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1、 如何让作文更出彩如何让作文更出彩 高二英语 2020,9,23Teaching Objective To let Ss master the writing detail-adding skillsImportant and difficult point How to add more details to your composition（2008年全国卷一）假如你是李华，你的英国朋友Peter来信向你咨询如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写回信。要点:1。参加中文学习班； 2。看中文书刊、电视； 3。 4。交中国朋友。注意:1，词数100左右；2，可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3，开头
2、语已为你写好。Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to take a Chinese course. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible. Besides, it should
3、be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs. You can also make more Chinese friends. Try and write me in Chinese next time. Best wishes Yours Li Hua Dear Peter, Im glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well. Here are a few suggestions. First, it is important to
4、take a Chinese course, as you ll be able to learn from the teachers and practice with your fellow students. Then, it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible, which are all the best resources to help you to learn Chinese.Besides, it should be a goo
5、d idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because by doing so youll learn and remember chinese words more easily. You can also make more Chinese friends,who will tell you a lot about China and help you with chinese words .Try and write me in Chinese next time. Using it in reality is often the best way
6、 to learn a foreign language. Best wishes!Discuss What are disadvantages in the first version? What are advantages in the second version?Version1. disadvantages:1.篇幅短小2.没有高级句型、短语3.逐字逐句翻译要点，没有增加合适的细节Version2. advantages:1.篇幅长度适宜2.善于利用高级句型、短语3.要点完整并且有合适的细节拓展书面表达增加细节: 增加支撑句 (supporting sentences): (为什么
7、这样做，怎样做，会怎样; 且重点内容高级句型呈现) 书面表达增加细节3大技巧: 1. 前扩句 2. 后扩句 3. 升级简单句 技巧一：前扩句 1： 增添背景信息，如：原因,结果,目的,条件等的非谓语形式，或从句。例1：我们打算为我班设计一件服装。( considering that)改造前：We intend to design a uniform for our class。改造后: Considering that this activity is meaningful, we intend to design a uniform for our class 练习：我计划在一家外贸公司做兼
8、职。( aiming to do/Because)改造前：I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign trade company。改造后: . Aiming to get some practical experience , I am planning to take a part-time job in a foreign trade company. Because I want to get some practical experience, I am planning to take a part-time job in a
9、 foreign trade company. 2：套用固定句型 改造前: She is such a fine swimmer改造后 1: What I want to put emphasis on is that she is such a fine swimmer.改造后 2: There is no denying that she is such a fine swimmer改造后 3: It is universally acknowledged that she is such a fine swimmerIt is worth noting thatWhat I want t
10、o cast light on is that There is no doubt that 技巧二：后扩句：1.列举具体的实例进行补充说明例1。我们青少年应尽我们所能保护环境、拯救地球。(添加 for example)改造前： We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth.改造后: We teenagers should do what we can to protect the environment and save the earth . For example, we
11、can use recyclable bags instead of plastic bags, refuse to use disposable products and save energy.练习1：我要花一些时间和父母在一起。(添加-ing表伴随)改造前： I will spend some time staying with my parents.改造后: Ill spend some time staying with my parents, chatting with them and doing some housework.2：我想找一个像我一样喜欢旅行的笔友。( If po
12、ssible，)改造前： Id like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me改造后: Id like to seek a pen pal who is interested in traveling just like me. If possible, we can travel together or share traveling experience.2： 原因原因补充说明。 例2：首先，参加中文课程很重要。(because)改造前：First， it is important to take a C
13、hinese course改造后: First, it is important to take a Chinese course, because you ll be able to learn from the teachers and practise with your fellow students.3：事 / 物 / 活动，which 引导的非限制定从 例3：我们也会与他们一同唱歌、跳舞、玩游戏。( which)改造前: Well also spend some fun time together singing, dancing and playing games with th
14、em.改造后: Well also spend some fun time together singing, dancing and playing games with them, which we hope will make them happy.练习：Today I took part in the meaningful activity, which_I think I benefited a lot from.4：人，who 引导的从句 例5：这个活动是一个让我们学生向父母和老师致谢的好机会。(who)，改造前: This event is a good chance for u
15、s students to express our gratitude to our parents and teachers.改造后: This event is a good chance for us students to express our gratitude to our parents and teachers who have been bringing up and educating us with great efforts.练习：We found the great hall full of students and teachers who_.were liste
16、ning to an important report. 技巧三： 升级简单句 简单句其实也可以不简单，若将简单句与非谓语动词短语、形容词短语、介词短语、同位语、独立主格结构等巧妙地合并在一起，不但可以表达更丰富的内容，而且也使句子变得更精彩，能充分展示出你英语表达的能力。1。合并句子: 可以把主语相同的简单句用非谓语或定语从句的形式合并成一个高级句式(1) She realized her mom must be verytired after a days work.(2)The girl helped to remove the bag fromher mom s shoulder. 改造后1； Realizing her mom must be very tired after a days work, the girl helped to remove the bag from her moms shoulder. 2, The girl ,who realized her mom must be very tired after a days work helped to
