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1、CoherenceandCohesion 1 写作强化教程P11 2 写作强化教程P11 3 写作强化教程P12 4 写作强化教程P12 5 写作强化教程P12 6 实现CC的语法现象 代词 Pronoun Manystudentsattendpublicschools Theyfaceenormouspressureunderthepresentpubliceducationsystem 同位语 apposition China anancientcountryofcivilization hasexperiencedrapideconomicgrowthrecently 总结词 this
2、thesesummaryword Recentyearswitnessarapidgrowthininternetusers Thistrendisexpectedtocontinue 并列连词 coordinatingconjunction and or but so Manypeopleretireattheageof65 butsomewouldliketocontinuetoworkfortheiremployers 从属连词 subordinatingconjunction because since although when if Althoughpriceisanimporta
3、ntfactorinfluencingconsumerbehavior therearestillmanyotherfactorsatwork 关系代词 relativepronouns定语从句 Manypeoplefailtostrikeabalancebetweenworkandlife whichcausesenormouspressure 句子连接副词 短语 sentencelinkers therefore however furthermore incomparison Mostpeopleretireattheageof65 However stillsomewouldliket
4、ocontinuetoworkfortheiremployers 7 Manypeopleenjoyretirement Manypeoplefindtheyhavethetimeforactivitiestheyenjoy Manypeopleenjoyretirement Theyfindtheyhavetimeforactivitiestheyenjoy Overthelasttwodecades populationageinghasacceleratedintheUK Populationageingisacommontrendthroughoutthedevelopedworld
5、Overthelasttwodecades populationageing acommontrendthroughoutthedevelopedworld hasacceleratedintheUK Thepopulationinurbanareashasgrownparticularlyquickly Thepopulationgrowthinurbanareashasputpressureonlocalservices Thepopulationinurbanareashasgrowthparticularlyquickly Thistrendhasputpressureonlocals
6、ervices 8 Therearemorejobopportunitiesincities Peoplemigratetocitiesfromruralareas Peoplemigratefromruralareastocitieswheretherearemorejobopportunities Couplesareunderpressuretowork Coupleoftendelaystartingafamily Ascouplesareunderpressuretowork theyoftendelaystartingafamily Lowermortalityisduetoinc
7、reasedlongevity Increasedlongevityresultsfromimprovedhealthcare Lowermortalityisduetoincreasedlongevity whichresultsfromimprovedhealthcare Peoplewanttoenjoyretirement Peopledonotalwayssaveenoughforacomfortableretirement Peoplewanttoenjoyretirement However theydonotalwayssaveenoughforacomfortablereti
8、rement 9 Itisexpectedthattherewillbeahigherproportionofolderpeoplethanyoungpeopleinmanycountriesinthefuture Doyouthinkitisapositiveornegativedevelopment 10 12 03 10Itisexpectedthattherewillbeahigherproportionofolderpeoplethanyoungpeopleinmanycountriesinthefuture Doyouthinkitisapositiveornegativedeve
9、lopment Positive 1 Riseofrelevantindustry healthcareindustryandretirementrealestate 2 childcareNegative NationalincomeBurdenonpublichealthcareresource 11 12 03 10Itisexpectedthattherewillbeahigherproportionofolderpeoplethanyoungpeopleinmanycountriesinthefuture Doyouthinkitisapositiveornegativedevelo
10、pment Positive Riseofrelevantindustry healthcareindustryandretirementrealestate 2 childcareNegative NationalincomeBurdenonpublichealthcareresource TheelderlyTheseniorPensionerRetireeOldergenerationAgeingpopulationAgeingsocietyDemographicrealityDemographictrendDemographicphenomenon 12 Introduction Du
11、etotheimprovedlivingstandardanddecreasedbirthrateinmanycountries theproportionofelderlypeoplekeepsrising Thistrendisnotrestrictedtodevelopedcountrieswhichboastwell establishedsupportingsystemsforelderlypeople butisalsoevidentamongsomedevelopingcountrieswhoseinfrastructurefallsbehindthegrowthofagedpo
12、pulation Inmyopinion moreproblemsthanbenefitswillsurfacewiththistrend Lead in 因为 不仅发达国家 还发展中国家 Populationageinghasemergedasaglobalphenomenoninthewakeofthenowvirtuallyuniversaldeclineinfertilityandincreasesinlifeexpectancy Notonlydevelopingcountriesbutalsodevelopedonesareconfrontedwiththisnewdemograp
13、hicreality 13 Paragraph2 Admittedly olderpeopleoftenhavetimetoofferforthebenefitoffamilyandthecommunity Nowadays theyoungtendtorelyontheoldergenerationforhouseholdchores Itisalsoreportedthattimedevotedtovoluntaryworkandcareisatitsheightwithintheagegroupsover55 Suchdevotionaddsgreatlytothecommunitywe
14、ll being ifnottotheGDP 总结句 社区幸福感 虽然非GDP贡献 14 Paragraph3 Populationageing however bringsaboutseriouseconomicandsocialproblems Whenthenumberofworkersdecreases thenationalincomegoesdown Atthesametime asaperson suseofhealthservicesincreasessignificantlyinthelateryearsoftheirlife anageingpopulationmaybri
15、ngaboutsignificantburdenonpublichealthcaresystem Moreover withanageingpopulation theproblemsassociatedwiththe sandwichgeneration peoplewhohavebothchildrenandparentstolookafter havegainedincreasingprominence Membersofthis in between generationareoftentornbetweentheneedsofraisingchildren caringforagei
16、ngparentsandjobresponsibilities HealthcareresourceBurdenonpublichealthcaresystem Sandwich in betweengeneration 同位语Children ageingparents job 15 Conclusion Tosumup populationageingisaninevitableprospect thenegativeeffectsofwhichoutweighthepositive Asageingisanormalpartoflifecycleforhumanbeings wemustrecognizeitschallengestoourlifeandsociety andworkoneffectivestrategiestominimizeitsadverseinfluences 16 P1 P2 P3 P4 Lead inOpinionsMyopinion TopicsentenceSupportingideas examples TopicsentenceSupporti
