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1、Writing,Paid Holiday,Some mistakes,Can we relax well? The key to the problem must be no. Can we relax well? The answer (to the question) is surely no.,An example for improvement,When some people asked me “What would you do when it would be paid holiday and how do you thought about it.” I couldnt rep
2、ly it clearly. As you see, I think its wonderful to have paid holiday. On the other hand, without working then you get money. We may cause bad habbit. Paid holiday become popular day by day. But it is also a dream. We need to work hard to make it come true. (The rest is about how good it is if paid
3、holiday comes true.),Revised,When some people asked me “What would you do when it would be paid holiday and how do you thought about it.” I couldnt reply it clearly. When people asked me “What would you do when there would be paid holiday and what do you think about it”, I couldnt reply to it clearl
4、y. When asked what I think if we have paid holiday, I find it hard to answer.,To correct grammatical mistakes:,As you see, I think its wonderful to have paid holiday. On the other hand, without working then you get money. We may cause bad habbit. Paid holiday become popular day by day. But it is als
5、o a dream. We need to work hard to make it come true. I think its wonderful to have paid holiday, but if we get money without working, we may form bad habit. Paid holiday becomes popular day by day, but it is still a dream to most Chinese people. Therefore, we need to work hard to make it come true.
6、,A better version:,I think its wonderful to have paid holiday, but if we get money without working, we may form bad habit. However, some people say just because our boss generously pays us when we enjoy our holiday, we feel grateful and when we come back to work, we will work harder and better. So p
7、aid holiday should be encouraged. As a matter of fact, paid holiday becomes popular day by day, but it is still a dream to most Chinese people. Therefore, we need to work hard to make it come true.,Fully revised (I):,When asked what I think if we have paid holiday, I find it hard to answer. I think
8、its wonderful to have paid holiday, but if we get money without working, we may form bad habit. However, some people say just because our boss generously pays us when we enjoy our holiday, we feel grateful and when we come back to work, we will work harder and better. So paid holiday should be encou
9、raged. As a matter of fact, paid holiday becomes popular day by day, but it is still a dream to most Chinese people. Therefore, we need to work hard to make it come true.,Fully revised (II):,Its wonderful to have paid holiday. As a matter of fact, paid holiday becomes popular day by day, but it is s
10、till a dream to most Chinese people. Therefore, we need to work hard to make it come true. (depending on how you are going to write the rest),Good expressions,Some people believe that the paid vacation can improve the current tourism pattern. For example, it can relieve the pressure of traffic, acco
11、mmodation, shopping malls and so on. Besides, it is beneficial to the sustainable development of tourism. The most important is that the paid holiday can make people enjoy freedom and can raise the enthusiasm of the workers. (任耀明),Paid Holiday good example (152 words; Adapted from左琪s),Paid holiday o
12、riginated from France in the 1930s. Today it has been widely accepted and established by many countries. In 2008, China issued paid holiday policy after a long-term study and struggle. The right to rest is basic for us humans. Workers right to rest is one of the ways to keep and increase the profits
13、 of companies. A paid holiday will improve the workers enthusiasm to work harder. Paid holiday is also good for tourism. Currently, workers can only have their holiday at fixed time when there are many people out traveling. If we practice paid holiday, workers can plan their holiday flexibly so the
14、pressure of tourism especially in the golden week will be relieved and the quality of service can also be improved. However, today the paid holiday system is still not well established in China, so we must continue our struggle till everybody can truly feel its benefit.,Other ways to reason:,Compani
15、es cannot afford to give their employees paid holiday because their profits are low. Employees feel lucky to have a job considering todays fierce competition in the job market. They wont bargain with their boss for a paid holiday to lose their job. Many people especially large numbers of migrant wor
16、kers have to work at weekends. It seems they never need a holiday, not to mention a paid holiday. Paid holiday is not necessarily good because one can flexibly plan his holiday, but then he has to enjoy his vacation alone, otherwise he must first make good arrangements with his family or friends so that they can all take the holiday at the same time and do things together. ,Wishes or solutions:,Government can give allowance to companies to encourage the practice of paid holiday.
