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1、阅读下面材料，依据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。It was the day of the big crosscountry run. Students from seven different primary schools in and around the small town were warming up and walking the route路线through thick evergreen forest.I looked around and finally spotted David, who was standing by himself off
2、 to the side by a fence. He was small for ten years old. His usual big toothy smile was absent today. I walked over and asked him why he wasnt with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run.What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event!I quickly searched the cro
3、wd for the schools coach and asked him what had happened. I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him, he explained unfortably. I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.I bit back my frustration懊恼. I knew the coach meant well he thought he was doing the right thing. A
4、fter making sure that David could run if he wanted, I turned to find him ing towards me, his small body rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward.David had a brain disease which prevented him from walking or running like other children, but at school his classmates thought of him as a r
5、egular kid. He always participated to the best of his ability in whatever they were doing. That was why none of the children thought it unusual that David had decided to join the crosscountry team. It just took him longer thats all. David had not missed a single practice, and although he always fini
6、shed his run long after the other children, he did always finish. As a special education teacher at the school, I was familiar with the challenges David faced and was proud of his strong determination.留意：1.续写词数应为150左右；2.请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答.We sat down next to each other, but David wouldnt look at me.I
7、 watched as David moved up to the starting line with the other runners.【试题分析】这篇文章是一篇记叙文叙述了同学David由于脑部疾病不能像正常孩子一样走路和跑步。但是每次校内的每一次活动，他都尽他的最大努力参与并完成，因此同学们从来都没有觉得David和他们有什么不同。但是在跨地区的校际竞赛中，教练担忧心David会被称赞，让David本人打算是否参赛，David打算放弃。当我得知只要情愿，David是可以参赛的时候，我做了一个打算.一、精确?理解材料，理清人物大事1.浅层信息理解首先要审题:(1)体裁:记叙文;(2)人
8、称:第三人称(3)主体时态:一般过去时;主题语境:人与自我之做人做事the body of the storyWhen：before the big crosscountry runwhere：thick evergreen forestWho:主要人物: I, David,;次要人物:the coach;other studentsWhat: David decided to give up arunning petition at first but stood on the starting line finallyWhy: The coach was afraid that other
9、s would laugh at him.But I didnt think so.How：？2.深层信息理解挖掘文章细节描写类型:心理活动;动作，环境，外貌性格;对话。1).主次人物分析依据原文和续写两段段首语可知，David和“我是故事的主要人物，二人是师生关系;教练和其他同学是次要人物。依据续写两段段首语可知，在续写第一段中，会消失主要人物David和“我。在续写其次段中，David和“我仍旧是主要人物，次要人物(教练和其他同学)可能会消失。2).人物情感和性格分析依据插叙内容(David had a brain disease which prevented him from walk
10、ing or running like other children.)和David的外貌(He was small for ten years old.)、动作(his small bod rocking from side to side as he swung his feet forward)和神态(His usual big toothy smile was absent today)，可以总结出David“身残志坚的人物形象。在续写中可以从这一人物特点动身设计David竞赛过程中的自信、坚持的详细表现。依据原文中关于“我(walked over and asked quickly
11、searched for the coach bit back my frustration, was proud of his strong determination)和次要人物(the coachmeant well, his classmates thought of him as a regular kid)的描写，可以总结出大家对David的关爱。因此，在依据续写两段应当也要消失对David的关爱场景描写，以保证续写与文本材料的语调全都性。3).环境分析依据原文和续写段首语the day of the big crosscountry run, were warming up an
12、d walking the route, join the crosscountry team, sat down next to each other, the starting line等词句可知，故事的“冲突和动作发生在孩子们去参与越野跑经过的常绿林(thick evergreen forest)中，续写故事的“解决局部也应发生在越野跑线路上。4).动作分析依据I looked around and finally spotted David可知作者在人群钟查找David，期盼看到David的心情; I walked over and asked him why he wasnt wit
13、h the other children表达“我关爱细心的一面。I quickly searched the crowd for the schools coach and asked him what had happened表现当“我知道David放弃竞赛时我急迫地想要知道缘由的心情。He hesitated andthen said he had decided not to run表现出教练在答复我的问题的纠结、难过等简单的心情;He had worked so hard for this说明David从来没有想过要放弃竞赛的坚忍不拔的性格;his small body rocking
14、 from side to side as he swung his feet forward通过动作描写说明的David走路的姿态和困雅，为后文续写局部跑步的困难做好铺垫。5).心理活动分析依据What was wrong? He had worked so hard for this event说明“我信任David没有想要放弃竞赛的心情his classmates thought of him as a regular kid他的同学认为他是一个一般的孩子，说明大卫可能最终会坚持竞赛; That was why none of the children thought it unusua
15、l that David had decided to join the crosscountryteam通过孩子们的看法故事想告知我们续写主题只要你信任自己并尽力去做，没有人会认为你不寻常。6).外貌性格分析依据He was small for ten years old和His usual big toothy smile was absent today通过外貌描写呈现了David身体上比别人弱别小的特点，但是他的笑容说明他始终是一个乐观开朗的孩子，为故事续写作了铺垫，同时也表示故事消失一个“冲突转折。7).对话分析间接引语I walked over and asked him why
16、he wasnt with the other children. He hesitated and then said he had decided not to run叙述我询问和他答复，直接引语“I was afraid that kids from other schools would laugh at him, he explained unfortably. “I gave him the choice to run or not, and let him decide.说明David放弃竞赛的缘由，通过教练的话直接表述，说明连教练自己都不确定他做的是否正确，故事更具说服力，同时表达四周人对David担忧和关怀。3.整合本篇的情节和情感线索：跑步立刻就开头了，同学
