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1、段落的展开-如何做到论述的具体和充分以2011年6月四级作文onlineshopping为例范文一Nowadayswiththeeverrapiddevelopmentandincreasingpopularityoftheinformationtechnology,shoppingontheinternethasbeenafashionespeciallyamongtheyoungsters.Onlineshoppinghasmadeourdailylifemoreconvenientandcomfortable.Forexample,shoppingontheinternetcansave
2、studentsagreatdealoftimeonthewaybetweenhomeandstore,sotheywouldbeabletoconcentratemoretimeandenergyontheiracademicwork.Theinternethasshortenthedistancebetweenmanufacturersandconsumersandthuswecanevenbuygoodsinothercountries.Ontheotherhand,lackofthefacetofacedealmakesonlineshoppinglessreliableandtrus
3、tworthy.Whatsmore，thedeliverywillincreasetheriskofitemsdamage.Inmyopinion,shoppingontheinternetisairreversibletrend.Moreandmorepeoplewillbeaccustomedtoit.Itwillbemuchmorepopularinthenearfuture.Andatthesametimeweshouldtakesomemeasurestomakeitperfect.具体而充分地展开段落-第1段Nowadayswiththeeverrapiddevelopmentan
4、dincreasingpopularityoftheinformationtechnology,shoppingontheinternethasbeenafashionespeciallyamongtheyoungsters.在现象陈述中，捎带原因分析（informationtechnology)因果分析法提及了网购的主要人群，即青少年。举例法从从general 到到specific具体而充分地展开段落-第2段Onlineshoppinghasmadeourdailylifemoreconvenientandcomfortable.Forexample,shoppingontheinterne
5、tcansavestudentsagreatdealoftimeonthewaybetweenhomeandstore,sotheywouldbeabletoconcentratemoretimeandenergyontheiracademicwork.Theinternethasshortenthedistancebetweenmanufacturersandconsumersandthuswecanevenbuygoodsinothercountries.Ontheotherhand,lackofthefacetofacedealmakesonlineshoppinglessreliabl
6、eandtrustworthy.Whatsmore，thedeliverywillincreasetheriskofitemsdamage.主题句之后，用举例法（学生网购节省时间专注于课业）来充分论述；自然过渡到第二种具体的网购便利：跨国网购话题转向网购的不利之处，仍然有二。两者都很简练，但不失具体（没有当面交易的保障，投送过程中的货物损坏）另，几个关联词使上下文无论是递进、转折，还是举例都过渡自然，衔接得当从从general 到到specific具体而充分地展开段落-第3段Inmyopinion,shoppingontheinternetisairreversibletrend.Morean
7、dmorepeoplewillbeaccustomedtoit.Itwillbemuchmorepopularinthenearfuture.Andatthesametimeweshouldtakesomemeasurestomakeitperfect.结尾：个人观点的陈述是温和中立型-肯定其存在的合理性，同时提出需要改进的地方。作为结尾，概括性强一点会有一定的高度。不可抵挡的趋势，会更加广为接受采取措施使其更加完善其缺点。（不需要就具体的措施展开论述，因为这已经不是文章的主体部分）需要补充的是，虽然结尾处概括性较强，但内容仍然饱和，不是干巴巴地总结复述前文，也不是空洞地喊口号。范文二Toda
8、y,withtherapiddevelopmentinelectroniccommerce,businessareattemptingtogaingreatpopularitybyusingonlineshoppingtointeractwithcustomers.AccordingtoJackMa,founderandCEOofAlibabaGroup,Aservesmorethan70millionmembersfrommorethan250countriesandterritories.Infact,bothonlineshoppingandtraditionalshoppinghave
9、someadvantagesanddisadvantages.Tobeginwith,onlineshoppingisveryconvenientforshoppingandallowsforavastselectionofgoodstobeatyourfingertips.Youdonthavetoworryaboutthecrowdsinthemall,findingforaparkingspot,andstuckinatrafficjam.Besides,withtheonlinetoolsthatenablegoodscomparison,youcancomparepricesandq
