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托福作文写作范文详解 题目：The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Sample answer： Revealed in the bar chart is the time spent in the UK for different types of telephone calls from 1995 to 2002. Generally, among the three categories - local (fixed line), national and international (fixed line) and mobiles (all calls), local phone calls accounted for the largest proportion of all usage. Next to it, national and international ones took the second position. At the bottom of the list, the mobiles took up the smallest part. (首段概括介绍了图表内容，指出了三种不同电话各自的份额，为接下来的论述做好铺垫) The trends of the telephone usage changed during the eight years. First, the local phone calls peaked at about 90 billion minutes in 1999, and then started to decline to the 1995 figure in 2002 at 70 billion.However, the trends of the other two call types kept increasing. National and international calls simply rose steadily over the years. The most noticeable change was the trend of cell phones, which soared, also never-endingly rising. (此段分别指出了三种不同类型的电话各自的通话时间量和排名，并指出了他们的变化趋势) In sum, people used local fixed lines the most in the UK. Meanwhile, the mobiles were becoming increasingly popular. (收尾总结全文，点出了图表最显著的两点特征) 满分要素剖析 语言表达 表示所占比例常用的词组，account for, take up 等；表示增加降低常用的词组，peak, decline to, rise steadily, soar 等值得借鉴。 逻辑结构 文章采用总-分-总结构。开篇指出了图表涉及的三种电话类型各自通话时间所占份额。接下来详细分析了其中的数据以及其反映出来的变化趋势。最后总结了全文，指出了图表最显著的特征。 题目 ：The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Sample answer： The two drawings illustrate the changes of the same island before and after the construction of some transport and service buildings. (首段综述原题，对两个表格的内容进行概括描述） It is clear that before development, the horizontal island, which is about 260 meters long, has a few trees on both its east and west sides. Furthermore, on the west edge, a small beach is created for tourism in the future. The layout changes tremendously after buildings are constructed along almost the whole island. Meanwhile, the trees on the east side are kept, leaving a natural view. （第二段描述海岛基本情况，概括发展前后海岛上主体不变的部分） However, the westside trees are surrounded by accommodations, with a footpath linking them to the beach where a swimming zone is closely connected. Next to the westernmost accommodations, there is a reception building around which vehicle tracks heading to the southern pier for tourist sailing has been paved. On the opposite side of the pier, a restaurant stands at the north side near the seashore. Finally, the center of the island has also been designed to supply housing for tourists. （第三段重点对比发展前后两幅图中发生的变化情况） In sum, after comparing the two drawings, the tremendous developments are evident. These changes have caused the western and center areas of the island to become crowded with modern facilities. （全文总结，指出发展前后海岛上的巨大变化） 满分要素剖析 语言表达 本段中一个长句子之得学习。 Next to the westernmost accommodations, there is a reception building around which vehicle tracks heading to the southern pier for tourist sailing has been paved. 首先句子中有一个which引导的定语从句，先行词是a reception building.在定语从句中，又有一个动名词后置作为定语，修饰vehicle tracks. 同理，注意下面这个句子。 However, the westside trees are surrounded by accommodations, with a footpath linking them to the beach where a swimming zone is closely connected. “linking to” 修饰footpath, 而where引导的定语从句修饰beach. 逻辑结构 文章采用总-分-总结构。开篇指出了发展前后海岛发生了巨大变化，接下来分别描述两幅图片中的细节，指出了不变和变化的部分。最后一段总结了全文。