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1、英语四级六级作文训练营一 名词的效果：Others think that the utilization of waste products will be eliminated sooner or later with the emergence of hi-te . However, I did not consider that factor carefully. Because I hold the view that waste materials can be made good use of to help reduce the living cost.原句：I did not
2、consider that factor carefully.改句：I fail to take that factor into careful consideration.【讲解】在这个简单句中，主要做了两个改变，一是把did not改成fail to, 同样的意思，可是词汇应用的灵活度却大大提高。二是把considercarefully改成了take sth into careful consideration，在考场作文中，词组的运用是个亮点，而且英语中静态居多（名词用的多），汉语中动态居多（动词用的多），在此把动词consider变成名词consideration，顿时使英文更加地道
3、。下面请修改以下语句：1.With the development of society, people pay more and more attention to the quality of life.2.They live a happier life. They take part in all kinds of social activities and have more holidays.答案：1.With the advancement of society, more attention has been paid to the quality of life.2.They
4、 live a happier life,participating in social activities of all conceivable kinds and enjoying more holidays.二分词做插入语的效果例句：You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.改句：You, enthusi
5、astic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.解析：我们可以看到例句中有3个简单句，咋看上去给人一种啰嗦、累赘的感觉。但细看之下，不难发现3个句子的主语全部是you，因此我们就该联想到同位语、插入语的应用。从改句中，我们可以发现谓语从原来的3个变成了1个，顿时使句子显得高级，精简很多。其次，还有一个改动之处为good，这个词是常用词，口语中用的更频繁些，我们可以
6、想一些同义词例如excellent，outstanding等等。下面请大家试试看吧！1.He depended on his familiess support to find a good job. One of his friends looked downed on him.答案：Depending on his familiess support, he found a decent a job, which was despised by one of his friends.二 副词的应用以及搭配问题例句：In order to live a good life, it is be
7、coming more and more important for people to learn knowledge well. Because in this modern world, knowledge is everything.改句：In order to live a happy(wonderful) life, it is becoming increasingly important for people to acquire knowledge well, for the reason that knowledge is everything in this modern
8、 world.【解析】：首先我们看到原句中出现了more and more，在四六级作文中，它可算是常客，对阅卷老师而言，不具任何吸引力，而且有落入俗套的危险哦，所以在我们把它用一个简单的副词来替代，副词修饰形容词，相信会令人感觉眼前一亮。其次，我们还要注意一个搭配问题，原句中的learn knowledge是明显的中式英语，很多同学会误用，正确的搭配应该是acquire knowledge。最后，我们有余力可以把句子通过从句进行相连，使句子看起来更有结构感。下面大家一起来试试吧！1.China is developing very fast in recent years.答案：China
9、is highly developed in recent years.四动词的妙用。原句：She is better than other rivals in athletic ability.改句：She dwarfs all her rivals in athletic ability.【解析】首先原句的句意为“她在运动方面比对手优秀。”，观察句子后，我们可以看出，句子中存在一个比较级，比较级是作文中常用的，所以大家应尽量避免多用，从而使自己的作文与众不同。“dwarf”是一个非常好用的词，作动词时，本意为“使矮小”，在此，可意译为“使相形见绌”，与“be better than”想表达
10、的意思一致。但是，很明显，“dwarf”是这个普通句子的亮点，也就是整个句子的加分点。下面大家一起来试试吧！She is the most diligent girl in this class.答案：Her diligence dwarfs other girls in this class.五连词的替换。原句:Although the development of science and technology has brought the process to mankind, our surrounding natural environment is greatly destroye
11、d.改句:The development of science and technology has brought the process to mankind while our surrounding natural environment is greatly destroyed.【解析】原句是一句典型的转折句，在四六级作文中，although和though“的应用相当广泛，那么如何使自己与众不同呢，在此，我为大家推荐一个连词”while“，这个单词有很多意思，但在改句中，它的意思是”虽然、尽管“，在考场上用的人相对比较少，所以以后在作文中，如果出现了转折、对比之类的关系句，记住要想到
12、”while“哦！下面大家来试试吧！Existing employees have made concessions, such as higher retirement ages, but it is near impossible to reduce the payments made to existing pensioners.答案：While existing employees have made concessions, such as higher retirement ages, it is near impossible to reduce the payments mad
13、e to existing pensioners.六名词和连词的妙用。原句：It is very important for the public to acquire knowledge on Sinology. Because it stands for Chinese civilization with more than 5000 years and promoting Sinology can help to build a harmonious society.改句：It is of vital significance for the public to acquire know
14、ledge on Sinology. For one thing, it is the essence of Chinese civilization with more than 5000 years. For another, the promotion of Sinology can contribute to a harmonious society.【解析】咋看原句，基本上没什么可以改的地方，但是仔细观察，我们不难发现原句中的“very important”是英语四六级作文中常用的词，所以我们需要想办法使其看起来不那么普通，我想的办法就是把它转换成“of+名词”的短语，这个名词可以是
15、“importance”，也可以是其同义词“significance”。然后，我们又发现because后面跟的是两个原因，为了让结构更清晰，我们可以用for one thing，for another来分开它们，这样更有层次。最后，以前某一期提过，就是英语喜欢用名词，汉语喜欢用动词，所以我们可以把“promoting”改成“promotion”，“stands for”转换成“essence”，再把“help to”提升一下，改成“contribute to”，是不是感觉句子质量一下子就提高了不少呢？下面大家来试试吧！It is very beneficial to everyone to l
16、earn knowledge.答案：It is of great benefit to everyone to acquire knowledge.七原句：In a developing country such as China, our investment in culture, education and science, and especially elementary education, must be thought of firstly. It is important for China to catch up with the developed nations in todays surging waves of technological revolution.改句：In a