10、ualitiestomakeabetterdecisionwithlesseffort.However,thoughonlineshoppingis24/7available,arecentstudyhasfoundthatprivacywasstillthetopconcernofpeoplewhilesecurityrankedbottom.Furthermore,peopleareworriedthatthegoodswontbewhattheyhaveexpectedbyviewingonline.Itwouldbeinconvenientifthesizeorcolourdidntf
11、it,theconsumershadtoreturnit.Somegoodsarenotreturnable.Someareusedordamagedwhentheyareshipped.Inconclusion,althoughthereareadvantagesofonlineshopping,therealsosomenegativeconcernofonlineshopping.Sellersneedtomakeimprovementsoftheonlineshopswithconsiderationonconsumersperspective.Bydoingso,onlineshop
12、pingwillgainpopularityamongpeopleandwillbecomewidelytobenefitsellers,buyers,andsociety.具体而充分地展开段落-第1段Today,withtherapiddevelopmentinelectroniccommerce,businessareattemptingtogaingreatpopularitybyusingonlineshoppingtointeractwithcustomers.AccordingtoJackMa,founderandCEOofAlibabaGroup,Aservesmorethan7
13、0millionmembersfrommorethan250countriesandterritories.第一段陈述现象，别开生面，从商家而非消费者的角度描述普遍网购现象。使用的权威数据引证法，进行具体描述从从general 到到specific具体而充分地展开段落-第2段（1）Infact,bothonlineshoppingandtraditionalshoppinghavesomeadvantagesanddisadvantages.Tobeginwith,onlineshoppingisveryconvenientforshoppingandallowsforavastselecti
14、onofgoodstobeatyourfingertips.Youdonthavetoworryaboutthecrowdsinthemall,findingforaparkingspot,andstuckinatrafficjam.Besides,withtheonlinetoolsthatenablegoodscomparison,youcancomparepricesandqualitiestomakeabetterdecisionwithlesseffort.主题句之后，用两个过渡词把网购的三个相关优点联系起来（convenience，vastselection和goodscompar
15、ison）对各个优点都进行了较为具体的阐述从从general 到到specific具体而充分地展开段落-第2段（2）However,thoughonlineshoppingis24/7available,arecentstudyhasfoundthatprivacywasstillthetopconcernofpeoplewhilesecurityrankedbottom.Furthermore,peopleareworriedthatthegoodswontbewhattheyhaveexpectedbyviewingonline.Itwouldbeinconvenientifthesize
16、orcolourdidntfit,theconsumershadtoreturnit.Somegoodsarenotreturnable.Someareusedordamagedwhentheyareshipped.However使话题转向缺点，三个缺点（隐私、安全和所见非所得）分成两部分，简述前两个缺点，选择第三个进行了具体的论述（尺寸颜色不符要求，退货的麻烦，以及运输过程中的损失）具体而充分地展开段落-第3段Inconclusion,althoughthereareadvantagesofonlineshopping,therealsosomenegativeconcernofonline
17、shopping.Sellersneedtomakeimprovementsoftheonlineshopswithconsiderationonconsumersperspective.Bydoingso,onlineshoppingwillgainpopularityamongpeopleandwillbecomewidelytobenefitsellers,buyers,andsociety.结尾段对前面的优缺点进行的概括重述，但作者没有止步于此，而是回到第一段的商家角度提出了一定的改进建议。具体而有概括性，符合结尾段的要求围绕主题句展开段落-支持句（supportingsentences)支持句的写作方法（或段落展开方法）定义法举例法比较对照类比法列举法因果法综合云用法现象解释型作文2008年年6月月Recreational Activities1. 娱乐活动多种多样娱乐活动多种多样2. 娱乐活动可能使人受益，也可能有娱乐活动可能使人受益，也可能有危害性危害性3. 作为大学生，我的看法作为大学生，我的看法
