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1、,情,作,景,文,人物描写,假如你是李华，你校英语校刊“Our Steps”的招聘 启事引起了你的兴趣，请根据下列信息用英文 写一封申请信。,第一节：情景作文（20分）,注意：1. 词数不少于60。2. 可根据需要适当增加细节。姓名：李华 性别： 男年龄：16 年级：高一 兴趣：摄影、写作、户外运动其他：活泼、开朗、精力充沛；曾获北京市摄影比赛青少年组二等奖应聘目的：参加社会实践活动，丰富业余生活3. 信的开头、结尾已给出。 Dear Harry,Im writing to apply for the photographer for Our Steps. _I am looking forw
2、ard to hearing from you.Yours Sincerely,Li Hua,审题：三审,一审人称：假如你是李华-第一人称 I 二审时态：申请信- 一般现在时 三审内容：要点细节,我的思考,1.是否需要添加细节，添加 多少细节为宜？2.如何使文章流畅自然,逻辑清晰?,本文的评分标准:,时态，人称是否正确；要点，细节是否完整时态人称错误 12分以下缺少要点 6-11分缺少1个细节 12-14分缺少2个细节 11分以下,本文的评分标准:,2. 语言驾驭能力如何句式，词汇单一 11分以下句式，词汇有一定变化 12-14分句式，词汇准确多样，行文流畅，逻辑清晰15分以上,对要点，细节的
3、整合，再造,词库,要点1. 姓名，性别，年龄，年级 1）Im Li Hua, a boy of sixteen, presently in my first year of high school. 2）Im a 16-year-old boy, named Li Hua. And Im studying in Senior One of our high school. Im Li Hua, a Senior One boy at the age of sixteen. Im Li Hua, a freshman in our high school, aged sixteen.,词库,要点
4、1. 开朗，活泼，精力充沛 + 可添加的细节 1）Active, outgoing and always full of energy, I consider myself the very person to apply for the job. 2) Im a boy ,active, outgoing and energetic. And I think I have the very qualities this job call for.,词库,要点2. 兴趣摄影，写作，户外运动，获奖情况+ 可添加的细节 My hobbies cover so many aspects such a
5、s photography, writing and having outdoor sports. In addition to photography, writing and outdoor activities are also my hobbies, which makes it possible for me to find beauty in nature as well as in our daily life. I also develop great interset in writing and sports outdoors which will be beneficia
6、l to the working process.,词库,要点2. 兴趣摄影，写作，户外运动，获奖情况+ 可添加的细节 It must be mentioned that I once won a second prize in the photography competition held in Beijing among teenagers. 5) What I prefer most is photographing, for Im willing to track every unforgettable moment with my camera and attempt to con
7、very some messages.,词库,要点3.参加社会实践活动，丰富业余生活+ 可添加的细节 1) I have longed for an activity that enables me to take part in social practice and enrich my after-class life and I think this job is definitely what I am looking for. 2) Our steps can definitely enrich my after- school life experience and it is c
8、ertain that to participate in social activities is to broaden my horizons as well as to promote my adaptability to society. 3) This job will provide me the chance to take part in social activities and community services, which enables me to enrich my after-school life.,参考范文（黄色为添加的细节）,Im Li Hua, a bo
9、y of sixteen, presently in my firstyear of high school. Im outgoing and energetic. Im interested in photography because it allows meto record the beautiful moments in my life. Last year I won the second prize in youth group at Beijing Photography Competition. Besides, Im good at writing, which might
10、 be helpful for the work. Taking part in all kinds of outdoor activities is also one of my hobbies.I would like to work for Our Steps since it would be a great opportunity for me to join in social activities and enrich my life.,Appendix I Tips for Ss 高考英文写作步骤： 三审三润三查,写作步骤一: 三审 一审人称： 二审时态： 三审内容：要点细节,一润句式 ：从句，非谓语，特殊句式等二润动词 ：使用准确，高级动词和词组， 丰富表达 三润过渡词：恰当的连接词和过渡词,Tips for Ss 写作步骤二: 三润,一查句子结构：查看句子结构是否完整， 有无主语谓语 二查动词： 查看动词时态，语态，三单和非谓语动词 三查其它： 名词-单复数变化代词 -格的正确使用冠词a, the, 零冠词连词-逗号后是否适当添加连词,Tips for Ss 写作步骤三: （语法）三查,Thank you！,
