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2、年暑假你在乡下度过了一个有意义的假假如今年暑假你在乡下度过了一个有意义的假期，请根据以下要点下一篇短文，介绍你的暑期，请根据以下要点下一篇短文，介绍你的暑假生活。假生活。1. 帮助祖父母干农活；帮助祖父母干农活；2. 有时去村西的小河游泳；有时去村西的小河游泳；3. 帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。词数词数100左右；可适当补充细节以使行文连贯。左右；可适当补充细节以使行文连贯。5金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 学生习作学生习作This summer holiday, I spent a
3、 meaningful holiday in my grandparents. First of all, I helped my grandparents to do farm work. Sometimes, I went swimming in the river west of the village. I also spent some time helping neighbors children learn English. So I have a meaningful summer holiday.6金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老
4、师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 学生习作学生习作I had an unforgettable holiday this summer.First, I helped my grandparents with work in the field. It left a deep impression on me. At the same time, I realized that the farmers are hard.Sometimes, we went swimming in the river to the west of the village, and we caught
5、 a lot of fish. Suddenly, the dark clouds gathered and it rained heavily. We hurriedly ran up to our house. Although we were wet through, we still enjoyed ourselves.Then, I also helped neighbors children with English .I believe this is the best holiday of mine.7金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网
6、老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 学生习作学生习作This summer holiday, I spent a meaningful holiday in my grandparents. First of all, I helped my grandparents to do farm work. Sometimes, I went swimming in the river west of the village. I also spent some time helping neighbors children learn English. So I have a mean
7、ingful summer holiday.要点齐全，语言正确，要点齐全，语言正确，51字字8金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 学生习作学生习作I had an unforgettable holiday this summer.First, I helped my grandparents with work in the field. It left a deep impression on me. At the same time, I realized that the farmers are h
8、ard.Sometimes, we went swimming in the river to the west of the village, and we caught a lot of fish. Suddenly, the dark clouds gathered and it rained heavily. We hurriedly ran up to our house. Although we were wet through, we still enjoyed ourselves.Then, I also helped neighbors children with Engli
9、sh .I believe this is the best holiday of mine.要点齐全，语言基本正确，要点齐全，语言基本正确，102字，但偏离要点字，但偏离要点9金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 书面表达六步法：1 认真审题，看好提示 2 抓内容要点3 组词成句子4 适当扩充细节： 增加地点 增加时间 发散思维5 连接成文6 抄写10金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 4 适当增加细节： 增加时间e.g
10、. 外出购物外出购物 Im going out shopping . Im going out shopping, and wont be back until about 5:00 pm. 增加地点e.g.替房东还书替房东还书 I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return. I have taken with me the two books you asked me to return to the City Library. 发散思维?11金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师
11、都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 12金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! I like sports very much, 方法一 列举具体的实例来补充说明e.g.1: 我喜欢体育运动such as basketball and football. 13金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! e.g.2: 青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球青少年应尽我们所能保护环境拯救地球We teenagers should d
12、o what we can to protect the environment and save the earth. For example, we can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags, refuse to use single-use products, plant more trees and save water and energy.14金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! After supper, the man went to hi
13、s bedroom.After a rich meal, the fat man slowly made his way to his bedroom.e.g.1：晚饭后，这个男的走向卧室：晚饭后，这个男的走向卧室神态、动作神态、动作方法二 添加与所给信息有关的神态、动作、心理描写及背景渲染等内容15金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! e.g.2：有时去村西的小河游泳：有时去村西的小河游泳拓展：河水非常清澈 背景渲染背景渲染 I went swimming in the river west of the
14、village now and then.The water in the river was very clear.16金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! I found some bad behavior.e.g.3：我看到了一些不良行为。：我看到了一些不良行为。I was quite disappointed to find some bad behavior.心理心理17金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! e.g
15、.1 Tracy 来电话留言：咖啡屋（来电话留言：咖啡屋（Bolton Coffee）见面取消）见面取消 。拓展：因为她有重要的事情处理。拓展：因为她有重要的事情处理。 原因原因 as she has something important to attend to. e.g.2：帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。：帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。拓展：孩子们进步很快，我也受到他们父母的称赞拓展：孩子们进步很快，我也受到他们父母的称赞 。 结果结果 To my joy, they made rapid progress and their parents thought highly of me.Tracy c
16、alled, saying that she couldnt meet you at Bolton Coffee I also helped children in the neighborhood with their English lessons.方法三 添加与所给信息有关的原因，结果，条件，让步，手段，目的等内容18金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 有时去村西的小河游泳。有时去村西的小河游泳。增加条件状语增加条件状语我帮助祖父母干农活。我帮助祖父母干农活。增加目的、让步状语增加目的、让步状语帮助邻
