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1、AWildernessSurvivalProgram高中英语作文 Saturday,May4,cloudy LiMingandItookpartinawildernesssurvivalprogramyesterday,andithasbeenoneofthemostunforgettableexperiencessincehighschool. Thetwoofusweretoreachthecampsitebytheevening.Wesetoutearlyinthemorning,eagertofacetheadventure.Iwascarringacampandapassinmyba
2、g,whileLiMingloadedhiswithsomebread,matches,candles,amap,aknife,afirstaidkit,aflashlight,andsomeclothes.Wefollowedthemarkedrouteuntilwereachedabrook.Wehadtoswimacrossit,floatingoursuppliesonapieceofwoodinordertokeepthemdry.Whatsworse,welostsightofthesignsontheothersideofthebrookThankstothecampass,we
3、finallyarrivedatthecampsiteontime,andmanagedtomakethecampandafire. Thetwoofusspentthenightintheforest. WelearnedtouseknowledgegainedinclASSroomtrainingtosolveproblems.Itwasquiteanexperienceforusboth,whichIllneverforgetfortherestofmylife. 一、得分:24 点评:这是一份优秀作文体现在如下几个方面; 1、文笔流畅显示了作者扎实的基本功当你读这篇小文时你会觉得很舒服
4、不会产生厌倦的感觉; 2、要点齐全能将提示中的各项要求很好地安排到作者写的小文中而且还不流俗一般同学在叙及所携带的物品时贯用wetookalotofthingssuchas或HeandItook的方式此文作者不然他用了Iwascarryingacampandapassinmybag,whileLiMingloadedhiswithsomebread这个一个并列句令人耳目一新: 3、上下文衔接比较自然这种自然表现在两个方面;一方面是作者写的内容间的衔接另一方面是作者写的内容与原日记已给出部分的衔接与上文的衔接作者用了一个betodo的形式Thetwoofusweretoreachthepsite
5、bytheevening.wesetoutearlyinthemorning,eagertofacetheadvenfure.与下文的衔接时又用了这样一句andmanagedtomakethecampandafire,短文之间的衔接随处可见比如作者写道Wefollowedthemarkedrouteuntilwereachedabrook.Wehadtoswimacrossit,welostsightofthesignsontheothersideofthebrookThankstothepass,we. 4、短文能很好体现作者驾驭语言的能力比如前边提到的betodo句形Whatsmore作为过渡句的处理Thanksto的出现等; AWildernessSurvivalProgram高中英语作文相关文章: