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1、 情景作文训练Review the writing task 假如你是红红星中学高三一班的学生。3月5日是学 雷锋锋日，你班组织组织 了一次帮扶活动动。请请根据下面四 幅图图所提供的活动动内容和过过程写一篇英文短文，为为 你校校刊英语专栏语专栏 投稿。senior citizens home 养老院What do you think of it?Passage 1Passage 1 Our class planned to organize an activity on March 5th, the day in memory of Lei Feng. On March 4th, our cl
2、ass held a class meeting to discuss where to go on March 5th. We decided to pay a visit to the senior citizens home. On March 5th, we did some cleaning in the senior citizens home. Some taught them learn English. Some of us put on performance for the old people. We said good-bye to them.Part I Probl
3、ems and solutionsIdentify the problemlIf you are asked to describe the feeling the writing gives to you as the picture below, which one would you like to choose?B.A.Part I Problems and solutionsStrategy 1Part I Problems and solutions通过增加细节使文章内容充实丰富 。 Part I Problems and solutions第一档18分20分完全完成了试题规试题规
4、 定的任务务。 覆盖了所有内容要点； 运用了多样样的句式和丰富的词汇词汇 ； 语语法或用词词方面有个别错误别错误 ，但为为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致；体现现了较较强的语语言运用能力； 有效地使用了语语句间间的连连接成分，所写内容连贯连贯 、结结构紧紧凑。 完全达到了预预期的写作目的。第二档15分17分完全完成了试题规试题规 定的任务务。 覆盖了所有内容要点； 运用的句式和词汇词汇 能满满足任务务要求； 语语法和用词词基本准确，少许错误许错误 主要为为尽可能表达丰富的内容所致； 使用了简单简单 的语语句间连间连 接成分，所写内容连贯连贯 。 达到了预预期的写作目的。第三档12分-14分基本完成了试
5、题规试题规 定的任务务。 覆盖了内容要点； 运用的句式和词汇词汇 基本满满足任务务要求； 语语法和用词词方面有一些错误错误 ，但不影响理解。 基本达到了预预期的写作目的。丰富的内容高考情景作文评分标准覆盖了所有内容要点；覆盖了所有内容要点；覆盖了所有内容要点；丰富的内容Learning aims At the end of the class, we will be able to 1. figure out what details are necessary for a passage; 2. improve our writing by adding necessary details
6、properly.Part I Problems and solutionsWhat do you think of it?Part I Problems and solutionsPassage 2: March 5 would come soon. We hadnt settled down the question of how we could help the elderly. So we sat together to exchange our mind. There were some ideas flashed through our mind.On March 5th, we
7、 went to the senior citizens home. We did some cleaning there. Some students mopped the floor, swept the floor and cleaned the mirror. In no time, everything was clean and bright. Some taught them learn English. Some of us put on performance for the old people. Finally, we said good-bye to them.We w
8、ere very tired but happy.3月5日是学雷锋日，你班组织了 一次帮扶活动。请根据下面四幅 图所提供的活动内容和过程写一 篇英文短文。假如你是红红星中学高三一班的学生。3月5日是学 雷锋锋日，你班组织组织 了一次帮扶活动动。请请根据下面四 幅图图所提供的活动动内容和过过程写一篇英文短文，为为 你校校刊英语专栏语专栏 投稿。Part I Problems and solutions Identify the problemIdentify problemPart I Problems and solutionsFinally, we said good-bye to them
9、.We were very tired but happy.Some students mopped the floor, swept the floor and cleaned the mirror. In no time, everything was clean and bright. Some taught them learnEnglish. Some of us put on performance for the old people.March 5 would come soon. We hadnt settled down the question of how we cou
10、ld help the elderly. So we sat together to exchange our mind. There were some ideas flashed through our mind. On March 5th, we went to the senior citizens home.Passage 2:We did some cleaning there.Part I Problems and solutions细节描述应围绕主题展开，突出重 点内容。Strategy 2Strategy 3Part I Problems and solutionsPassa
11、ge 2: March 5 would come soon. We hadnt settled down the question of how we could help the elderly. So we sat together to exchange our mind. There were some ideas flashed through our mind.On March 5th, we went to the senior citizens home.Finally, we said good-bye to them.We were very tired but happy
12、.Some students mopped the floor, swept the floor and cleaned the mirror. Some taught them learn English. Some of us put on performance for the old people.We did some cleaning there.In no time, everything was clean and bright.要点动作细节活动效果Part I Problems and solutions可通过下面这些细节描写使文章内容 丰富且生动：a. 具体动作细节的描写。
13、b. 活动效果的描写。Strategy 3c. 人物感受的描写。 SummaryPart I Problems and solutions增添细节围绕主题 突出重点动作描写 效果描写 感受描写Part II RewritingImprove your writing by adding necessary details. Part III Consolidation【2012东城一模】假设你是红星中学高二（1）班的班长李华，去年冬天你们 班开展了“为西藏希望小学献爱心”的活动。请根据以下四幅图的先后顺序，写 一篇英文短文向某中学生英语报投稿，介绍你们本次献爱心活动的全过程。Last wint
14、er, we carried out an activity themed “Helping the Children in the Hope Primary School in Tibet”. _ _3. Necessary details?1. Topic?2. Key points?How to express feelings lI really felt happy about what we did that day. By helping others, we ourselves actually gained a lot.lTired as we were, we felt h
15、appy to see smiles on their faces.lWe had a good time with the elderly. What we did has brought joy to the elderly people and enriched our own lives.How to express feelingslThrough this social activity, I realized when bringing happiness to others you can also feel happy. What an enjoyable and meani
16、ngful activity. lAlthough our legs were like jelly, we realized that we can make ourselves useful to those who need help and care. Last winter, we carried out an activity themed “Helping the Children in the Hope Primary School in Tibet”. In the class meeting, we watched CCTV news and learned about what the lif
