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1、120132013 年年 1212 月大学英语四级考试真题月大学英语四级考试真题( (二二) ) Part 1 writing (30 minutes) For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay based on the picture below. You should start your essay with a brief account of the increasing use of the mobile phone in peoples life and explain the Consequ
2、ence of overusing it. You should write at least 120 words but no more than 180 words.People are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see.从批改网中选取的学生高分作文，希望同学们比较，鉴别，学习。 Excessively Utilizing Cell Phones As is revealed in the graph, it is a plain truth t
3、hat people are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and utilizing walking sticks in order to see. Consequently, there is no doubt that the phenomenon arouses public concern regarding this issue. To some extent, it is an undeniable fact that the cell phones is indispensable to our lives a
4、nd works. For instance, it is no exaggeration to say the cell phones undoubtedly shorten the distance of communication among people. On the contrary, the issue that people place more emphasises on the cell phones also exerts negative impacts on their lives. On the one hand, it is universally acknowl
5、edged that excessively utilizing cell phones is detrimental to the eyesight. On the other hand, excessively utilizing the cell phones imposes restrictions on daily life, which will make us pour more attentions to it instead of working. In my humble opinion, it is absolutely essential to take measure
6、s to alleviate this issue. Undoubtedly, what the most crucial thing we should bear in mind is that advantages far outweigh disadvantages. To summarize, laying more emphasises on the merits of the cell phones which will facilitate your life. (196 words) 计算机 田文雨 90 分(最高分) 批改网评 语：作者学术词汇使用比较准确，词汇表达较丰富，但
7、仍需增加词汇积累；作者句法 基础不错，可适当增加复杂句的使用；行文稍欠流畅，应适当增加连接词的使用；请 提高文章内敛性，段落和句子要围绕主题展开2The increasing use of the mobile phone in peoples life From the picture we can see that People are crossing the street looking at their cell phones and using walking sticks in order to see, which gives a big concern and discuss
8、ion in the society. We can draw a conclusion that people are so rely on their mobile phone that they can not leave it. A great number of factors can account for the phenomenon, but the following maybe the essential ones. First of all, with the development of economy, everyone can purchase a mobile p
9、hone. It is widely acknowledged that the master phone has a great many of functions, such as FeiXin and QQ and so on. Secondly, with the development of technology, people can obtain the information they need on the internet. There is no denying that people can be addicted to games. As a consequence,
10、 they are indulged in network. Last but not least, a majority of people have little consciousness of self-control, in the meantime, their families and friends can not afford enough time to supervise them. From my perspective, it is indispensable for us to have a phone, by which we can communicate wi
11、th others and can relieve our pressure. It is more important take measures to improve our ability to have a healthy lifestyle. Only one is aware that his life is being threatened would he starts to cultivate the conscious of self-control.（229 words） 政治高珊 珊，89 分，批改网评语：词文章词汇表达丰富，学术词汇积累做的也很棒；作者有一 定功底，可
12、在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆；全文结构较为严谨The overuseing of the cellphone This picture portrays an ironic situation, on the road, stands a man, who is completely concentrating on his cell phone whereas using a stick for direction, which implies the unprecedented popularity or even overusing of cell phones nowadays. Ex
13、aggerated as the picture is, the phenomenon behind it is rather thought-procking. With the development of high-tech equipment, especially smart phones, people in growing numbers tend to become addicted to the excessive use of them. According to a survey carried out in China Daily several days ago, a
14、lmost 47% of citizens explain that they would experience certain kind of anxiety without cellphones at hand. Meanwhile, the overusing of cellphones, firstly, would exert detrimental impact on the health of us. Whats worse, it would perform a negative character in interpersonal relationship since we
15、have less time to communicate. Judging from the evidence above, certain measures should be taken. Firstly, certain institutions in China should launch relevant campaigns to limit the excessive oust of cellphones. Moreover, we, as college students, should put emphasis on it right from ourselves as a
16、start. (176 words) 电气 王科 90 分(最高分) 批改网评语：文章用词灵活多样，学术 词汇使用也比较准确；能够很好的使用长难句且句法很棒；过渡词和衔接词使用的比 较不错 The overusing of cell phones This picture shows: on the road, stands a man, who is completely focus on his cellphone whereas using a stick for direction, which implies the unprecedented popularity or even overusing cell phones nowadays. 3Exaggerated as the picture is, the phenomenon behind it is rather thought-provoking. With the development of hig
