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1、7A版优质实用文档中国雅思考生高分范文赏析雅思考生经典8分范文一（一）Arezoosnecessary?指导老师：英赛特雅思写作主讲吴建业Recentlytherehasarisenaheateddebateoverwhetherzoosarenecessary.Peopleretaindiverseattitudestowardsthishotissue.Beforepresentingmyview,Iintendtodiscussbothsidesoftheargument.Advocatesofzoosholdthebeliefthatthebenefitsofzoostoanycomm
2、unityareconservational,educationalandrecreational.Tobeginwith,itisaneffectivewaytopreservesomerareanimalsandendangeredspeciesinzoos.ThenaturalenvironmentisnolongerasuitablehabitatforsomespecieswhichareonthevergeofeGtinctionduetothedeteriorationofenvironmentandhunting.Zooshelpincreasethepopulationofe
3、ndangeredspeciesandthusmaintaintheecologicalbalance.Moreover,zoosalsoserveasanidealscientificresearchcenterwherescientistscanconducteGperimentstofindoutthecausesofsomediseasesthathavebeentroublinganimalsanddiscoverthecures.Inaddition,itisalsopossiblethatscientistsbreedmorenewspecies.Besidesprotectin
4、gendangeredspecies,zoosplayanimportantroleinimprovingthepublicknowledgeofanimals.Animalsinzooskeeppeopleintouchwithamorenaturalandanimalworld.Lastofall,zoosareaplaceofentertainmentandrecreation.Theyarealsoagreattouristattractionwhichbooststhelocaltourism.Someotherpeople,however,arestronglyagainstzoo
5、sforseveralsoundreasons.Primarily,itismorallywrongtotakeananimalfromitshome,confineitinunnaturalsettingsanduseitforourentertainment.Thenatureofzoosreflectsaworldwidehumanarrogancetowardsotherspeciesandfostersadisregardforalllife.Furthermore,overcrowdingandunnaturalgroupingsofanimalscancreatestressan
6、dleadtosevereinjuryandevendeathanddeathsfromaggression,disease,stressandilltreatmentarecommon.Worstofall,adultsandchildrenvisitingzooswillbegiventhesubliminalmessagethatitisOKtouseanimalsforourownends,thoughitimpingesontheirfreedomorqualityoflife;thuszooswillencouragepoortreatmentofanimalsmoregenera
7、lly.Inthefinalanalysis,bothsideshavesoundfoundations.However,ifaskedtomakeachoice,Iwillnothesitatetoassenttothelatter.Ibelievethatanimalsbelongtotheirnaturalhabitatinthewildanditisabreachoftheirnaturalrightstotakethembyforceintocaptivityforourownpurposes;thereforezoosshouldbediscouraged.范文赏析：1文章采用了雅
8、思议论文典型的等分式结构（COUNTER-ARGUMENT）。第一段开门见山，引出争论的话题：动物园有没有存在的必要？第二和第三段对争论双方的论点和论据进行了详尽的阐述，最后一段总结，表明作者的立场。文章结构完整，论证全面客观。2整篇文章的关键部位均能较好地运用套句，为读者指明文章发展的方向。恰当地使用这些佳句，一方面起到SIGNPOST的作用，同时使文章条理清晰，层次感强。3文章用词多样化，句式各异。作者对复杂句式把握得恰倒好处，善于换用不同的表达方式，用词精确。4能够熟练运用十大原则进行构思，较好地吸收了最新雅思考试胜策-写作中的观点和词汇。经典高分范文二TOPICDoastheRoman
9、sdowheninRome?作者：欧杨（华南师范大学学生）雅思写作8分得主指导老师：英赛特雅思写作主讲吴建业Recently,thedebateoverwhetherpeoplewhohavebeeninaforeigncountryshouldacceptthenewcultureorformaseparateminoritywithdifferentvaluesandlifestylehasarousedwideconcern.Peopleretaindiverseattitudestowardsthishotissue.Beforepresentingmyview,IintendtoeG
10、plorebothsidesoftheargument.Manypeopleclaimthatpeoplelivinginanewcountryshouldacceptthenewcultureandadapttotheirnewenvironment.Tobeginwith,byacceptingthenewnotionsandlifestyle,youcaneasilysurviveandenjoyacomfortablelifeandbewelladaptable.Moreover,itisanecessityforoverseasstudentstoadapttothenewcultu
11、reandsociety,becauseitmayimposeanadverseinfluenceontheirlivingandstudyiftheycannotbesociallyadaptable.Furthermore,toformaseparateminoritymaybringoutnegativeoutcomessuchashostilityandresentment.ItwillundoubtedlyeGertanegativeimpactonrelationshipbetweenpeoplefromdifferentnations.Someotherpeople,howeve
12、r,stronglyholdthatitisnecessarytoformagroupwiththeirownvaluesandlifestyleforseveralsoundreasons.Firstly,theyareinaforeigncountryandareactuallyaminoritywithlittlepower,manyofwhichevenhavenoequalrights.Therefore,itiswiseforthemtojointogethertoenhancetheirstrengthtocopewithsocialproblems.Secondly,byhel
13、pingeachotherinthegroup,peoplecanadapttothenewcommunityandsocietymoreeasilyandleadabetterlife.Thirdly,studentsinanewenvironmentmaymoreorlesshavephysicalorpsychologicalproblems,soitishelpfulforstudentstogettogethertohelpeachother.Fromtheabovediscussion,wecanseethatthereisactuallysometruthinbothstatem
14、ents.Personally,Iaminfavoroftheformerview.Adaptabilityisanimportantqualityforpeopleespeciallystudentswhoaregoingabroadtofurthertheireducation.Afterall,evenifyouformaseparateminority,youstillhavetoacceptthenewcultureandadapttothenewsettings.专家点评1.篇章结构合理，布局错落有致。第一段引出话题，第二和第三段分别陈述正反双方意见，最后一段采用“卒章显志”的手法
15、。（结尾才表达作者的明确立场）层次清晰，逻辑严密，说服力强。2.遣词到位,用词精准，搭配合理。善于换用同义或近义表达避免重复，使行文紧凑。如：inaforeigncountry，inanewcountry，inanewenvironment，adaptto，sociallyadaptable，adaptability,differentvaluesandlifestyle,newnotionsandlifestyle,newcultureandnewsettings等。3.句式有繁有简，体现较强的语言驾驭能力。语法功底扎实，表达清楚，文字连贯。（四个宾语从句、三个定语从句、三个状语从句、一个并
16、列句）4.路标明显。能准确运用英赛特雅思课堂讲授的经典表达方式和信号词，整篇文章一气呵成，浑然一体。笔者一贯提倡的“个性化八股文”再次得到淋漓尽致的体现。欧扬同学为非英语专业考生，取得写作8分的优异成绩，实属难能可贵。他的优异成绩说明，通过自身的努力，系统的培训和名师的点拨，非英专考生一样能取得雅思写作高分！经典8分范文之三TOPICSpaceresearch:anelusivedream?作者莫东一(中山大学学生)指导老师：英赛特雅思吴建业ThereisevidencethatagrowingnumberofcountrieshavebeeninvestinganastronomicalsumofmoneyinspaceeGplorationoverthepastdecades.Whetherspaceresearchisworthwhilehasalwaysbeenanissueofcontroversy.Somescientistsandpo
