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1、期末书面表达讲评期末书面表达讲评最重视各科作业的学生比例示意图最重视各科作业的学生比例示意图语文语文7%7%数学数学54%54%英语英语18%18%其它学科其它学科21%21%情景作文情景作文 ： 最近，你参加了高三年级组织的“你最重视哪科作业”的调查，结果见下面的饼状图。请据此写一篇短文, 介绍调查结果，并根据其中两个数据两个数据谈论自己的看法。注意：1. 短文的开头已为你写好。2. 词数不少于60。写作要求写作要求 文章扣题文章扣题 内容充实内容充实（全面、有细节支撑）（全面、有细节支撑） 结构完整结构完整 逻辑性强逻辑性强 语义连贯语义连贯审题审题 主题：主题：文体：文体：人称：人称：时
2、态：时态：说明文说明文第三人称（调查结果）、第一人称（阐第三人称（调查结果）、第一人称（阐述个人观点述个人观点一般现在一般现在 （根据所给首句判断）（根据所给首句判断）Homework preference内容要点内容要点: 1调查结果调查结果 2两个数据两个数据 3个人看法个人看法 1.The result of the survey 介绍调查结果介绍调查结果全面描述全面描述四个数据四个数据(要点要点 1-4) 应注意陈述的逻辑性，避免语言重复。应注意陈述的逻辑性，避免语言重复。2. Personal opinion about two of the figures 根据其中两个数据谈论自己
3、的看法：根据其中两个数据谈论自己的看法： （1）两项对比，分析原因或结果（要点）两项对比，分析原因或结果（要点5） （2）得出自己观点，并给出理由或建议。）得出自己观点，并给出理由或建议。 （要点（要点6）文章结构：文章结构：关键词语关键词语最重视最重视put in the first placerank as the most important/interesting and challengingthink/hold the view/idea that is the most importantregard as the most significantattract the grea
4、test attention ofconsider (to be) the most important/vitalthink the most importantdo first1.仍然没有解决词语重复、句式单一、双谓语的仍然没有解决词语重复、句式单一、双谓语的 问题。问题。2. 审题错误：审题错误： 1.只就两个数据谈个人看法，缺少调查结果。只就两个数据谈个人看法，缺少调查结果。 2.只就两个数据发表看法，没有数据比较只就两个数据发表看法，没有数据比较3. 数字表达（最好用阿拉伯数字）数字表达（最好用阿拉伯数字）4. 各种语言错误：各种语言错误： 语法（语法（with + n. +v.）（
5、非谓）（非谓） 单词拼写单词拼写spend spent，few less 冠词冠词 名词的数（不可数名词后加名词的数（不可数名词后加s) 词性不分：词性不分：option，worth5.三段论，首行一定要缩进三段论，首行一定要缩进6.不用涂改带，不用黑色水笔答题。不用涂改带，不用黑色水笔答题。问题：问题：One possible version: Recently, a survey on homework preference has been conducted among senior three students.The results are as follows: more tha
6、n half of the students, about 54%, usually put their math homework in the first place while only 7% would rank Chinese as the most important. Meanwhile, English is regarded as most significant by 18% of the participants, and the other subjects attract the attention of 21% of the students.There is a
7、profound difference between math and Chinese. Without doubt, some students hold the view that math is most interesting and challenging, and it seems easier for us to have a sense of achievement in it. However, each subject has its unique charm and they are of the same value. Therefore, I think we sh
8、ould take every subject seriously and improve our studies in a balanced way. Recently, a survey on homework preference has been conducted among senior three students. The results are as follows. There are 54% of the students considering that math homework should be put in the most vital position. Me
9、anwhile, the number of the students who attach more importance to English homework accounts for 18%. However, merely 7% of the students hold the opinion that Chinese homework is what they pay most attention to, while approximately one fifth (21%) students maintain that the homework of other subjects
10、 is most important. （17） As is visually shown in the pie chart, the number of the students who attach most importance to math is much larger than that of the students who pay attention to Chinese. From my point of view, Chinese has colorful ancient culture, so we should put more importance to it. Mo
11、reover, its essential for us to get more information about our culture as a Chinese. So I strongly insist that we should put Chinese homework to the top. In your spoken English class, your teacher shows the following picture. You are asked to describe the picture and explain how you understand it.开放
12、开放作文（作文（满分15分）请根据下面提示,写一篇短文。词数不少于50。审题：审题：图中要素分析图中要素分析a boy with two wings flying high in the skyThumbs up and signs of victoryWith a confident smile on his face立意要求：立意要求：符合图意，合理正确；符合图意，合理正确；思想积极思想积极，内容健康；，内容健康；可接受的立意：可接受的立意： 1.一个人的成长离不开众人的鼓励和支持；一个人的成长离不开众人的鼓励和支持；2.正确对待赞扬，避免骄傲；正确对待赞扬，避免骄傲；3.鼓励是进步的动力
13、；鼓励是进步的动力；4.成功与赞扬成功与赞扬5.学会相互支持学会相互支持6.让我们为成功者喝彩；让我们为成功者喝彩；7.自身的努力和他人的支持是我们飞向成功的翅膀；自身的努力和他人的支持是我们飞向成功的翅膀；8.成功后就会有掌声，所以要争取成功；成功后就会有掌声，所以要争取成功；不可接受的立意：不可接受的立意：1.孩子应该学会独立；孩子应该学会独立；2.摆脱家长就是胜利；摆脱家长就是胜利；3.家长的溺爱是正确的；家长的溺爱是正确的；4.一个人应有远大的目标；一个人应有远大的目标；5.团结协作力量大；团结协作力量大；6.有志者事竟成；有志者事竟成；7.我们都是小天使；我们都是小天使；8.让我们飞
14、向远方；让我们飞向远方；9.我们应当崇拜明星；我们应当崇拜明星；10.每个人都有自己的梦想；每个人都有自己的梦想；附件 必须有一段对图片的描写；必须有一段对图片的描写； 议论必须建立在描写的基础上；议论必须建立在描写的基础上； 只有议论为第三档，只有描述最高只有只有议论为第三档，只有描述最高只有5分；分； 观点能够自圆其说，语言要跟上自己的逻辑；观点能够自圆其说，语言要跟上自己的逻辑； 只讲一方面不注重全局，最高只讲一方面不注重全局，最高8分。分。开放作文评分参考开放作文评分参考1. 怎样提炼立意？ 在多个物象之间找联系。 1）飞翔在天空中的男孩带着自信的微笑 2）鼓励和表扬的手势鼓励使男孩获
15、得进步、成功。2. 如何议论？ 解图和议论 进图-Why can the boy fly higher and higher? 立意-Encouragement and support make the boy achieve success. 跳出图- In reality, since life is full of challenges and difficulties, people need to be encouraged when facing difficulty. There is no denying that almost everyone is likely to do
16、 better if others see more of their advantages rather than their weak points. 回图- In this case, everyone will have his own wings, flying in the sky. As can be seen in the picture, a boy with two wings is flying high in the sky, his face shining with a confident smile, while below him there are many
17、people holding up their thumbs or giving signs of victory.（描图） What the picture tries to tell us is the importance of encouragement. （立意） Since life is full of challenges and difficulties, people need to be encouraged when facing difficulty. There is no denying that almost everyone is likely to do b
18、etter if others see more of their advantages rather than their weak points.（议论）It is other peoples support that gives the boy the wings to fly. （回图）Encouragement from parents, teachers and friends can promote ones ability and enhance ones confidence. In my opinion, everyone should learn to help and encourage others on their way to success.（升华）立意立意:Encouragement helps make more progress
