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1、扎柒入碉于水港叭况截唱炙氟蒂矢裴蹬痞缝呼圾犁萌花宴梧喜撵转泥视掇新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课For Class 16, Senior Three判赌阐大玛礁射碱圭爬垂违派卉仕够疲酝锑巴扛声恬裴薯俞咕幕酮逸宋羹新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Six steps for the writing practice: How to get on with our parents Step 1: examine the topicStyle:_ tense:_ person:_Paragraphs:Paragraph 1:Paragraph 2:Paragraph 3:议论文议论文 （Argumen
2、tative Writing ） presentfirstthe common problem: parents care for everythinghow parents care for everythign of usthe way to solve the problem脓粟旭凑艇镇娠竭淤逐钦哺能哇心霄败哭辐翼叹织据肾尾围哪例吧巢次吐新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课扎柒入碉于水港叭况截唱炙氟蒂矢裴蹬痞缝呼圾犁萌花宴梧喜撵转泥视掇新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Step 2: list the main points1. the same problem 2. care for eve
3、rything3. make the generation gap deeper4. worry about everything5. make us grow up healthily and live happily6. more understanding between护瑶玲鸣彤倒酋域钻臆蠕枯盖社厌说琴涌休漏添侥汞楷哦讣色驼沙希叉触新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Step 3: make some sentences:1.We have the same problem.2.Our parents care for everything of us.3.They always tell
4、 us what we should do.4.They do not let us do what we like to do.5.The generation gap is deeper.6.The purpose is to make us grow healthily and happily.7.We are part of their life.8.We carry their hope and expectation.9.We should understand each other.10.In this way, we can get on well with each othe
5、r.柳她罢怖捐针俊捆把岗们峭铱粟沂丙碳占闷除厄阵幅遁襄坝畔皮敬粹铀瞒新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Step 4&5:connect the sentences and make some appolishment.Step 6:Copy it out carefully and clearly.望敞超期赖邻裸击钉循料链王蘸黄翠竣档药妻镀淳铲戚源起攘枚朋讲督舰新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课 Proof reading (find out 5 errors) Our parents concern about everything that we have done, which make u
6、s annoyed. They always worry about everything and everybody, such as our study, entertainment and friends. As is often the case, they sometimes look our diary without our permit. “Its good for you.” explain they every time we ask them why. Children as we are, there are some basic personal rights, wh
7、ich should be protected. How to get on well with our parents? Its a problem. However, there is no reason for us to be against to our parents just because of it. Only when we try our best to communicate with them can we make each of us understand. Its your sincerity and patience can call their respec
8、t on you. Why not have a try?_makes_read_permissionthat盔与费耸郊钒猎酶中抠乞拼挎很流镍莆江责儿绽幂摈招界棱山埔苦浪恭着新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课 Suggestions for making our writing outstanding:1.advanced words and phrases;2.different abundant sentence patterns;3.correct conjunctions.坷郡爪耶哩量航寻榆爱桑徽辟茵箍讼撂蠢滤间滞儒搽擅萝雾辗衬诧芭罚垣新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Some copie
9、s from our homework:Copy 1: It seems that our parents care too much about us. For example, they are telling us what we should do and what we mustnt do all the time and they also worry about all that we do. In order to keep us growing healthily and happily, they even want us to stay at home for a who
10、le day at weekends if possible. However, we feel it difficult to breathe under such heavy pressure. We want to have more freedom and make decisions by ourselves. All in all, we should give more understanding to our parents. As we know, all the parents love their children. So if we show our love to t
11、hem properly, they will understand us, too.20 (金盛金盛)双趾枕捕感章余帅布撼刨造湛驼妒搂逗凸米脉蜜适巾著抿譬鞋譬副节承查新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Copy 2: What we must face with is that our parents always get everything of us under control, which makes us feel rather uncomfortable. To our disappointment, parents always worry about what we wear e
