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1、初三下作文讲评一,About the Spring Festival,开学测试作文,春节是中国最重要的节日。人们通常有7天假期，家人团聚，互相拜访亲朋好友。小孩子能得到压岁钱和新衣服，还能放鞭炮。春节是个快乐的节日。请简单谈谈中国的春节，并谈谈你家是如何过春节的？春节期间你都做了些什么高兴事？ 提示词语：New Years Eve （除夕）；get together; relative（亲戚）; ；New Years money (压岁钱)； set off firework(放鞭炮);,主要问题,审题不透，对要点分析不准 文章段落、层次不清 时态混乱，前后不一致 基本的语法错误多，如介词的使
2、用；过去时态的动词形式,Correct the mistakes:,1.Im very like the Spring Festival. 2.Everyone have new clothes. 3.We were visited the relatives got together. 4.We had lunch in there. 5.In the New Years Eve 6.I and my sisters went to setten off fireworks. 7.My spring festival was happy.,例文一,The Spring Festival is
3、 the most important festival in China.People always get together to have big meals and visit relatives. Children can get New Years money , wear new clothes and set off fireworks. On this New Years Eve, my family stayed at home. We watched TV together and talked about the happy things all around the
4、year.My father cooked a lot of delicious food for us, and we all enjoyed,ourselves very much. During the Spring Festival, we did a lot of things. On the first day, we went to visit my grandparents. They were very happy to see us. I did some cleaning for my grandparents and then they gave me the New
5、Years money.On the second day ,my mother took me to a bookstore. I bought many books that I liked so much.In the evenings ,I set off fireworks with my father. The fireworks looked so beautiful in the sky.,These were the happy things which I did during the Spring Festival. I had a happy time with my
6、family. I love the Spring Festival.,（182 words ; By 常媛） 可再简洁些 可适当使用连接词，使句式多些变化。,例文二,The Spring Festival is one of the most important festivals in China. People in China are all looking forward to it every year.We have a 7-day vacation during the festival. Families will get together on the New Years
7、Eve and eat dumplings together. People visit their relatives and friends,kids will get New Years money and new clothes. The most interesting thing is to set off fireworks, it/ they color the night sky very beautiful.,In my family, we have lots of things to do. We tidy our home and write Chunlian. I
8、also got New Years money this year. I want to buy a new MP3 for me/ myself and save others / the else in the bank.Whats more， I saw my primary school friends this year, that made me very happy. Everyone loves the Spring Festival. Me,too.,（140 words By 刘海一 语言灵活，表达较丰富。要点1内容较多，可转移部分进要点2，更符合题意。）,例文三,Spe
9、nding the Spring Festival with my whole family is the best thing in my life. The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China. People usually get together with their relatives and have dinner with the family on New Years Eve!The dinner on New Years Eve is the nicest dinner of the year. I
10、really enjoy this special meal. In my opinion, getting New Years money and setting off fireworks are the most interesting things. /This year, my brothers and I set off lots of,fireworks. I enjoyed it because I have looked forward to doing it for a year！Then, its time to get the New Years money! I ha
11、ve a big family so I got lots of New Years money. I think I am very lucky because I can play with my 4 brothers and get lots of New Years money. The Spring Festival is really important for the children. I hope I can be happier next year/Spring Festival.,167 words-By 杨子杰（有自己的观点，句子使用较灵活。）,例文四,The Spri
12、ng Festival is the most important festival in China. We have many things to do and we can get lots of fun. During the Spring Festival, my family always get together and visit relatives.We always watch TV and clean our home on New Years Eve and in the evening, I always set off fireworks. Mother, fath
13、er and I all like fireworks and we are very happy. I can get some New Years money during the Spring Festival. I use the money to buy some books and papers, (because )they are helpful with my study.,Mother ,father and I have a good time during the Spring Festival.Because of it,we love each other more
14、 and know each other better.,（119 wordsby 藏春龙。文章较简练，有自己的特点，可再丰富一下要点。）,Learn from your partner.,互相阅读同桌或小组成员作文。 找出优、缺点，作出自己的评价。 提出修改意见。,Homework,继续修改自己的作文，并写在写作本上。 相关扩展词汇： red packets, celebrate, New Year scrolls , known as the Chinese New Year, “Have all your wishes ”, decorate, 阅读两篇相关文章.,Far and awa
15、y the most important holiday in China is Spring Festival, also known as the Chinese New Year. To the Chinese people it is as important as Christmas to people in the West. the dates for this annual celebration are determined by the lunar calendar, so the timing of the holiday varies from late January
16、 to early February. To the ordinary Chinese, the festival actually begins on the eve of the lunar,New Years Day and ends on the fifth day of the first month of the lunar calendar. But the 15th of the first month, which normally is called the Lantern Festival, means the official end of the Spring Festival in many parts of the country.,Spring Festival is the most important and popular festival in China.Before Spring Festival ,the people usually clean and decorate their houses.And they go to t