17、里的孩子补习英语。帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。增加手段增加手段请扩充细节请扩充细节19金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 条件条件 e.g.3：有时去村西的小河游泳：有时去村西的小河游泳拓展：如果天气允许的话， If weather permitted/ Weather permitting,I went swimming in the river to the west of the village now and then.20金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师
18、都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! e.g.4：我帮助祖父母干农活。：我帮助祖父母干农活。I helped my grandparents do farm work.拓展：尽管我很累了，我还是为自己感到自豪。拓展：尽管我很累了，我还是为自己感到自豪。 Although I was very tired, I was still proud of myself.让步让步 21金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! e.g.5：我帮助祖父母干农活。：我帮助祖父母干农活。I helped my grandpa
19、rents do farm work拓展：为了体验生活拓展：为了体验生活 in order to experience life.目的目的 22金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! e.g.6：帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。：帮助邻里的孩子补习英语。拓展：每天早上我花两个小时帮他们练听力拓展：每天早上我花两个小时帮他们练听力。I helped children in the neighborhood with their English lessons.手段手段 Every morning I spent two
20、hours helping them practise listening.23金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 方法四 结尾发挥，写你的感受，评价，愿望，倡议等Although I stood all the way home, I felt very happy for what I did. With everyones contribution, we can make our school a comfortable learning environment. I think such acti
21、vities are necessary and meaningful.In addition, if she would like to learn Chinese, I will be happy to help her. 24金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 链接高考（链接高考（2007全国卷全国卷 I）：）：假定你是李华，希望通过外籍教师假定你是李华，希望通过外籍教师Peter找一个英语笔友。请写一封短信，描述一找一个英语笔友。请写一封短信，描述一下你理想中笔友的条件，并说明下你理想中笔友的条件，
22、并说明为什么为什么选选这样的笔友。具体条件包括：这样的笔友。具体条件包括：1 年龄；年龄；2 性别；性别；3 爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。爱好（旅游、运动、宠物等）。25金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 链接高考（链接高考（2007全国卷全国卷 I）：）：I want to have a pen friend , a girl in her early twenties, and with interests similar to mine. she is someone who is intereste
23、d in traveling, sports and keeping pets.要点齐全、语言正确，要点齐全、语言正确，32字字26金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 27金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! Task Group 1 爱好运动爱好运动Group 2 爱好旅游爱好旅游Group 2 喜欢养宠物喜欢养宠物28金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都
24、说好老师都说好! ! Improve it!爱好运动爱好运动I am a healthy boy full of energy so I like sports very much, especially outdoor activities. Whenever I have time, Ill go hiking or mountain climbing with my classmates. 29金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! Improve it!I like to seek a pen pal
25、who is interested in travelling just like me. If possible, we can travel together or share traveling experiences in our e-mails.爱好旅游爱好旅游30金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! Improve it! I have another hobby that is keeping pets. I have kept a lovely dog named Bei Bei for 3
26、years.喜欢养宠物喜欢养宠物31金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 参考范文参考范文 Dear Peter, Im writing to ask whether you are able to do me a favor. I want to have a pen friend, hopefully a girl in her early twenties, and with interests similar to mine. In my mind, she is someone who is int
27、erested in traveling, swimming, and playing table tennis. Besides, it would be better for her to have a pet dog as I have kept one at home for some time. With such a pen friend, I think I can share with her our traveling experiences, taking care of pets, or whatever we have in common. And I believe
28、I will improve my English by doing so and learn more about her country. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Best regards, Li Hua32金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 能力提升能力提升请适当增加细节请适当增加细节 Yesterday I went to the Friendship Store. I saw a foreigner buying clothes. He s
29、poke English. The shop assistant couldnt understand him. I translated for them. They said thanks to me. I think the shop assistant should know foreign language.33金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! 34金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网金太阳新课标资源网 老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好老师都说好! ! Yesterday I
30、went to the Friendship Store. I saw a foreigner buying clothes. He spoke English. The shop assistant couldnt understand him. I translated for them. They said thanks to me. I think the shop assistant should know foreign language.I was doing some shopping when I happened to see that a foreigner was trying to buy some clothes.He tried what he could to make himself understood.But at allSeeing thisI went up to them andwhat the foreign guest said into Chinese or how they could work in such a big store without knowing any foreign language.
