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1、精品范文模板 可修改删除撰写人:_日 期:_名师指导四级写作提高:如何改写范文在复习准备四级写作时,我们应该按照“谋篇、段落、句子、措辞”(如图一)“四步走”的宏观复习方式来准备。我们应该将以往的范文作为框架,从谋篇布局着手,加以润色字词句的修饰,将其变成自己的四级高分作文。学习范文或掌握优秀作文是打破提高自己传统写作语言的第一步。下面我们通过2005年12月四级范文,分析学习如何提纯范文中的“谋篇、段落、句子、措辞”并加以利用,使其变成自己的语言。Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourist?1. 名校校园正成为旅游新热点2. 校园是否应对游
2、客开放,人们看法不同3. 我认为考试大论坛Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University an
3、d Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Dif
4、ferent people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themse
5、lves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.I
6、n my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, have become one of the popular . It has been sh
7、own on TV and on the radio that .第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to ? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for in that . On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this p
8、henomenon. In their opinion, will have negative effect on because it will not only do harm to but also to .第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, is not a good thing. With the increasing , it will ruin .其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。来源:考试大的美女编辑们段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。统一性(unity):段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第
9、二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。连贯性(coherence):关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in ones opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。完整性(completeness):以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to op
10、en the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式设问法。“On one hand . On the other hand, .”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法再次,提纯范文“句子写作”。1. It has been shown that 类似句型:It is known to us that It is said that It is reported that It is controversial that 2. “ Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other f
11、amous universities 。”并列句。并列句是简单的复杂句。但其运用方法并不简单,注意练习并接句的使用,会使句子显的更加饱满。3. enable v. 使能够I gave him full directions to enable him to find the house.4. in that = because表“因为”的连词还有since, for, as,如:The boy was absent because he was ill. = The boy was absent since he was ill.此句以我们常用的人称开头,句式简单,我们可以通过把since提前
12、改变句式,如:Since the boy was ill, he was absent. 句式多样化。最后,提纯范文“措辞”。1. attraction n. 具有吸引力的事情。2. thousands and thousands 成千上万的形容“多”的表达方法:millions and millionsa multitude ofa great deal ofa large amount ofplenty ofmany a3. “some people argued that ”中的“argue”并不是“讨论,辩论”的意思,而是“认为”。I argue that I maintain tha
13、t I claim that I insist that = I think that I hold that I assert that I assume that 4. negative adj. 否定的,相反的hold negative view = hold opposite opinions5. phenomenon n. 现象social phenomenon 社会现象natural phenomenon 自然现象6. intellectual adj. 聪明的= intelligent, bright, clever(选词策略:使用最近所学的单词,如intellectual in
14、telligent bright clever)在分析并掌握范文之后,我们需要运用范文知识练习仿写。笔者运用2005年12月范文中的模板结构仿写了2006年12月的四级作文,以供参考:1. 许多人喜欢在除夕夜看春节晚会2. 但有些人提出取消春节晚会3. 我的看法Nowadays, the Spring Festival Evening has become one of the popular topic and attractions during every traditional New Years Eve. It has been shown on TV and on the radi
15、o that every year thousands and thousands of Chinese people appear to be accustomed to enjoying the sights and sounds of a brilliant feast, while gathering with their beloved family.However, an increasing number of people have voiced different opinions towards it. So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to cancel the Spring Festival Evening? Differen