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1、Teaching goals -教学目标教学目标1.How to make an outline2.How to pick out important points3.How to write beautiful sentences4.How to organize the sentences logically 假设你是李华假设你是李华,你购买了一部某外国公司生你购买了一部某外国公司生产的手机产的手机.因有质量问题因有质量问题,要求该公司更换要求该公司更换.请请根据下列要点根据下列要点,用英文写一封电子邮件用英文写一封电子邮件.1.问题问题: 手机不响铃手机不响铃,不能发短信不能发短信;该该
2、产品已售产品已售完完,无法更换无法更换;型号型号新新,无配件无配件,无法维修无法维修.2.要求要求: 公司应尽快予以更换公司应尽快予以更换.注意注意:1.词数词数为为120左右左右; 2.参考词汇参考词汇: 配件配件(spare part)The style: exposition（说明文）（说明文）The main idea: Present the problems with the phone and ask for a changePerson: the first person第一人称第一人称Tense: the present tense 现在式现在式 and the past t
3、ense过去式过去式Task 1 Examine the content carefully Task2 Task2 提炼要点提炼要点, ,确定重点词汇确定重点词汇, ,划分段落划分段落Important points：three problems plus one demand 要点：要点： 三个问题加一个要求三个问题加一个要求Point 1: not ring; not send messagesPoint 2： sold out; not changefor 或或not exchangefor 或或not replacewith Point 3： new model; no spare
4、parts; repair/fix/maintain Point 4： require/request sb. to do sth 或或demand of sb. to do sth.Task 3Task 3连词成句连词成句1.手机不响铃手机不响铃,不能发短信不能发短信 It doesnt ring . It doesnt send short messages.2.该产品已售完该产品已售完,无法更换无法更换 The model has been sold out . They cant change a new one for me. 3.型号新型号新,无配件无配件,无法维修无法维修 It
5、is a new model in China. It is impossible to fix it without the right spare parts.4.要求公司应尽快予以更换要求公司应尽快予以更换 I demand of /require/request your company to change a new one for me as soon as possible.Task 4Task 4 提升句子，组句成提升句子，组句成篇篇注意：灵活运用好句式注意：灵活运用好句式一一.使用非谓语动词使用非谓语动词(nonfinite verb)使句子简洁高使句子简洁高档档二二.巧用倒
6、装巧用倒装(inversion )结构增强句子的表现力结构增强句子的表现力三三.尝试多样化表达方式尝试多样化表达方式,如：如： 1.感叹句感叹句(the exclamatory) 2.with短语短语 3.定语从句定语从句(the attributive clause ) 4.各种名词性从句各种名词性从句 5.各种状语从句各种状语从句 (the adverbial clause)1. 手机不响铃手机不响铃,不能发短信不能发短信整合前：整合前： It doesnt ring . It doesnt send short messages. 整合后：整合后：可以造至少两个并列句可以造至少两个并列句
7、(or, meanwhile, either )a. It cant ring or send short messages.b. It doesnt ring at all and meanwhile it doesnt send short messages. （Neither .nor句式）句式）c. It can neither ring nor send short messages.可造至少两个可造至少两个倒装句式倒装句式（not onlybut also , nor, neither ）d. Not only does it fail to ring, but also it c
8、ant send a message. e.The mobile phone cant ring, nor can it send messages.2.该产品已售完该产品已售完,无法更换无法更换整合前：整合前：The model has been sold out . They cant change a new one for me.整合后：整合后：a. The new model has been sold out so that they cant change a new one for me .b. The model has been sold out, as a consequ
9、ence, its impossible for them to change a new one for me.(非限制性定语从句非限制性定语从句 nonfinite attributive clause)c. The model has been sold out, which makes it impossible for me to have a new one. （主语从句）（主语从句）d. The fact that the model has been sold out makes me unable to change it.（结果状语从句至少两个（结果状语从句至少两个so t
10、hat ，as a consequence/result）3.型号新型号新,无配件无配件,无法维修无法维修整合前：整合前： It is a new model in China. It is impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. 整合后：a.Since its a new model and therere no spare parts,I cant get it repaired .b.So new is its type without any spare parts that I cant get it repaired.
11、c.With its new type and no spare parts left, I find it hard to have it repaired.原因状语从句原因状语从句because，since，as和和倒装句各一个倒装句各一个 sothatwith结构一个结构一个 4.要求公司应尽快予以更换要求公司应尽快予以更换整合前：整合前：I require/request your company to change a new one for me as soon as possible.整合后：整合后： 宾语从句宾语从句a.To conclude, I demand/require
12、/request that your company should have my phone changed as soon as possible. 用用appreciate it ifB. Id really appreciate it if you could replace it soon. 包含宾语从句、同位语从句、虚拟语气及被动语态的句子包含宾语从句、同位语从句、虚拟语气及被动语态的句子C. I hope that my requirement that you should change a new phone of the same model for me can be s
13、atisfied as soon as possible. 5.检查誊写检查誊写仔细誊写，保仔细誊写，保证字迹工整，证字迹工整，卷面整洁。卷面整洁。Which one is preferred?Dear Sir, Ten days after that, it didnt ring or send short messages. Then I took it to the seller, but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. Lat
14、er I went to the repairman. He said since it was a new-model in China, it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that. How can I wait that long? Therefore, I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month. Thank you for your consideration. Yours, Sincerely 书面表达的五个步骤书面表达的五个步骤1.1.仔细审题（仔细审题（4 4确定）确定）（1 1）体裁格式）体裁格式_（2 2）题材内容）题材内容_（3 3）中心人称）中心人称_ （4 4）主体时态）主体时态_2.2.提炼要点，确定重点词汇，划分段落提炼要点，确定重点词汇，划分段落3.3.连词成句连词成句4.4.提升句子提升句子 组句成篇组句成篇5.5.检查誊写检查誊写 summaryThank you!
