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1、英语写作中如何详加描述详加描述是常见的“增加细节”的方法，这不仅可以使文章词数达标也可以使文章内容充实、结构连贯、语意顺畅。目的有详有略，主次分明方法根据提示要求，首先确定主要点和次要点，然后在主要点上着笔泼墨。除了可以用扩展句子的方式外，还可把一些主要点分开详述，从而提升这些要点的分量特色详略得当，重点突出典例观摩悟法下面是一位考生的习作，请进行修改，以充实文章、突出主题。一家英语报社向中学生征文，主题是“我理想的大学生活”，请根据下列要求和你的畅想完成短文。1专业与课程； 2.老师与同学； 3.学校活动。注意：1.词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3开头语已给出，不计入总词
2、数。I often imagine what my life will be like in my dream university. 学生习作(得分16分)I often imagine what my life will be like in my dream university. Ill be admitted to Peking University and major in English. I can choose a variety of courses, such as English literature.The professor there will be friend
3、ly and devoted to their teaching. Besides, Ill have lovely and caring classmates. In our spare time, various activities will be held to build up our courage and experience, such as parties and competitions.分析该文虽然把题干中给出的三个要点一一列出，结构清晰，还使用了一些高级词汇如be admitted to, a variety of, be devoted to, various等。然而
4、由于简单罗列要点，全文只有约70词，且缺少连贯性，未能完全完成试题规定的任务。下面是修改升格完成后的作文，请注意加黑句子对充实文章、突出主题的作用。I often imagine what my life will be like in my dream university. As far as I can imagine, Ill be admitted to Peking University, where Ill major in English. I can choose a variety of courses, which will help me improve my spok
5、en English and have a better understanding of foreign cultures.The professors there will be friendly and devoted to their teaching, with whose help not only can I enrich my knowledge but also I can broaden my horizons. In addition, Ill have lovely and caring classmates. Well compete in our study and
6、 be close friends in our daily life.In our free time, various activities will be held to build up our courage and experience, such as parties and competitions.Im sure my college life will be rich and colorful.分析修改后的文章篇幅适中(120 words)，要点齐全、内容充实、语言丰富、句式多样、行文连贯，而且详略得当，主题突出。文中“详加描述”合情合理(见加黑部分)，尤其是最后一句与文章
7、首句照应，结构显得非常紧凑。总之，要想使文章充实、连贯，就需要“适当增加细节”。但是，这些细节的增加需要结合体裁、主题以及行文走向，“画龙点睛”式地增加，绝不能毫无节制地乱加一气，以免冲淡主题，模糊文意，甚至“跑偏了”主题。实战练习：升格考生习作I. 请对考生习作进行修改，以充实文章、突出主题。(2020承德模拟)假定你是李华，最近你的英国笔友James发来邮件说他的第一本小说出版了，并给你寄来了样书(sample copy)。请用英语给他回一封邮件，内容如下：1表示祝贺；2感谢赠书；3希望提些写作建议。注意：1.词数100左右(开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数)；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连
8、贯。Dear James， Yours sincerely，Li Hua考生习作一：Dear James，Im very excited and inspired by the news that your first novel has been published.Id like to thank you for mailing a sample copy of your novel to me. By the way, Im also very interested in writing and I am anxious to know how to choose a good topi
9、c for a novel and develop it. Will you give me some advice?Im looking forward to your early reply.Yours sincerely，Li HuaII. 请对考生习作进行修改，以充实文章、突出主题。(2019全国卷)假定你是李华，暑期在伦敦学习，得知当地美术馆要举办中国画展览。请写一封信申请做志愿者，内容包括：1写信目的；2个人优势；3能做的事情。注意：1.词数100左右；2可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3结束语已为你写好。 Yours，Li Hua考生习作二Dear Sir/Madam，Im Li
10、 Hua, a middle school student from China. Im writing to apply to be a volunteer of the exhibition of traditional Chinese paintings at the local art museum.First of all, I am greatly interested in paintings. More importantly, I consider it a good chance to spread Chinese culture and develop my abilit
11、y. So I think I am highly qualified for the job.Looking forward to your reply.Yours，Li HuaLooking forward to your reply.Yours，Li HuaThe key: 升格考生习作一：Dear James，Im very excited and inspired by the news that your first novel has been published. Id like to offer my sincere congratulations to you on you
12、r great success.Actually, I have witnessed your progress with admiration all these years, and I can imagine how much effort you have put into your writing. Besides, Id like to thank you for mailing a sample copy of your novel to me. I can hardly wait to read it. By the way, Im also very interested i
13、n writing and I am anxious to know how to choose a good topic for a novel and develop it. Will you give me some advice?Im looking forward to your early reply.Yours sincerely，Li Hua升格考生习作二：Dear Sir/Madam，Im Li Hua, a middle school student from China, who is studying in London in summer holidays. Im writing to apply to be a volunteer of the exhibition of traditional Chinese paintings at the local art museum. Here are my advantages.First of all, I am greatly interested in paintings. I have received some professional trainings in my spare