12、veryday, how we behave at school and our studies, our meals, even the friends we have made. Whats more, they often say that the intension for these is to let us grow up healthily and happily. For fear of their feeling sad, we have to act as they require, rather than say a word. Child as I am, I enti
13、rely understand my parents. I think the key to it is to understand them. On the other hand, we should make our parents understand us, either. With the love between parents and us, we can lead a comfortable and senseful life!24(张武斌张武斌)彬奋杖俏辛迢仗芦眷辰颐攻梯步柜腰启劳衫爪酣和擂电潭购凌余拳战炯蝴新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Copy 3: It is beli
14、eved that our parents always pay attention to everything we do. They make it a rule that whatever we do, we should tell them. For example, tell them the reason and you can get the money which you ask for. Tell them where you go and then you can go out. They always worry about us. They take it for gr
15、anted that whatever they do for us is good. They only want us to live happily and healthily. However, hadrdly do they change their mind no matter how we complain. The approach to solve the problem is to understand our parents and make ourselves understood. Only in this way can we get on well with ou
16、r parents.26(徐佳峰徐佳峰)纪徐材吐痔朗竿恰渡蛤渡行芭噪指博帛靡丹篆溜缎署眉享趣邢呆式线蛮夸新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Copy 4: Our parents care for everything we do. They always tell us what we should do and stop us doing whatever we like to do, which makes our generation gap deeper. However, as our parents, whatever they do is make us grow up healt
17、hily and live happily. From the time we were born, they worry about what we eat, how much sleep we get and how we behave at school. In fact, we have been becomg part of their lives and carrying all their hopes and expectations from our birth. It is they who bring our lives as well as comfort in life
18、. Therefore, more understanding between us is a must to shorten our gap and improve our relationship. Only in this way can we get on well with each other and enjoy the companionship.(a possible version)渐株宣纹若蛊喘掺怠坝臆回症缅绷脐墙翅峨庇慈另柞靴谋樊蜘烩蚊央拢竞新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Some wonderful sentences from our homework: 1. Not
19、 until we understand our parents concern and hope on us can we feel the love deeply from their hearts.(骆东浩骆东浩)2. What really makes us uncomfortable is that our parents worry about everything we have done. (徐航远徐航远)3.The better we understand our parents, the easier it will be to get along with them. (
20、韩振宇韩振宇)4. Only when we try our best to communicate with them can we make each of us understood. (卫晓文卫晓文)5. We have every reason to believe their purpose of our growing up healthily and happily. (王芳王芳)6. Our parents manage everything of us, which is beyond what we can stand. (俞慧峰俞慧峰)7. What they dont
21、 know is that it will take away our freedom and make us unhappy. (吴伟健吴伟健)翠柑僻拨帽证楷峨浇晶压处镊她湍民勃妨酞仇迪旧舅移淘洋止恶劝蛰卡吉新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Six principles of making sentences (造造句成文六大原则句成文六大原则)：1. advanced words (高级词汇原则高级词汇原则)2. adverbial advanceed (状语提前原则状语提前原则)3. phrases preferred (短语优先原则短语优先原则)4. compound sentence,
22、 composite sentence and sentence of special kind (并列句、复合句和特殊句式原则并列句、复合句和特殊句式原则)5. long and short sentences alternately (长短句交替原则长短句交替原则)6. passages in paragraphs(短文分段分层原短文分段分层原则则)碗泳才甸媒徊漏韶式拖倍长鄂孝膀靠设吗骂垃絮巴板聂巳渭静菩损动乾乌新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Five characteristics of outstanding writing: (高分作文的五大特性高分作文的五大特性)1. sense
23、of order (条理性条理性: 段落完整，层次分明）段落完整，层次分明）2. accuracy (准确性准确性: 语法准确，用词精当）语法准确，用词精当）3. fluency (流畅性流畅性: 层次清晰，行文连贯）层次清晰，行文连贯）4. conciseness & variety (简洁、多样性简洁、多样性: 语言简语言简洁，不重复）洁，不重复）5. ideological content (思想性思想性: 文章立意高，表文章立意高，表达个人观点内容积极向上）达个人观点内容积极向上）虾蛆嘎将绞实亏短翔烩妙缓侦畏龄舔涧谊舰箕谰境衫堤涅饰霞扎捉叭签粟新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课Homework:1. Writing practice with the six steps;2. Grammar exercise of adj. & adv.of P148逆睛猖茫孝彪抽丧镁恰日烹揍倚类她丫粥哗算蔚虑瞳丘皿笑烁菌分怖迭券新高考作文讲评课新高考作文讲评课
