九年级（上）九年级（上） Unit 1第二部分第二部分 高频话题写作指导高频话题写作指导我们的变化我们的变化 写作导图写作导图 从云南近四年我们的变化相关话题书面表达的从云南近四年我们的变化相关话题书面表达的命题来看，此类作文命题角度如下：命题来看，此类作文命题角度如下： 1. 实现梦想的目标，心态的变化，如实现梦想的目标，心态的变化，如2012曲靖曲靖珍惜眼下；珍惜眼下； 2. 成长的经历，如成长的经历，如2011大理大理成长 Change a lotStronger and strongerCook mealGot hot waterExample:mother was illUsed to beWeak and shortNowLearn to understandCare about otherDelicious but saltyCook mealTears in eyes 写作范文详见：写作范文详见： 亮点句型速成亮点句型速成常用句型：常用句型：My teachers and classmates help me with my English. My English is good now.推荐句型：推荐句型：①①Thanks to my dear teachers and classmates, my English becomes much better now than before. ②②With the help of my teachers and classmates, my English has improved a lot now. ③③I have made great progress in my English with the help of my teachers and classmates. 常用句型：常用句型：I liked playing computer games before. And I played it a lot.①①I was interested in playing computer games before, so I played it a lot.推荐句型：推荐句型：②②I used to be interested in playing computer games, so I always spent plenty of time on it. 1.I used to be a bit shy, but now I become outgoing.2. Day by day, I get on very well with my classmates.3. My life has changed a lot in the past three years.4. I was fat and short before I came to the middle school. 5.Now, I like sports and I often play basketball with my classmates after school. 6. So I become taller and stronger than before.7. Good habits help me to study better and keep healthier. 8.My parents and my teachers used to worry about me, but now they are both pleased with me.9. I am willing to care about others. 典例剖析典例剖析（（20112011大理大理））I Am Not a Child Any More提示：提示： 在阳光雨露里，我已长高、长壮！但这还不是在阳光雨露里，我已长高、长壮！但这还不是全部，长大还应包括什么？是关心、帮助同学？是全部，长大还应包括什么？是关心、帮助同学？是体贴、理解父母？是感恩、回报亲朋师长？还是体贴、理解父母？是感恩、回报亲朋师长？还是……成长的点点滴滴，久久不能忘记。
请以成长的点点滴滴，久久不能忘记请以“I Am Not a Child Any More”为题记叙你在学习生活中经为题记叙你在学习生活中经历的一件或两件事，表明你已不再是一个小孩历的一件或两件事，表明你已不再是一个小孩 要求：要求：1.请根据所给的题目，用英语写一篇短文请根据所给的题目，用英语写一篇短文 词数不少于词数不少于60个；个；2. 语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁；语言流畅、书写规范、卷面整洁；3. 文中不得出现真实姓名、校名，否则以零分文中不得出现真实姓名、校名，否则以零分 计 1. 对自己的现在和过去作比较，以此说明自己已经对自己的现在和过去作比较，以此说明自己已经 长大；长大；2. 写出自己在学习生活中经历的一件或两件事情，写出自己在学习生活中经历的一件或两件事情， 通过事例来证明自己的观点；通过事例来证明自己的观点；3. 加以总结，再次突出主题加以总结，再次突出主题审题指导审题指导】】 【【范文点评范文点评】】I Am Not a Child Any More I am a 16-year-old girl now. I have changed a lot. ①①I used to be weak and short. But now, ②②I am stronger and as tall as my mother. The most important thing is that I have learned to understand and care about others.①①从used to可以看出作者在开头叙述的是自己的过去，说出变化；②②这句话是形容词的原级比较，可以看出小作者句型掌握得很多，句子结构多样； It was a Wednesday evening. WhenI went back home, no one was in. So I cooked the meal. ③③I didn’t know my mother was ill until my parents came back from the hospital. They both said the meal was very delicious, though it tasted salty. After supper, I found they were too tired. ③③本句采用了not...until句型，是文章的增分亮点。
I got hot water for them. When my mother put her feet into the water, ④④with tears in her eyes, she said，“Dear, you have grown up.” It was the first time that I cared about my parents. I realized I was not a child any more.④④这是用了with结构，表示伴随的状态，可以看出小作者丰富的语法知识。