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1、CET-4 写作中的“亮点”意识大学英语四级作文要拿高分，学生就要了解评分标准。CET-4作文评分分五个档，标准如下： 2分：条理不清，思路紊乱，语言支离破碎或大部分句子均有错误，且多数为严重错误； 5分：基本切题，表达思想不够清楚，连贯性差，有较多的严重语言错误； 8分：基本切题，表达思想比较清楚，文章尚连贯，但语言错误较多，其中有少量的严重错误； 11分：切题，表达思想清楚，文字连贯，但有少量语言错误； 14分：切题，表达思想清楚，文字通顺，连贯性较好，基本上无语言错误。字数不够扣分（各段已给出的主题句均不得计入）。段落不够扣分。对于四级作文的评分标准,还有一个更为形象的说法。这五个档次依
2、次是：一塌糊涂；糊里糊涂；马马虎虎；清清爽爽；漂漂亮亮。 实际上，要想四级作文清清爽爽乃至漂漂亮亮，使分数处于11分和14档，作文中必须有亮点。亮点可以体现在不同的层面：选词层面上的亮点，如要多用动作动词代替抽象动词，避免相同词语无意义的重复使用；句法上的亮点, 多变的句型,一定的修辞手段,以及一些英语特有的警句和格言；段落层面和全文结构上的亮点，主要体现在 “行文的自然流畅和段落的合理衔接”上,当然也包括整体风格的一致。 作文评分范例 下面我们通过比较两篇四级作文（注：每段的首句题目已给出）来了解评分标准以及作文中亮点的重要性。I. Women are playing an increasi
3、ngly important part in society today. Many women today are playing an important part at works that was thought only could be done by the men before. For example, some women are not secretary in the office, instead , they become manager of a company. With the changes in their social role, womans posi
4、tion in the family has been improved as well. In the world today, more and more women have their own jobs. They get their own salary, and become more independent from their husband. With the economic situation improved, their family position is improving. In spite of these changes, the liberation of
5、 woman has not been completely realized. Many husbands only want his wife to stay at home, and do some works or do some shopping. They only want their wife to be a housewife, but not a manager of a company. 该作文为8分作文。基本切题，思想表达尚清楚，基本连贯，有个别严重的语言错误及用词不当，但可以理解。另外，文章中无论词语和句子层面都没有亮点。文中除了independent from外，没
6、有亮点词汇。句式结构单调，文中除了一个包含定语从句的复合句Many women today are playing an important part at works that was thought only could be done by the men before之外，其他的都是简单句。II. Women are playing an increasingly important part in society today. In many countries, more and more women are acting as workers, farmers, scientis
7、ts and even leaders. We can say that almost all jobs which men can do are done perfectly by women. Women are no longer looked down upon by society. With the changes in their social role, womens position in the family has been improved as well. Husband and wife are now equal in the family. They cope
8、with problems of daily life together, and share happiness with each other. Also, you can hardly find out that in todays families, women are being busy with dinners, whereas men are comfortably sitting in armchairs, reading newspapers. In spite of these changes, the liberation of woman has not been c
9、ompletely realized. A number of men still jealously guard their rights, and regard women as incapable creature. Few women are allowed to attend important international meeting dominated by men. Thats really the problems we should solve immediately. 该作文为14分作文。切题，文章通顺，语言规范。句法有一定变化，用词适当。有个别小错，但不影响理解。文中
10、有如下亮点。词汇层面：act as，look down upon，cope with，share with，be busy with，jealously，guard，incapable creature，dominate等词语的使用恰如其分；even，perfectly，comfortably，still，immediately这些副词的使用准确而又形象地体现出了作者的语气和态度。句式层面：句式结构多样：简单句：Women are no longer looked down upon by the society. 复合句：We can say that almost all jobs whi
11、ch men can do are done perfectly by women. 并列复合句：Also, you can hardly find out that in todays families, women are being busy with dinners, whereas men are comfortably sitting in armchairs, reading newspapers. 这些亮点都使文章增色不少。 从以上两个例子，我们很容易发现这两篇文章为什么在分值上会有如此大的差异。 真题作文评析笔者拟对教学实践中收集到两篇学生写的四级真题作文进行点评并修改。 2
12、009年12月作文题目Create a Green Campus 提纲：1）建设绿色校园很重要 2）绿色校园不仅指绿色的环境 3）为了建设绿色校园，我们应该学生作文： Create a Green Campus The campus in university is the place where students live, study and play. A good environment is necessary but not all. In general, green campus includes not only a good environment, but also an
13、 atmosphere of study, to compete, to help each other. A clean, tidy campus can make people comfortable to live in. And it is a factor to attract excellent professors to come and work. In the same way, an atmosphere of study and competition can motivate the students potential, they will learn more an
14、d make more friends. So it is crucial to create a green campus. As far as I am concerned, we can make a green campus if we follow the tips. First, clean up the campus, plant trees and flowers. Second, give the students more freedom. Let them do whatever they want if that is beneficial. Third, hold s
15、ome classes which tell students how to deal with others, to teach them teamwork. If we can do this, the green campus is on the way. And in the near future, it will come true. 点评：该作文为8分档作文。基本切题，思想表达尚清楚，基本连贯，有一些语言错误及用词不当，但可以理解。语言使用过于平淡，在措辞和句式方面亮点不足。 如：第一段中，not all意思表达不够到位,若改为sufficient则更为贴切；includes使用不够恰当，若改为entails更符合作者的表达意图。这些词语的恰当使用将会是文章的亮点所在。文章中句式单一，全文只有三个复合句，而且都非常简短。如果能将简单句、复合句、并列句、并列复合句糅合使用，文章将增色不少。修改后作文： Create a Green Campus The concept of a green campus is not new. But what is a green campus? From my viewpoint, it entails not only a beautiful scenery, bu
