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1、书面表达专题(七)学生习作点评学生习作点评(一一)目前，学校存在少数学生考目前，学校存在少数学生考试试作弊作弊现现象。某英文象。某英文杂杂志社志社拟对拟对此此现现象向中学生象向中学生证证文，文，标题标题是是“My Opinion on Cheating in Examinations。”请请根据下列提示用英根据下列提示用英语语写一写一篇征文稿。篇征文稿。主要原因主要原因考考试试偏多、偏偏多、偏难难不用功、不用功、懒懒惰惰取悦父母、老取悦父母、老师师个人看法个人看法作弊不作弊不对对，违违反校反校规规要要诚实诚实，努力学，努力学习习(其他看法其他看法)注意：注意：1.短文必须包括所有内容要点，可适
2、当发挥；短文必须包括所有内容要点，可适当发挥；2短文标题与开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；短文标题与开头已为你写好，不计入总词数；3词数：词数：100左右。左右。4参考词汇：作弊参考词汇：作弊cheat(v.)My Opinion on Cheating in ExaminationsIt is known to us all that some students cheat in examinationsatschool._学生习作学生习作My Opinion on Cheating in ExaminationsIt is known to us all that some students
3、 cheat in examinations at school.As students，we often take examinations at school，but sometimes we have too many examinations which are too difficult for us.On the other hand，some of the students are lazy and dont work hard at their lessons.So when taking examinations，they sometimes cheat in order t
4、o get better results to please their parents and teachers.In my opinion，it is wrong to cheat in examinations because it breaks the rules of schools.We students should be honest and try to get good results by studying hard instead of cheating in examinations.Whats more， we should improve our study me
5、thods and get well prepared for examinations.教师点评教师点评本文开本文开门见门见山指出一些学生在考山指出一些学生在考试试中作弊的中作弊的现现象，象，然后分析其原因，最后得出然后分析其原因，最后得出结论结论，提出自己的看法。文章，提出自己的看法。文章具有很具有很强强的的逻辑逻辑性。性。考生多考生多处处使用了使用了较为较为高高级级的句式的句式结结构，如构，如which引引导导的定的定语语从句，从句，because引引导导的原因状的原因状语语从句等。从句等。本文多本文多处处适适时时采用了承上启下的采用了承上启下的过过渡渡语语(如如on the other
6、 hand，so，in my opinion，whats more等等)，使得文，使得文章章衔衔接自然。接自然。(二二)当前有不少文学作品被改当前有不少文学作品被改编编成成电电影。有人影。有人选择选择看看电电影，影，有人有人则则喜喜欢读欢读原著。原著。请请你以你以“Film or book，which do you prefer？”为题为题，按照下列要点写一篇英，按照下列要点写一篇英语语短文：短文：1看看电电影：省影：省时时、有趣、易懂、有趣、易懂2读读原著：原著：细节细节更多、更多、语语言言优优美美3我的看法及理由我的看法及理由注意：注意：1.词词数数100120，文章，文章题题目和开目和开
7、头头已已给给出出(不不计计入入总词总词数数)。2参考参考词汇词汇：original work或或book in the original(原原著著)Film or Book，Which Do You Prefer?Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to read the book in the original._学生习作学生习作Film or Book，Which Do You Prefer?Some of us think that it is better to see the film than to rea
8、d the book in the original.Becausefilmis short.We can save much time.Also it is more interesting than book.And it is easyto be understood.But the other peopleprefer book to film.Because it is easy to read whenever you like.And it has more plots.We can know more things by reading it.And we can imagin
9、e more beautiful things by reading it.To my opinion，film is better than book.It is more excited.And we can have a comfortable feeling by watchingit.But we also need to read book.It can teach us how to live better.教师点评教师点评because为连词为连词，可用来引，可用来引导导原因状原因状语语从句，但从句，但不可用做不可用做过过渡渡词词。此。此处处可改可改为为The reason i
10、s that。film前需加前需加the表示一表示一类类事物。事物。book前需加前需加the，与前面，与前面the film呼呼应应，表示一，表示一类类事物。事物。本文是比本文是比较较性性议论议论文，故此文，故此处应处应用比用比较级较级形式形式easier。to be understood语态语态不当。此不当。此处为处为“sth./sb.beadj.to do”结结构，故构，故应应采用主采用主动动形式形式to understand。the other people(其余的人其余的人)意意义义表达欠佳，表达欠佳，应应用用some others(还还有些人有些人)与第一句中与第一句中some of us相呼相呼应应。To应应改改为为In。in ones opinion意意为为“在某人看来，在某人看来，依某人之依某人之见见”，为为固定搭配。固定搭配。excited“兴奋兴奋的的”，表示人的感，表示人的感觉觉，在此，在此处处不恰当，不恰当，应应用用exciting“令人令人兴奋兴奋的的”。watching应应改改为为seeing。表示。表示“看看电电影影”用用see a film。
