， furthermore(而且)， moreover(此外)等。 转折: however(然而)， but(但是)， on the contrary (相反)， after all(毕竟)等。 总结: finally(最后)， at last(最后
11、)， in brief(总之)， in conclusion(最后)等。 强调: indeed(确实)， certainly(一定)， surely(确定)， above all(尤其)等。 对比: in the same way(同样地)， just as(正如)， on the one handon the other hand等。相似的比较： similarly, in the same manner 相反的比较： on the other hand,whereas, while, instead, nevertheless, in contrast, on the contrary,
12、compared with ,19,5.注意使用词组、习语来代替一些单词，以增加文采。如: 原文A new railway is being built in my hometown. 修正A new railway is under construction in my hometown. 6.避免重复使用某一单词或短语。如: 原文I like reading while my brother likes watching television. 修正I like reading while my brother enjoys watching television. I like read
13、ing while watching television appeals to my brother.,20,三、 结尾 1、 All in all, what really matters is, in fact, that(比如说到和谐社会 All in all, what really matters is, in fact, that we should build our society a harmonious society.) 2、 Therefore, its not difficult to draw a conclusion that 3、 As a result, w
14、e should take effective measures to do sth.(我们必须采取一些有效的措施来做些什么) 4、 From what has been discussed above, we may conclude that ,21,The Woman I Admire Most,The woman I admire most is my dearest mother. She is such a loving and gentle woman that Im greatly influenced by many of her virtues. Since I was b
15、orn, I have been under meticulous care of my mother,whose love is so profound and selfless and will not depreciate with my growing up. She spares no effort to raise me up, trying hard to create a better environment for me to live in.,22,Mother, who keeps me company when I am lonely, encourages me no
16、t to give up when I fail, is the one who never asks for payment. I used to take all she did for granted, but as I grow up, I begin to realize how difficult it is for her to handle all these tough work.,23,What impresses me most is that, although life is just simple and tiring, mother always seems to be optimistic and easily satisfied. I learn from her that happiness does not depend on how much you have, but how you treasure what you have. I have modeled myself on my m
